Date: January 02, 2023 11:10 am Title: Chapter 1
So this is delightful! Sometimes we just need someone to push us and that happens here big time. It's one hundred percent believable that Pam would have all those fears and doubts about Jim. Why she would chicken out on contacting him. She's scared, like all of her courage got used up in calling off the wedding. Yet she still has some left, it just needs to be drawn out. Jan giving her that excuse fits the bill nicely.
And then Jim is delighted to see her. As if her being there sparked something alive again and he can't help but respond to it. Pam had the courage to show up and ask him out. Clearly all lights are green and he wisely hits the gas.
I kinda feel a little bad for Karen, but better she find out this way than get sucked into being used as a shield for Jim's broken heart.
Great job with this one. I like it a lot.
In this story, what was clear to me was that things would be simple. If Pam was given a chance, she would take it, and if Jim met Pam, and understood what an effort it was for her to have come to him, he would take her in with no problem. As if nothing had happened.
Thanks for your lovely comment.
Date: January 02, 2023 11:00 am Title: Chapter 1
I’m always in awe of people who write in other languages so please do not apologise!!!
Great premise to get Pam to Stamford and the fact that Karen doesn’t get a look in makes it even better
Nice job :)
Date: January 02, 2023 09:51 am Title: Chapter 1
This opener feels like a spot-on depiction of Pam's thoughts that summer. The sadness of it all feels right, and the way she didn't decide not to contact him so much as she just she never quite worked up the nerve to do so. I feel that. And I agree that one hard shove could've changed everything.
"No one listens to her anymore." Yep. That's Pam in the post-Casino Night summer.
I also love the idea of Jan playing sort of mentor role with Pam here. Pre-meltdown Jan is a character with a lot of potential, and I feel like you've taken some steps towards realizing it here.
"At least she has the relief that Jim isn't going to fall in love with another receptionist." Lol.
Like this depiction of too-slick Josh and the contrast to Michael (and between Scranton and Stamford) a lot.
"I can't remember the last time a girl asked me out to dinner" I see what you did there. Also, like Pam knowing exactly what Jim is doing just by looking at him work.
Anyhow. This just feels like a good capture of Pam's character. Well done.
Date: January 01, 2023 04:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
Karen seems a bit desperate. She’s only known
Jim a few months and is already calling him the boy
of her dreams. It sounds like what crazy Cathy did. Josh is creepy, and it wouldn’t surprise me if Karen was one of the girls that Josh cheated on his wife with. 🤔
Is this a one shot story, or will there be other chapters?