1 [Report This]Date: May 14, 2021 06:26 pm Title: Waiting on a Sunset
Beautiful story. Really hard subject, but your writing made it so compelling. Thank you
Author's Response: Thank you so much. This was my first foray into the angst-driven story. I usually write fluffier. I'm so pleased that you enjoyed reading it. Thanks for reaching out. It's always so nice to hear from fellow MTTers.
1 [Report This]Date: April 10, 2021 07:13 pm Title: Waiting on a Sunset
These decisions here feel like a more natural and less dramatic development than in the show... it seems like we got a much better sense of the push and pull on Jim in particular and how he arrives at the decision that he does than we did in canon, where a lot of his decisions helpful and less-than-helpful just seem very abrupt. You still get the big gesture, but it feels earned by this particular storyline and not just by the relationship as a whole, and it's accompanied by some actual conversation.
This also makes the very deus-ex-machina-y Pam-changing-her-mind-in-the-finale thing feel a lot more natural.
Love the callbacks to their history too, both the canon and what you've created. I thought the bookending sunsets was a lovely image, and you can really see them in this moment.
I know it's hard to click the completed button, but I think this one is worthy of going on the shelf - kudos to you for taking it on!
(The idk on the last chapter was just because I felt like I didn't have much to say! It was just well done!)
Author's Response:
Thank you kindly. What I always aim for is that dose of realism (even if the show itself was sometimes a little far-fetched) so your review is truly a great compliment.
I may have mentioned before, I get some pretty magnificent sunsets where I live and a great inspiration for the scenes with them. Glad you enjoyed.
I feel different now that I have a season 9 fic under my belt. Like I've gained a perspective by having written something with all that angst.
thanks for being a reader and reviewer even when busy. (I get you too - sometimes a story is well done and powerful but you really aren't sure what you can say in the review - but even just a jellybean and a good job is so delightful to receive so many thanks for that)
Thanks for your support always.
1 [Report This]Date: April 10, 2021 03:45 am Title: Waiting on a Sunset
Ahh, this was such a perfect ending 😍 I really liked both of them coming to the realisation at the same time, the 'I'm waiting on a sunset line' was just perfection, and then the entire scene in the park with the sunset, and the re-working of some of the lines from canon, all worked so beautifully. I also loved the description of their different kisses. I think I'm with you here that they both made mistakes/had things to learn - I think you've captured that in this fic so well, in a way that feels very realistic and touching. I loved all of this!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much - I'm so glad you liked the ending. Like I said -it kind of was the ending the show had for them - I just sped it along a bit and so why not use the canon dialogue.
There were 3 elements that were in place from the minute I started working on this story and one of them was how it would end with them watching the sunset. The line came soon after - way before the final chapter was written - I love that it stood out for you.
The kisses part was also one of the parts I really liked writing- especially since I got to reference the questionable real first kiss...yes in my mind it counts.
I'm so happy you were along for the journey of this story. Always thrills me to hear when readers enjoy what was in my head.
Cheers!
1 [Report This]Date: April 09, 2021 04:22 pm Title: Waiting on a Sunset
So... this was everything I hoped it would be. I love how you popped the dialogue from the Finale in there - in this context it also works so well. As ever, you nailed the characterisations, I can hear their voices in my head as they speak.
It was just lovely and heart warming to be honest, even in the darker moments - as I said in an earlier review, one can feel all the love between them and that never goes away. All the good JAM things in this story and reflecting on the whole thing, I think you built it to a perfect crescendo. Brava!
Author's Response:
I'm so glad you enjoyed the ending and felt they still were themselves as they came to this alternate resolution.
I'm so glad what came out through the while story, even through their difficulties was their love, but also the effort they needed to put in to get to this place of understanding.
Thanks for your many reviews (which are like Gold).
1 [Report This]Date: April 09, 2021 10:31 am Title: Waiting on a Sunset
"I'm waiting on a sunset." If that's not just the perfect line for all of this, I don't know what is. Seriously, that one line was just perfection.
Jim's thoughts as he waited for her were really nice to see. How he's really realized that nothing is more important that her and his family. He realized how close he was to losing it and how he'll do anything to hold onto it now. Lovely.
Pam being surprised he's not in Philly was kind of nice. It gave us that wonderful set up in the park as well as some time for her to clear her head too.
I kind of liked how you shifted things to a centered layout when they're at the park. After all this time being apart, it was a nice cue that they're finally together. Also it was kind of fun to have a role reversal of the parking lot hug. Pam is the one to start and it take Jim a second to catch up. Great was to stay on theme, but give it your own touch.
Speaking of that, it really feels like they're finally on the same page again. I'm sure there will be more conversations to be had. The wounds they've inflicted on each other took time to get there, and they'll take time to heal, but this is a big way of going down that path of healing. Hopefully a few 'nice mornings too,' so soothe things over. ;)
Great way to wrap this one up. It was really interesting getting their internal thoughts out like this. It showed that yes they had issues, but they're also strong enought to work through them. Great job.
Fortes Fortuna Adiuvat
Author's Response:
Thanks - I've never achieved perfection in a fic before - really you are too kind.
You got it - you knew exactly what my intention was in the change to the format. I knew you would!
Yeah, I wanted to include the hug but it wasn't going to work in the original format. I also felt like in the show while it was beautiful and I loved it and as I mention it was all part of the bigger plot device, but to me it seemed just not quite enough to fix it all (I guess that all happened off camera) so I added the line to speak to that.
I'm so glad you enjoyed this one.
Thanks as always.