Reviews For Tan Lines
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Reviewer: Basscop69 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 28, 2021 04:26 am Title: Chapter 1

This was amazing! I feel like there’s not enough honeymoon fic out there, and this was so lovely to read: the perfect mix of steam and sweetness. I really loved Jim and Pam’s dialogue interspersed with the flashbacks, and their exchange at the end with the Mrs Halpert. The final bit with Pam’s mother is also excellent, hehe, and a great explanation for why Pam got so blindsided by it the next day…

Author's Response: I love writing them in love *sighs happily*  and I like putting in references to how they've reached that point with each other. Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: Maxine Abbott Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 27, 2021 04:47 am Title: Chapter 1

OH I enjoyed this so much, Every scene I could clearly see from the unpacking and flying underwear to the post first marriage scene on the boat (of course we had that scene from show but your adding of the things said and what was going through her head was a lovely addition to that) to the reception - where you clearly painted their dorky dancing but also their table visits and interactions with the smaller guest (which was so sweet).

As for the honeymoon and the steamier stuff - you did a great job there too - I could picture the room and felt a little invasive as if I were spying on their activities.

Their fun little role playing at the end is very them in the banter and poor Pam - the first day back is always tough but oh boy, glad she had the one more night of ignorant bliss.

Great job my friend.

Author's Response:

Thanks Max - I really wanted to just tread the line between some steam (and heavy insinuation) vs pure porn. I'm way to embarrassed to write that sort of thing with any flare! I leave that to the experts (y'all know who you are ;))

Really pleased you enjoyed the final version and of course, much of that thanks to your feedback :)

Reviewer: darjeelingandcoke Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2021 06:50 pm Title: Chapter 1

First: this may be the influence of OLP, but I like and believe in Pam as the organized unpacker and Jim as the one throwing everything out of suitcases, possibly deliberately to throw off any system she might have.

I love the glimpses into the rest of their day in Niagara - it really is a shame we don't get to see the reception. And thank you for giving them the joyful and deeply sexy honeymoon they deserved and they OBVIOUSLY HAD in between Kevin cancelling all their credit cards. Really good one-shot here!

Author's Response: I was worried I might had strayed over the line into Jenna vs Pam so really glad you felt it worked! It was right that the camera crew left them alone for the rest of the wedding, but also gives us more license! Maybe I should have gone in to more based on Kevin's box shoes...

Reviewer: emxgoldstars Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2021 04:10 pm Title: Chapter 1

UGH the fluffiness of this one!
The insight into their honeymoon was beautiful, and everything I could imagine happening to Jam after their wedding! Also, LOVED the shower mentioning!

Great job, grc!

Author's Response: Thanks Em! I hope it was plausible. I do love a load of JAM fluff, so glad it hit the spot!

Reviewer: tinydundie Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2021 08:08 am Title: Chapter 1

oh, this made me smile. it’s what they deserve.

“multiple sexual activities in said shower, a double-width walk-in with jets pounding at them from several angles, just as they did the same to each other, she’d noted.”

this is amazing, haha

“Jim’s abiding memory of that first time was of his new wife riding him vigorously, still half dressed, her head thrown back in pleasure as he pushed into her over and over from below until she collapsed in a contented heap on top of him, allowing him to stroke one hand lovingly up and down her spine under her top, as the other just held her close.”

this is perfection… extremely hot but concise, and the visuals are *ahem* nice

great job!

Author's Response:

Thank you! Really pleased you enjoyed it. This was about giving them a bit of a break. No drama and lots of alone time. If one can't have that on a honeymoon, when can one have that.

I'm not terribly confident at writing full-on smut (my very reserved British manner tends to take over) so this is a compromise - a sort of peek through the curtain. 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2021 05:26 am Title: Chapter 1

This was wonderful! I love how they're so caught up in the honeymoon phase that all they want to do is just be with each other. Very sweet and sexy. Really liked it.

Author's Response: Thanks Warrior! That's the balance I wanted, so really pleased that's how it came across to you,

Reviewer: ThePinkButterfly Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2021 12:41 am Title: Chapter 1

Uh hi this was fantastic and you need to write more stuff like this.

“Pam reflected smugly that she’d never been so clean and dirty at the same time.”

My jaw literally dropped.

Author's Response: I'm really humbled - thank you so much!  I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I will endeavour to write more of this sort of thing. :)

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