Reviewer: bottomlesschampagne Signed
Date: January 20, 2021
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
This chapter is hitting me in layers:
- the fact that Pam encourage him regarding Athleap just before the slip; nicely inspired from the Something Borrowed scene. and the gradually getting tipsy.
- "when we first started" obviosuly gives you full JAM feels and that heartbreaking kitchen scene.
- “No. I didn’t.” He’s stopped laughing." need i say more, ugh
- “It was ages ago. Like, ages.” again, Jim S2 hits.
- “He’s looking at her, now, like nothing makes sense. Which is why they don’t talk about this." i am just gonna be quoting the whole chapter now because every sentnece is so craftfully done.
- “Pam,” he says raggedly, “Do you have any idea how much I-”
take my heart.
and Pam just being so clueless about Jim's reaction until- “You could never be a rebound" again, nicely inspired from the "not wedding jitters" scene; and Pam brining up that night! I love how even in this scene, when Pam is messing up (good for us), she's the one taking charge.
- “I’m…it’s cold. I’m gonna go in.” AND WE HAVE BOOZE CRUISE TOO! pure genius ok.
sorry for the spam, but like I always say, BRILLIANT writing there. the desperation, the frustration, the absolute cluelesness and helplesness; all has been so perfectly conveyed by cleverly drawing on the most amazing JAM moments. love it. kudos max.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! And no seriously, thank you for taking the time to leave these reviews - they're so amazing to read, and so incredible to see the parts you picked up on :) I really appreciate it!
And yeah, I wanted a do-over of the heart-breaking kitchen scene where one of them wasn't quite so good at lying and got caught out...
Thank you!!