9

I loved this story the first time I read it- it's still just as great now. You nailed their characters, and the awkwardness of reuniting after a long separation. And, of course, the end was sweet and adorable.

10

This is a fantastic first fic! So sad, but very realistic about how their lives might turn out. "love, understanding, support, passion, a partner"... poor Pam. Please continue!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm trying to continue!

10

Loved this the first time I read it, love it now. I think it's very realistic, that if they did give in and go home together, it wouldn't all be smooth sailing. This: “I’ll put my bra back on. If that’ll- Please.” is hearbreaking. I also like how the end is a little vague (to me at least, not sure if you intended it that way): is Jim angry, embarrassed, hopeful?

10

Somehow missed this when I was on vacation... awesome Jodithgrace, just awesome! Too funny, love all the shout-outs.  Now when/where does the group convene for planning purposes? ;)

10

Oh holy jesus!  This is unbelievably hot.  I was literally reading it with my hand over my mouth because of the naughtiness (oh professor!), and the hotness, and just, guh.  Now that that's out of the way, I'd like to say it's also very well-written: you paid incredible attention to the period and its details, the sex was steamy (have I mentioned that yet?) but realistic for the situation, and the ending was a little heart-breaking.  Please do write a sequel!

Author's Response:

Glad you liked it, neptune1. :)

The sequel is in progress. 

10

Yay!  Finally!  I'm so excited for the rest of this- and I can't wait to see how the story is told from Jim's perspective.  Just, yay! (I know, so articulate)

Author's Response: Articulate enough!  Thanks, neptune  ;)

10

Wow, this is fantastic.  So original, clever, well-written, and DWIGHT.  You've managed to capture his absurdity and his humanity, make him funny and pathetic, and squick me out about how dirty he and Angela can get.  Well done!

"Powered by the awesome vitamins provided by farm fresh beets, she stains everyone she touches beet red and travels the world ridding people of scurvy with her vitamin C richness. "  That belongs in the first sentence hall of fame.

9

Very cute!  I like the little details, and you get the point across very well in a short story.  Also "synchronicity"- love it!

10

Aargh, my review disappeared into the internets... apologies if it appears twice... Wow.  I love this.  Totally incohorently: so well-written: the emotion, banter, sex, and characters are perfect.  The last line floored me: I love that it applies to the train, the song, Jim's life... Just wow.

10

Beautiful.  I love the twin POV- especially that they feel the same emotions, that they are joined as only twins can be.  And the banter between Jim and Pam, and Pam and everyone else is perfect.  Bad Cop?  And Kelly?  Awesome.

Author's Response: Thanks, neptune! :)

10

I love this so much.  This chapter was unbelievably sweet (even more so because of all the lovely family interaction), and I think you did a great job communicating the situation from Larissa's perspective.  Hmm, I wish there was some way to get a chapter from Jim's perspective at the end?  You know, behind closed doors? ;)

8

Ooh, cliffhanger!  I like where you're going with this.  I'd like to see some more outright interaction between Karen and Jim at this point in addition to the Pam/Jim interaction.  I don't think Jim should get off too easy, you know?  You've done a great job capturing Michael's general cluelessness and do-gooder attitude.  Can't wait to see what comes next.

Author's Response: There should be some Jim/Karen interaction, but I don't know how much. The next chapter is really the scene that stuck itself in my head and made me write this story... So you'll just have to wait and see where it's going;-) But thanks about the Michael characterization! I was worried that I was almost going overboard with him... til I remembered that that's not exactly possible...