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This was a very good start and congratulations on getting your first chapter up! Welcome to the MTT Writers’ club.

Something has been niggling me though and it’s more your comment intro about it being “law” that someone’s first story is about Casino Night. That’s not the case at all, not sure where you got that idea from. Many people have written about something different to that in their first story. Please don’t make sweeping generalisations. Rant over.

Good luck with the next chapters, I shall definitely read on with the two you’ve written already,

Author's Response:

I'm glad you are enjoying so far and willing to stick around!

I honestly didnt mean anything by the intro comment, I was just trying to be funny and it was my initiation into writing. I didn't mean to cause any offence, I'm not that kind of person and I'm fully aware of the amazing stories people have written here x 

So I like the fast forward in time. I like that Pam is really starting to come into her own with the help of Izzy and Penny. Good for her! She needs it. Really interesting that she hasn't told anyone at DM she's pregnant, especially Roy. However it's only a matter of time before it'll be revealed. I'm sure that's a whole big hornet's nest that's going to be kicked up.

However now we get to the REALLY interesting part. Jim's coming back. Will Karen be on his arm? Will Pam tell him what's going on? Inquiring minds want to know. Can't wait for the next update.

Author's Response:

Dun dun dunnnnn what will happen next! Find out next time on...

 Thank you so much for your review Warrior, always appreciated :) x  

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*nailed it* said in Andy’s voice. That was bloody brilliant. What are you on about not eventful?! It was AWESOME
So very desperate for the next chapter. Please don’t leave us hanging on too long. Great work my love!!

Post Casino Night Pam, especially after this version is always a bit of a downer. Her life is thrown to the wind and she's just trying to survive. Add in Jim ghosting her and it's even more stress. Then to find out she's also pregnant and not sure who the father is. Feels like she's got some tough choices ahead of her for sure. Hopefully she find the courage to do the right thing.

OOOOOOOOOOOO!!! The ooooos intensify!!! Can’t wait for more!

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You shut your mouth with the ‘this is all filler’. This was amazing! But I’m serious, if this baby is not Jim’s you’re gonna have a lot to answer for.
Great work 👏👏👏

Author's Response:

Thank you lovely! Always appreciate your support d84;a039;

We will have to wait and see... and i'll try not to get beat up. 

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Well this is just all sorts of amazing!!! Pretty awesome chapter for your first post!!! I love how you took the canon parking lot scene and made it your own with your narration…. So incredible!! I know we have all seen that a thousand times on our screens but reading your narrative really reminded me of what a powerful scene JK and JF put together. Wow!

I also loved hearing the other end of Pam’s phone call. MrsK ALWAYS tells me that Pam’s mom (the original Helene) would NEVER encourage Pam to stay with Roy, and now that I see her side of the conversation, I have to agree with you both… of course she sees the joy and happiness Jim brings to her daughter!!

The hook up makes it almost worse that Jim and Pam will always have this one fleeting memory of what it could be if they never get their act together… I thought it was interesting but realistic that it wasn’t the best sex because they don’t know each other in that way yet— and that you didn’t make Roy to be a terrible lover like he is so many other fics. Of course I’m a Jam fan— but this is a really interesting and realistic and logical position to write. Of course, they DID feel the sparks and momentum of what could be if they surrender!

I think you also paint Pam in this totally understandable role of confusion… while I appreciate Jim saying his part, and I know Pam was willfully ignoring the signs and the feelings— but there’s a lot of emotions that come from walking away from Roy in an instant. There are a lot of feelings that come from thinking about having to explain what happened, a non wedding, and to live in the awkwardness of that decision for awhile… so I feel for Pam in this story.

Love it! I’m hooked! This is so good! Can’t wait to see where it goes from here!! Thank you for sharing!!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for such a wonderful review! 

I completely agree!! JK and JF did an amazing job with the parking lot scene! JK's pure emotion and JF, I feel, was saying everything with her body language that contradicted the words she was vocalising.

I'm so happy you enjoyed my first chapter and by reading your review, feel like you are on my wave length for what I was trying to achieve when I was writing this! 

I hope I do the rest of the fic justice so that you enjoy! 

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First off, welcome to being an official MTT author! Welcome to the club!

Now let's talk shall we because holy crap! To say your first fic is about Casino Night and then to have it go there! Bold choice for sure. I can so easily see that Pam got swept up in the torrent of emotions of the moment so she would let this happen, but then, to nod at his last question and then let him walk out the door like that? Ouch. I mean Casino Night and its aftermath are rough enough but now adding this and possibly what it all entails? This is huge. Really curious to see how it's all going to play out. Feels like there's going to be a lot of big emotions still rolling around. Great job for your first time out of the gate.

Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I'm happy to be part if the writers club! Although I'm never going to be as good as some of you on here, I  feel like I'm at least not a fraud in the watercooler anymore haha

I may have started off a little strong on the storyline here, I hope I can keep it up and maybe come to some conclusion! I hope I do the little idea in my head justice and that you enjoy! 

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Oh, my goodness! This was such a delight and such a bittersweet painful piece to read! You’ve truly outdone yourself with this one; And it’s only your first story! You are such a magnificent writer! I look forward, longingly, to more of this or any other such words you could put together to make another beautiful story such as this.

You are absolutely wonderful. Thank you, my dear friend. Thank you so very much.

Author's Response:

Thank you!! I appreciate your love so much, really, too sweet!! 

I hope I do the rest of the story justice and that you enjoy!  

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Appreciate you acknowledging there's a real case for Roy. It's maybe not longer a *good* case, but it exists, and its problems weren't necessarily so glaring Pam seems ridiculous for not acknowledging them before. (And also for you recognizing Pam and Jim wouldn't necessarily have thought of it as Casino Night just because it's the episode title.)

Also, umm, yikes? Ow? Them having sex AND her still rejecting him immediately after? I buy it happening the night of, but ouch. Ouch ouch ouch. I'd be very curious to see how you'd write them coming back from that, it just seems like so much more of a gut punch for Jim.

Congrats on your first post (and on jumping right in with the Casino Night rite of passage)! Looking forward to seeing more from you.

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your review! 

 I'm a big believer that Roy wasn't a bad guy, he just wasn't good for Pam. He got complacent somewhere down the road and and that's fine for some but Pam wanted more.  

Hahah ow indeed! I think I may have started off too strong with the storyline in my head but it's been playing in there since I found this site so had to have a go. I'm hoping I do it justice and that you enjoy! 

Thanks again!