Date: June 01, 2021 05:10 am Title: Forever
Correction - threefold use of title - since it is also the name of the song that played
1 [Report This]Date: May 31, 2021 03:16 pm Title: Forever
I think one of my favorite things about this chapter was the double play of the title. It's was the perfect tie together of the flash back and the present.
All of th metal pictures they spoke of were delightful fun. The sweetness of how he will continue to call her Beesley, the way she explains Michaels behavior to him (love that she gets him to be able to and you know I'm a slight sucker for the Pam/Michael relationship). Love what he says to Jim the night before
It's perfect That the producers and camera people saw it all before them and know how strong the bond is.
This line tickled me I’ve only ever showed off for you. The cameras just happened to be there.” PBS was lucky Pam was there because they would never had gotten even half the performance out of him had she no been.
Laughed out loud about the painting looking at them and lovely to end with Cece and Stanley. Oh and btw- there are some names we are never to mention in bed.
Well done as always. Wish I had some jelly beans left to give you.
Date: May 31, 2021 02:29 am Title: Forever
I loved this. The flashback, the wedding night. All so beautifully written. You also captured the moment that the being we now know to be Cece kicked in a well observed moment.
JK had flu and didn’t want to pass it on to JF. Is that right? Says a lot of about their friendship and his thoughtfulness, very sweet. They still managed to make it look ridiculously cute.
Date: May 30, 2021 06:36 pm Title: Forever
So this is delightful. This whole thing you've got of going further than what we see in canon is done just so very very well. The banter they share between each other while laying in bed. Taking more mental pictures. I loved how Jim said his was going to be on the cover. Brilliant and 100% in character. They're finally at the beginning of the their life as a married couple and it's beautiful.
The flashback to the first day of filming was great too. How even back then Pam knew there was something special about Jim. About how he made her feel when compared to everything else. I really liked getting the other side of the conversation in Pam's talking head. How her realization that Jim pays that close attention to her threw her off the way it did. It's a great way of showing how deep her feelings to him were running even back then.
More mental pictures when we return to their wedding night were delightful. And first baby kicks! It really feels like a special moment for them and you wrote it wonderfully. Outstanding job with this chapter. It was great.
Author's Response: Thanks! Expanding on the canon is my favorite kind of fanfic so I’m glad you like those parts.
Date: May 30, 2021 10:39 am Title: Forever
Okay, so I may have mentioned, I've got a personal hobbyhorse about the impact of the documentary on this story, so I really love what you did with this chapter, exploring the ways in which it's changed their behavior and maybe the course of their story and their attitudes towards it and how they've changed. It's *really* interesting to think of the documentary as a factor in forcing Pam to acknowledge what was going on with her and Jim, especially knowing how she reacts in the first two seasons when someone else seems to notice their connection.
You also did well capturing the sheer giddiness and strangeness of them finally having reached this point in their journey - you've captured the Niagara vibe well.
And there are a lot of fun details you've worked into this: the inappropriate mental picture, the painting, Pam's understanding of Michael and ability to make Jim understand him. Plus Jim's line about writing a very strongly worded letter is peak Jim.
Author's Response: Thanks! The documentary crew is going to continue to have a strong presence in the story so I’m glad you’re enjoying that angle.
Date: May 29, 2021 09:05 pm Title: Forever
Girl. I am at a loss for words because you've freaking done it again. Their post-wedding scenes were just all kinds of adorable and romantic and sweetly funny, but you COMPLETELY blew me away with the scenes from the pilot. You captured the season 1 feel of the show so so so perfectly. Here are some of the lines that I particularly liked.
"She sits at reception and for the first few hours, she has to remind herself not to behave like the cameras are there. She feels restless and observed, which is a far cry from the way she usually feels for the most part: ignored and unnoticed."
WOW. If that doesn't capture Pam perfectly, idk what does.
"She tries to ignore that fluttery feeling she gets in her stomach whenever Jim pays attention to her. She’s used to it by now, but it still gives her a secret thrill every time."
You gave me butterflies right along with Pam with this line.
This was seriously so good. You enhance your fluff SO well with the angst from their past that it makes me almost like angst. (Don't tell anyone I said that.)