Date: April 26, 2024 04:31 am Title: Second Day
So first- Betsy, I love stories with her because I too have "grown-up," boys and relate to the mother-son relationship. The chat here with Betsy felt very true. The co-workers bits were a lot of fun. and Roy - it didn't take long for Jim to figure him out as the oaf that doesn't deserve her.
As for next chapter - not sure what you can do with it but second chances could be a theme.
1 [Report This]Date: April 23, 2024 07:05 pm Title: Second Day
Oh there's the pain of the early seasons starting to take hold. Jim trying to make sense of this new work place. All their various eccentricities showing up. Michael being Michael.
And running through everything is Pam. Oh Jim look at you being head over heels already. Patience. Yes Roy is an oaf, but she needs to see that for herself. Great look into his mind here though.
1 [Report This]Date: April 18, 2024 07:44 am Title: Second Day
Glad you liking writing Jim's POV because I loved it! Really great chapter to compliment the first, and the flashback to the journey to the restaurant was just perfect.
Also, Betsy is one of my faves, so loved the conversation you had here with her.
Absolutely LOVED the flashbacks to what all the coworkers would have said meeting - literally perfect, chef's kiss. You wrote each one so well you could immediately tell who was who
And how could I forget Dunder Misfits. Another chef's kiss right there.
Great work!