1 [Report This]Date: December 05, 2020 12:09 pm Title: Chapter 4
This is interesting. The relationships are a bit confusing, though. Are Jim and Karen together? Ig they’re Not, how come she doesn’t know it? And what’s Jim’s angle with Pam? We know he likes her, but he’s not totally single. Very interested in reading what comes next. Can’t wait!
Author's Response: All of this will work itself out. Karen has a very different idea of what her “relationship” with Jim is, then what Jim thinks it is. They’re 18, impressionable, and trying to stake claim on what is “theirs” in college. Jim definitely likes Pam, but he’s uncertain (until now) if she feels the same, and he’s not wanting Pam to know too much about his past. More of this will come out as we go! Thank you so much for your reviews!
Date: December 04, 2020 05:12 pm Title: Chapter 4
And into the drama we go. Karen seems like in her last year of high school she was queen bee and everyone knew it. She got what she wanted and would dare anyone to get in her way. However it also seems Jim is more than over this posessive streak of Karen's. He's clearly more into the softly beautiful Pam and it's lovely. The build-up over a few weeks before a kiss also seems nice. They take some time to get to know each other before taking further steps. Love it. Also love the fact that Jim is instantly on board with supporting Pam's art. Lovely scene to envision. Nice job.
Author's Response: You are spot on with Karen, Eric, and we’ll continue to see that throughout some of this story. But Jim, who may be holding back a little bit of the truth himself, has become quite smitten with Pam. That perfect little thing, gosh I love writing them young. Thank you for your reviews, I LOVE them.
1 [Report This]Date: December 04, 2020 02:43 pm Title: Chapter 4
Wow, Karen. You lying liar pants. Very interested to see where you're going with her character with this choice - feels like there's a lot of story to tell with their high school relationship.
That first kiss was VERY cute. And I love the idea that Pam is unwittingly drawing his eyes!
The details in this are good. You've done well making them feel like real college freshmen, a little lonely and a little confused and still learning how adult relationships work and mildly terrified about what's going to happen to all their possessions if they piss off their roommate.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I love writing young Jim, Pam and Karen, even though she definitely sees the past different. And it’s possible Jim may not be being entirely truthful with what’s going on with him either. A lot more to come, thank you for your regular reviews they make me so happy!