Reviewer: Paper Jam Signed
Date: December 06, 2006
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
This is so, so excellent. It's just quiet and to the point and really conveys the tiredness you feel when you watch them struggling. Too many great lines to quote, but I loved this, because I could really feel myself sigh along with him:
‘Do you have a future here?’ She heard herself ask. ‘You tell me,’ he countered, looking back at her wearily.
He's had a really rough night and is so tired of trying to work everything out. I would love to see an outcome like this, actually, as opposed the the Big Fight lots of people seem to be hoping for.
And this is great : Just stood up, walked around the desk and reached for him. Finally, reached for him. because yes! It's all she needs to do, I think. I hope.
Okay, enough rambling. Beautiful job, as always!
Author's Response: I'm in the quiet resolution camp too...not the 'big fight' one. (Tho, at this point, I'd take ANY resolution, frankly!) Glad you liked this...it was definitely just meant as a simple, quiet moment, so I'm glad that came through for you. Thanks as always for your insightful and lovely reviews!