Date: March 05, 2022 05:07 pm Title: Chapter 2: The Disaster
It was all going so well too. Pam Pong was off to a great start. Jim was bonding with he rover the insanity that is Dunder Mifflin Scranton. The of course as we know, the shoe drops. In comes lumbering impatient Roy. Yeah, we feel you Jim.
Author's Response: Pam Pong-- was that what they called it? I can't remember if I've seen that or if it's later on in the series. Anyway, yeah. I've watched the scene from the pilot episode where Roy comes in too many times to count. I find it hilariously awkward, so I wanted to use a similar variation there. With regards to the shoe dropping, I took this from 2x13. Jim said, "Then I found out you were engaged." I don't know about you, but that seems to imply that Pam didn't tell him directly? I don't know. Anyway, glad it worked!
1 [Report This]Date: March 05, 2022 03:41 pm Title: Chapter 2: The Disaster
Phyllis being helpful but also blatantly snooping feels very in character. As does Jim being flummoxed by even the simple Dunder Mifflin employee guide.
Young Jim already manufacturing excuses to go see Pam is adorable! You can see him refining his approach as he goes. So hopeful. Making the ending of this all the worse. Ouch. So much ouch.
Author's Response: LOL, well the irony was that it wasn't a simple guide, especially since Dwight found it fascinating. Glad the ending hurt! Had to make Jim rise and then crash back to earth. I only assume this is what happened in the canonical pre-season.
1 [Report This]Date: March 05, 2022 10:51 am Title: Chapter 2: The Disaster
This was a great chapter! Very glad this wasn’t just a one shot!
“later, he would blame that reaction for why all his unspoken request got stuck in his throat.” Ugh this is a great line!! I loved how you kept coming back to her smile and laughter throughout this chapter.
Argh when Roy came in! You wrote that all so well, poor Jim. It was gut wrenching.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: LOL, yes, Roy has to "spoil" things. Yep, the next two chapter are up. Thanks for reviewing!