1 [Report This]Date: April 17, 2021 01:15 pm Title: Dundie
I love the way you write this. How it's after they get together but we still get the flashbacks and emotions from the years before. So, so good.
Author's Response: Thanks! I wasn't sure if the format was working properly, I'm so glad you like it!
1 [Report This]Date: April 17, 2021 11:06 am Title: Dundie
You've done well identifying the simple joys of their relationship here, like Jim being able to look at her as much as he wants. And I always appreciate people acknowledging how invasive the camera crew is into their ordinary lives.
But what I really liked about this was the flashback to the 2004 Dundies! In a fandom with a lot of well-traveled ground, this is a relatively unexplored area - I can't actually recall anyone digging into it before. Kudos on finding new territory. And the details of it are good... I love Pam having consciously or subconsciously chosen his car to hide by, and the idea that this moment doesn't really go too far considering where their pre-canon relationship must be.
P.S. WHY 42 DOUGHNUTS? This will haunt me.
Author's Response: Hahaha WHO KNOWS? We'll never know the way Michael's brain works! And thank you so much for the kind words :) I love the idea Jim would always put her feelings first, even when his own heart is breaking.
1 [Report This]Date: April 17, 2021 10:45 am Title: Dundie
I love this. You’re putting lots of great detail in that fixes some of the things I was always sad and frustrated about. I love that they are having those conversations.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading!
1 [Report This]Date: April 17, 2021 10:42 am Title: Dundie
How do you do it? I mean seriously? How do you weave fluff and angst together this seemlessly? Opening with them getting out of bed together like that. Then to transition not to the Dundie night from canon but the year before that? I mean that was inspired! Wonderful to see that bit of their history come to life even if it was also a bit heartbreaking.
Then their quips to each other at the end? Just perfection. Bravo! This one was amazing.
Author's Response: It's funny, Jim and Pam are such a fluffy couple but their angst, when it pops up, is SO delicious. I really appreciate your compliment on the way I'm trying to do both throughout. Thank you so much!
1 [Report This]Date: April 17, 2021 10:09 am Title: Dundie
You're brilliant. Okay? It's important to me that you know that.
When I read the line "It hits him then that of all the cars in the parking lot, his is the one she’d sat down next to." I literally had to get up and walk around for a minute before I could keep reading. You set up the flashback *so* incredibly well, especially considering we only get a small taste of that night on the show. You are so insightful with the way you unpack Pam's thoughts about Roy and knowing that he would only care about his pride and his image, not about her. And then that simple, beautiful line at the end just hit me DEEP in the feels.
I need more chapters, please.
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! And more are coming!