Date: December 17, 2006 06:54 pm Title: Chapter 2: Pam
wondering whether or not it was her right to try to remind him
This is a very realistic concern for Pam, even though it's just one more excuse to not be brave. Great POV.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
7 [Report This]Date: December 17, 2006 06:53 pm Title: Chapter 1: Jim
Oh boy. Poor Jim!
He should've known better.
I think that line sums it all up. I think the way you described Jim's backsliding is perfect. I really like this!
Author's Response: I'm so glad it's realistic - thank you!
Date: December 17, 2006 06:51 pm Title: Chapter 1: Jim
playing along with her prank was analogous to raising his arms in surrender, saying out loud, "It's over; you won. I'm yours - do whatever you want."
This was a really great line, that and the part about the carpet still being the same. An excellent start. Off to read the rest.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much! I really saw that moment as one in which Jim - whether consciously or unconsciously - started to fall back into it all over again (much to the delight of millions).
Thanks for reviewing!
P.S. Can't wait to read your latest stuff!