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Just got to where I could sit and read all of this in one sitting. I am not familiar with the inspiration for the story, and I am have to say that I’m glad. I really like the way you have picked up all of these characters in place of them in a new setting and in a way that feels real and familiar. I can totally buy Jim and Danny being siblings, Danny and Karen being married, Jo being Mark’s aunt and employing Pam, Kelly being Pam’s jealous coworker. When you add in all the other little bit and nods to the other characters, it’s a great bit of world building that still feels true to their characterization. I am really loving it.

You do such a great job with writing Roy, too. I don’t know what’s going on with him, but I know that a character like that that has some strange hidden motive and is sneaky and manipulative the way that this Roy seems to be is really difficult to write. You do a great job of making me wonder if I’m reading too much into things, much the same that Pam is herself. Great job there!

I love Singer! I love Jim and Pam’s relationship. I LOVE all the dialogue. You have everyone’s voices spot on. I’m kind of glad I was behind the curve on reading this one because it meant I had quite a few chapters to binge at once. Now if you could just go ahead and publish the rest ASAP as possible, that’d be excellent.

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Oblivious Jim is so cute. I loved their date and I loved that Pam didn’t immediately get all gushy and romantic and that they discussed Mark. I think that was super realistic and really well written. And friggin ROY you write him so well! Obviously there’s something going on there but clearly he is a great manipulator when things don’t go his way. Good for Singer, I wish he’d bitten Roy’s entire hand off.

Also, I truly love Jim as a mechanic. I can see it so clearly. And him taking of his coveralls? GIRL.

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Just read this whole thing in one sitting! Wow, what a start at MTT. Welcome! And I’m so impressed that your first story with us is dealing with such a heavy and serious topic.

I enjoy seeing each of their perspectives! You wrote in the first one how Pam was wondering if it was her psychic link that made her visit Jim at the office that day, and that’s how the similarities in their perspectives felt to me as I read this. They’re so attuned to each other that they’re mirroring the others experiences even as they’re apart and dealing with this separately.

And I want to encourage you to keep writing this story—your story!—the way you want to and the way you plan it. You do a great job with the mirroring perspectives and I find it interesting to see the little details between the two that have changed and what has stayed the same. Again, this is your work and you are doing an excellent job with writing it the way you have been and (I’m assuming) have intended! I’m sure you know that you should only change it if you want to and not at the behest of anybody else. Just wanted to offer that encouragement from me to you, and again to say thanks for joining us at MTT! It’s so intimidating to join an fandom specific site that has such an active community AND with such a serious departure from what we see in the show, but you’re doing it well and I’m exited to see where you take it! d84;a039;

Author's Response: Thank you so much! This is really encouraging! I really appreciate it. 

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“I’m an innocent creature!” She says in chat, and then two days later drops this 5k hot af fic on us! Yeah, lady, you’re not fooling me!

TPB, this was so good! First, I am a sucker for when they say “hi” in fic like that. One of my all time favorite things. Second, I feel like this is a really real representation of the type of vulnerable state they’d have been in, Jim especially, at the end of that episode. I also loved the little bit where she was like “no I’m full, I just burped!” And Jim was like “nah girl u still sexy” because I know when I say something like that, it’s usually a roundabout comment about my own body image issues and not a real “no.” Either way, it was really clear she was into it later with her “please” and her stripping her clothes and trying to rip his shirt off!

This was a really great piece, TPB. I feel like a proud mom, is that weird? I can’t wait to see what you bless us with next! And see, not so bad, was it? 😉

Author's Response:

Thank you so much BT! I also love it when there's a sweet little "hi" exchange. I always try to add one.

No, it's not weird that you feel like a proud mom. LOL. :D

“he kissed like a man who knew how to kiss a woman” uh yeah he did and he knew how to do a bunch of other things too

Ma’am, yet again. How DARE you? PATIENCE MISS BEESLY I mean just shoot me down right now I set

And then the way you tied it in with the end of CN!! Ugh, I didn’t see it coming! If you wanted to write this AU and continue the story I would 100% not be mad about it.

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I don’t even know where to begin with reviewing this. You always make me have such an emotional reaction with your writing and this is no exception. The feelings of heartbreak and angst and anguish are so expertly conveyed here in such a brilliant way, I am so amazed by your talent! This was just so achingly beautiful. And then the different emotions they had as they were having sex, I loved that so much. Just, you’re so good. I’m so in awe. Thank you for this.

Author's Response: BT. I am so in awe of your writing so when you say the loveliest things to me like this... catch me crying in the club/actually my backyard. 

First of all that line where she cut him off as he was saying “got to fu-“ ma’am

And just the really real way that this read to me, like it’s a little moment between episodes or that we didn’t get to see during the writer’s strike. It was such perfect emotion and banter and dialogue. I loved every second of it. I am obsessed with how you write Jim, every iteration.

And then the sex swing and the treehouse and the sex and the part at the end oh my god you made me FEEL things how DARE you. I love you, I love this, it is perfection.

Wow okay

I don’t...how do I leave a review that encompasses how this made me feel and that does it any kind of justice at all? I started to copy/paste my favorites but my god the way you weave ideas and words and emotions together, I’d have pasted the entire thing in this review box. Good lord. You’ve rendered me speechless with how beautiful this was. I just. I don’t even know what else to say.

Author's Response: BT you have no idea what your wonderful words mean to me. Of course, that's how I feel when I read your work, generally I'm speechless. :) I was SO nervous with this first chapter but you have made me feel so much better. 

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This, like, broke me. Truly. I don’t even know what to say. The way you wrote their teasing and that whole first part with the movie was perfect. The conversation about Danny and pizza was PERFECT and so in character and I think it’s a super real and not often discussed thing when couples go without...eating pizza...for a while and I love that you brought that up. And then the actual PIZZA my god, it was some of my most favorite pizza that I’ve ever read about.

You are amazing and THIS is amazing and lady, I will immediately read any other costumed role play fics you put out into the universe, just saying! (HINT HINT)

Ugh, JB. You already know that I think this is perfection. I loved the flashbacks, and how we got to see Jim inner monologue and how those things confirm that is and always has even everything. Michael in the interview is hysterical, the insecurity Pam feels even after years of marriage and children together is all too real, and I love that you chose to set this fic in season 9 because we are severely lacking in those.

You’re a genius and a wordsmith and I always feel so honored to read anything you write.

Author's Response: BT. You are the ultimate hype man and I am so, so damn grateful for you. I’m still so in awe of each and every time you say something lovely about my writing because holy crap your opinion means so much to me. Thank you! 

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I honestly don’t even know how to put words into this little box that accurately describe what this did to me.

Ma’am. COLEY. Lady. Jesus H. Christ. Just fucking incredible.

In would like to formally request 800 more chapters of this please and thank you.

I loved how you wrote Pam’s time at home and the life that she was going back to when she left NY. And I LOVED the scene with all the girls the next morning! And then my heart soared with the eagles nest when you had her showing up and Jim’s job, and then the date line, and then the...well, you know what you did. Lady!! I see you with those stockings getting rolled down!!

Like I said. 800 more, please, tysm.

this killed me dead and that’s on physics