Date: May 03, 2021 06:24 pm Title: Plans
You know, Roy is absolutely the guy who doesn't ask for his longtime girlfriend's father's blessing after dating her for seven years, and not at all for "she's not her father's property and it's none of his business" reasons. I also like you working in the hints of the trouble in Pam's parents marriage ahead and Jim's subtle feelings about pride about being better than Roy.
You've got a really good sense of these characters - the bit about Jim feeling something of a pang about Pam chasing her dreams mostly related to himself seems very plausible and maybe like something they should have included.
The flashback is just lovely.
But the ending. Wow. She was drawing him the whole time, and she can finally acknowledge why! SO sweet. And this: “You were with Roy." “No. I was really with you.” That's just this really clear, gorgeous, clean way to summarize their first few years. It's a great line.
1 [Report This]Date: May 03, 2021 09:42 am Title: Plans
I should be working right now, or at the very least working on my own updates but instead I spent the morning reading all 7 chapters you've posted of this and it's been time absolutely well spent.
You're so good at this. I'm in love with the cozy world you've built for Jim and Pam. The flashbacks perfectly provide backstory as needed, and I'm always a sucker for seeing them outside of the office.
Okay, I didn't hate seeing them IN the office in that PDA chapter. Didn't mind that at all.
And that line you wrote a few chapters back? The one about him kissing her half a decade deep? That's going to ruin me for at least another 3 hours.
I really want to end this review with "this was great, babe" but I also don't want you to think I'm creepy. I promise I'm not - ask almost anyone here. But I am now a big fan of this story, so I can't wait to see what you have in store for us next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, your review made my day!
Date: May 03, 2021 09:19 am Title: Plans
As brilliant as you are with working in the angsty memories, I loved this fluffier flashback. (Boy, that's a good alliteration.) You still made things super real and beautiful with the ending scene. The line “No. I was really with you.” just stopped me in my tracks. You are really making me like Jim and Pam more with this story, and I was already obsessed with them.
Joining the discord is pretty easy: you just click on "my account" at the top of the site, and "join our discord" is the first link.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I’m used to writing Mulder and Scully so angst is typically my jam. But Jim/Pam are really allowing me to explore that fluffier part of myself. And thanks for your comment on the “I was really with you” because that was my favorite part of this chapter. :)
Date: May 03, 2021 08:39 am Title: Plans
I really liked this one. Jim being nervous around William and Helene tracks for me. After everything they've gone through it would make sense there would be some hesitation from other members of their families. I really liked the conversation Jim and William had. Nice bit there where William says Jim is the first to ask for his blessing and other revelations.
A not-so-angsty flashback this time. Loved it. Nice way to put in that their relationship is growing and as such they should be talking about it.
Jim being 100% behind her about Pratt is just great. However her saying that despite everything she was his during S3 is just so sweet with just a touch of angst. Yes that was a hard time for them, but they're also opening up about it and talking about their true feelings. The image I have of that blue and pink drawing of them is also lovely.
Great work with this one.