Date: June 26, 2021 07:11 am Title: Chapter 5- Pam's Casa
I thought you did well here finding organic little moments for their past to come up. Feels realistic that she wouldn't so much stop and let the memories wash over her as much as various moments in the process would end up recalling different times she'd thought about this night.
I thought the Snoopy sheets were a nice detail - good mixture of comic and exploring the sexual tension between them. And Pam not *quite* being able to manage her shoes is VERY Pam Beesly.
Author's Response: Thank you for your time and review. I project myself in "Pam" and have had my own share of klutz experiences of heels, so this one came from that. I am glad you liked my little moments of flashbacks where they both still get stuck in Past and then try to center back to present. I am the worst person in writing anything sexual but you guys have been extremely supportive with whatever subtle stuff I could come up with.
1 [Report This]Date: June 23, 2021 04:36 am Title: Chapter 5- Pam's Casa
I've just been catching up on this - I love a good fic about what happens after Pam says yes, and this one is so sweet! Although I also like the small notes of angst throughout (like Pam remembering her hair in this chapter, ouch), which I think feels very true to the fact that they haven't magically resolved everything at this point and still have stuff to talk about. I really like all the attention to detail with Pam's outfit in this one, her knowing that Jim fell in love with her in her boring work clothes, and the fact that she's wearing the shoes she got with the money from her wedding shoes - it's great. And I love their Snoopy exchange at the end, and where his thoughts jumped to with what Pam was saying, hehe. Can't wait to see what their date is like!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review. You are one of my favorite write here so hearing from you is like a fan moment. I feel so happy that you like the slight angst among the sweet moments. I have added the link to Pam's dress and I hope you get time to check that out. It makes me so warm that you picked on little details of her shoes and snoopy sheets, I am not very good with suggestive dialogues or thoughts so it's good to know that you liked my version there. I hope you like the date, once I finally get around it.
1 [Report This]Date: June 21, 2021 05:20 pm Title: Chapter 5- Pam's Casa
So great that you updated this story. Can’t wait to read more.
Of course I needed a visual of Pam’s clothes, but the link doesn’t work 🤷🏻r05;a92;a039; I’ll just use my imagination
Author's Response:
I am so sorry about the stupid link. I don't understand why it is not working. It is such a nice picture of Jenna so I was really hoping I could share that with everyone. I am gonna figure that out though :)
I am glad you liked the update. Thank you !!
Date: June 21, 2021 04:21 pm Title: Chapter 5- Pam's Casa
An adorable mix of nervous and playful. They're both on pin and needles because this is a BIG thing for them. After all this time they're finally starting out really together. Why wouldn't they be nervous and analyzing everything.
Pam's speech about the flowers felt very heartfelt. Her asking him to pin up her favorite flower in her hair was swoon worthy. Just wonderful.
The tour was fun. We could feel the tension in her room. I don't think Jim would mind the Snoopy sheets. He probably thinks it adds more to a home like feeling.
Can't wait to see how the rest of the night goes.
Author's Response:
I am so glad you liked the flower speech. It took me an hour to get it right (though I wish I could get it better). And that flower in her hair was my favorite part too so thank you! I was toying with creating the right tension, maintaining the T rating and not sounding too cliche. I am excited about the night though, still in works ;)
You are such a religious reviewer, Thank you for being my incredible source of motivation !!