Date: January 15, 2022 08:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yeah, that would be an awkward conversation for sure. Sober Jim would never have brought it up to Roy. Jim with a few beers in him, yeah I can see that. Good characterization of Roy too. I can easily see him really leaning into torment Jim there at the start. Yet you show that this is a Roy who has really started to change a bit. He's becoming a better guy, even that means a really weird conversation.
Nice job and welcome to being an MTT writer!
Author's Response: Without beers and without Pam in New York, this conversation would never have happened. Thanks for your words!
Date: January 15, 2022 03:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
You should do a sequel to this story where Pam
finds out about the conversation between Jim and Roy. Because if I were Pam, I would be seriously pissed off. Let’s face it, there are some things that should remain private between two people.
So yes, both men are idiots here, especially Jim.
Date: January 15, 2022 01:25 pm Title: Chapter 1
(Also, you might want to change the tags on this - Jim/Other is usually what we use to suggest a relationship between Jim and a character other than Pam. This story is really Jim/Pam, Jim, Roy.)
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: January 15, 2022 01:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ha! That's a heck of an MTT debut. I always love a nice exploration of the insecurities that Pam's relationship with Roy would have created in Jim, and this was a fun way to dig into that - Roy exploiting it and then showing some small evolution, Roy turning out to be lousy in bed. You can also really see Jim talking himself into some crazy things at this point in canon, when he's separated from Pam and struggling with it.
Congrats on your first story on the archive! Hope to see more from you soon.
Author's Response: They had to be punished for their mistakes. Thank’s for your wonderful comment!