Date: May 09, 2021 01:34 pm Title: Wait
Ok so this one left me a delightful pile of mush. Your ability to go past the show and more into the non-seen moments is on full display here. Her feeling bummed out about her classes and missing Jim. The flashback where they're honest with each other. And of course the rain-soaked gas station are all just so beautiful. The thoughts and feelings going through her head through everything are a joy to read. Thank you for this one, it was great!
Date: May 08, 2021 06:28 pm Title: Wait
I like the idea that Pam's pretty frustrated with graphic design long before she gets her grades and we're just not seeing it because she's hiding it from both the cameras and Jim. In canon it comes off as a bit of a "look, we're obviously not writing Pam off the show move," and this adds a lot of foundation to it. Also appreciate the context for why she agreed to have the cameras follow her.
TOTALLY not the flashback I thought we were going to get, but a good one... and I love that we end up getting a call-forward to Niagara here!!!! This was a lovely moment, and I'm glad you let us see it.
"The last time he’d visited the office there had been a Twinkie eating contest which Oscar had been very loudly and inappropriately excused from by Michael for reasons that were apparent to everyone." LOL. I can very easily picture that incident and Pam describing it.
Date: May 08, 2021 10:44 am Title: Wait
Ran out of jellybeans! Fantastic chapter for my shipper heart. Great work, really enjoying these.
Author's Response: thank you so much! sorry, i’ve been crap at replying to these but I really appreciate the feedback!
1 [Report This]Date: May 08, 2021 09:00 am Title: Wait
Oh how I loved this chapter...from the way you addressed her dislike of the courses she was taking, the ones that pulled her away from him, to her expressing her disappointment at his delay in the proposal. I am so glad he explains he had planned to do it and Andy "schruted" it. I am pretty sure that revelation came out in canon even if we never did see it.
And the flashback was beautiful- making the rest-stop something more meaningful than just a rest stop at exit 17. Oh and you should add this story to the Exploding Soda Challenge.
The addition of this...
Sometimes the simplest, most ordinary things are the most beautiful.
to what we see of the proposal is just gorgeous as is that he has shared how he has had the ring a year.
This story has been a joy to read so thanks for sharing your vision.
Author's Response: Hi, I've been so bad at responding to these... I'm new to MTT, so what is the Exploding Soda Challenge? And thanks for your review!
Date: May 08, 2021 08:27 am Title: Wait
I'm always so impressed by the scenes you choose for the flashbacks and how you relate them so well to the present day. I had wondered if there was something a little more special about that rest stop besides the soda explosion, and I love how you made that moment and that location more meaningful for them before the proposal.
And then the last line was absolutely brilliant. Very true to Jim and Pam.