1 [Report This]Date: March 15, 2023 06:06 pm Title: Chapter 3 - Be OK
Here's my little bit of real world critique coming in since I'm a paramedic. If I was dispatched to the scene of multiple patients who were pepper sprayed and had an angry Karen type woman being that demanding of me or my partners, there's no way I'd sit back and dial a number in her cell phone for her. She'd be told firmly that I have more important things to do and to sit down and if she was still pushing the point I'd point out that those cops over there like me a lot more than her and they have no issues arresting someone who is harassing a paramedic. First Responders look out for each other like that.
Regardless of all that, now it's Jim's turn to be in panic mode. This time for the sake of Pam. Jim hearing that Roy was still after her even after being sprayed and that he can't find her. Yeah, I get why his mind is racing like that. Feels like he's got a pretty big moment of clarity as to who he really cares about, that's for sure.
Author's Response:
HAHAHA! As a social worker it would be the same… we are kind and compassionate.. to a POINT! Haha!
I needed a smidge of a plot move, so I went with that one…but I know in reality Karen being a Karen (ha…that worked out!) wouldn’t have gotten her anywhere!
Date: March 15, 2023 05:59 pm Title: Chapter 2 - Pam's panic
Full blown panic mode there for sure. Barely registering sight or sound. Just run, get away, felt very real there, especially when her ankle was grabbed.
Author's Response: Tried to make it as real as possible, glad I did!
1 [Report This]Date: March 15, 2023 05:56 pm Title: Chapter 1 - It begins with Jim
Finally starting to dive in on this one. That's a bit of a different take on Karen for one. That she's this upset at Jim. I get that emotions are high and she knows a small bit of the history Jim has with Pam, but still. Also interesting to see a bit into their relationship. Karen always has to be right and have the last word. Feels like she's a much different person than what the cameras would show.
What also is striking is how Jim's thoughts go immediately to Pam. That he takes in every aspect of her in a
fraction of a second and how it fits in with previous memories. Great way of showing how in tune he really is, even when they're apart.
Author's Response:
Yes, while Jim is an immature buffoon, he is still always paying attention to her. I believe in the subtext a lot of authors have used: Karen was a distraction and meant to insulate Jim from his feelings for Pam.
Karen pretty much figured this out and is now having a heinous bitch fear break up amidst it all.
Date: March 15, 2023 05:36 pm Title: Chapter 12 - Jim's confusion
I just want to say that you write so authentically! As someone with a few severe anxiety disorders, this was very accurate and I feel very happy to see someone portray it so well! :)
Author's Response:
Thank you… I hope you are being gentle with yourself as you read… I don’t want to trigger anyone d84;a039;
I promise… there will be LOADS of therapeutic healing as we go. Anticipating this will be a loooong saga.
Date: March 15, 2023 05:34 pm Title: Chapter 13 - Pam & Ella
Aw no, poor Pam!
Author's Response: I know… she breaks my heart.
Date: March 15, 2023 05:30 pm Title: Chapter 11 - She's awake
Aw this broke me. You can really see how anxiety can cloud your mind. You write beautifully!
Author's Response: Awww! Hang in with me, I will repair Pam AND you!
Date: March 15, 2023 09:50 am Title: Chapter 13 - Pam & Ella
Wow, a lot of emotions going on here from Jim, Pam and Helene. You've written them all really well. I really hope Pam's going to be ok and that she finally lets Jim in!
Author's Response:
ABSOLUTELY! We will definitely be getting to the work-to-easing the situation, Jim will be part of Pam's healing path. Humans heal in relationships...but we gotta get past the hurt and anger first!
All the ideas in my head...probably going to be A LOT of chapters! hahaha!
Date: March 12, 2023 09:37 am Title: Chapter 9 - Groggy
Don’t panic, Pam!!
Author's Response: I am so sorry, not going to end SOON....
Date: March 12, 2023 08:12 am Title: Chapter 9 - Groggy
Don’t panic, Pam!!
Author's Response: Not going away anytime soon… bear with me ;)
Date: March 12, 2023 07:26 am Title: Chapter 6 - Her fear
Poor Pam can’t catch a break! I’m enjoying this look into her personality. She was always rather anxious in the show and going into this really give a reason to why and her inability to tolerate uncertainty, making her apathetic and unable to take any chances.
Author's Response:
The clues to me were always in her very careful responses, how she thought her mom and dad had a good relationship, how she got back together with Roy and even still had a ‘nice’ talk with him after… there was so much more there.
Date: March 12, 2023 07:20 am Title: Chapter 4 - The stretcher
Oh poor thing! I love how this gives a glance that she has experienced this type of panic before. Go find her, Jim!!
Author's Response: Oh, he finds her…. Not the way either wanted though …..
Date: March 12, 2023 07:18 am Title: Chapter 3 - Be OK
Oh I love how you write, you can really see how desperate he is for her through it!
Author's Response:
Pulling in some of the same panic I imagined when I wrote Safe (after Dwight’s fire stunt).
thank you so much for the compliment!!!!
Date: March 12, 2023 06:35 am Title: Chapter 2 - Pam's panic
Wow the panic attack was so real, I loved how you were able to get us to feel the anxiety that was rushing through her. This was such an accurate look on panic attacks, this is amazing!
Author's Response: Tried my best to incorporate pieces of my own experience as well as knowledge from my profession, glad that came through.
Date: March 12, 2023 06:32 am Title: Chapter 1 - It begins with Jim
OH I LOVE THIS
Author's Response: THANK YOU!!!! I hope you continue to like it :)
1 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2023 11:35 pm Title: Chapter 10 - Jim thinks
Wow, an intense batch of chapters!
I liked the use of ‘Pammy’ as a code word, that was a clever touch.
I don’t think Ella was too tough, It’s good to give Pam options on this scenario, despite Jim wanting to save the day with a big Jim gesture.
And yes, Jim Halpert definitely loves moms 🤣
Author's Response:
Hehehe… couldn’t not give a nod to the live of moms 🤪
so much more coming, can’t wait to share!
1 [Report This]Date: March 10, 2023 02:56 pm Title: Chapter 6 - Her fear
Real feel for Pam here, and over the last couple of chapters too. Seems so afraid, and you've written it really well.
Author's Response:
Thank you ♥a039;♥a039;♥a039;
Pam was always seen as quiet and cute, but I have always felt there was SOOO much more under there. Going to explore it, hence the heavy warning and the MA rating.
1 [Report This]Date: March 10, 2023 02:53 pm Title: Chapter 3 - Be OK
Wow. Karen is a dick. You captured her perfectly 🤣
Again, great work on the panic and tension here
Author's Response:
Hehe. I really thought she was just awful and a little ‘one note’ in the show. I went with that here.
I ADORE Big Tuna’s reasoning in her AU The Unicorn… that Laren was always masking her own queer self, taking it out on others.
1 [Report This]Date: March 10, 2023 02:51 pm Title: Chapter 2 - Pam's panic
You really built the tension well here, you feel just how panicked Pam is. I hope she's going to be ok!
Author's Response:
She is going to be okay 💕
promise d84;a039;
1 [Report This]Date: March 10, 2023 02:48 pm Title: Chapter 1 - It begins with Jim
Oh this is so clever how you've tied Pam's reaction to being terrified in this case to the same way she was on Casino Night. But now Jim sees it!! Looking forward to seeing where this is going
Author's Response:
Another story, up all night thinking about it. Could not wait to get it out of my head!!
Can’t wait to share more ♥a039;