Date: October 15, 2018 02:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was wonderful! I did keep wondering when Pam was going to turn her car off.
Date: October 16, 2007 11:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was so... guh, it was amazing. It was perfect. Your descriptions were so vivid and perfect and set the mood so wonderfully. Amazing.
(Though, I'm not gonna lie, I was really anxious that she left her car on. Sigh. So neurotic.)
8 [Report This]Date: January 31, 2007 08:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
but they stumble because they’re them and they’re clumsy and neither of them has ever had less thought or more feeling in their bodies
just a heavy, warm weight on her chest (it’s what he’s always been)
Those are the. best. lines. ever.
I love, Love, LOVE this story. Bravo!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you! That second one was one of my favorite lines too, so I'm glad you enjoyed it (and the story)!
Date: January 31, 2007 01:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
Just... amazing. I'm really horrible about lurking and not reviewing, but the fact that you referenced my all-time favorite poem compelled me. I really loved how you caught the mood of the poem with the whole story, even without including the whole poem. Just... wow.
Author's Response: Yay, more people who love that poem! It's definitely one of my favorites. And I'm so glad you hear you enjoyed the story -- thank you so much!
9 [Report This]Date: January 31, 2007 12:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
You know, I am so behind on my reviewing, but I just needed to say: amazing. Plus, one of my favorite poems, hands down. (Heh - actually I just used the same poem for a title:))
Anyway, I don't think I can say anything that already hasn't been said, so just thank you and, yes, you perfectly portrayed a situation in which Jim and Pam would "get to it" right away.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Haha, I love the coincidence that we both like the same poem and used it for a title within the same few days. It's like a little homage to ESVM. :)
10 [Report This]Date: January 31, 2007 09:59 am Title: Chapter 1
I've added this story, and you, to my favourites. I could really sense Pam's despair and unhappiness at the beginning, and the ending was just perfect.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! It's such an honor to be on favorites lists. So glad you enjoyed this story.
10 [Report This]Date: January 30, 2007 09:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
I have to agree with all the others, this is one of the best Jim/Pam fics I've ever read. Haunting and beautiful. Thanks for sharing this!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! How flattering. I really appreciate your comment. :)
9 [Report This]Date: January 30, 2007 07:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was beautiful and one of the best written stories I've read here. Wonderful job.
Author's Response: That is such an ENORMOUS compliment. Thank you so, so much!
Date: January 30, 2007 07:02 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow... wow. I really thought I was done with Jim and Pam (at least until something schmoopy happened that made me squee all over again. I have no self control.), but this? This was fantastic.
There are so many good lines, I don't even know if I can pick out one particular favorite. I'll settle for saying that the whole ending sequence - involving Jim as this wonderful, immovable weight on Pam's chest and shoulders - is really, really lovely.
And also, the whole "...maybe it took getting her to go a little bit crazy to get here..." I love. Because, really, you nailed it - so many of the best things in life require that we go just a little bit insane in order to enjoy them.
I'm going to have to read this again.
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed that part of the story, where Jim's the new weight on her chest and shoulders -- that was one of my favorite parts too, so it's good to hear you thought it was nice. Thanks again for your thoughtful review!
10 [Report This]Date: January 30, 2007 06:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
wow.. THIS is why I read fanfic, this is just beautiful, so poetic and ... i just can't even come up with the words to say how wonderful this is. LOVE. IT. you are enormously talented! This is one of my favorite lines: "Now he’s moved past and she can’t move forward and she’s stuck in between the walls of two rooms, pressed paper thin and more than just a little transparent." The imagery you use to describe emotions is just stunning. THANK YOU so much for sharing this with us!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much for your really nice comment! I appreciate it so much.
10 [Report This]Date: January 30, 2007 06:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
My god, this was absolutely gorgeous - poetic and flowing and seamless. Shockingly good. You have a real gift, allibabab -- hope you keep writing and sharing.
Author's Response: Thank you! That really means a lot to me. :)
Date: January 30, 2007 01:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh! God, I LOVE this! There are waaaaay too many amazing lines to pull out here. You got this so, so perfectly. Oh, SO much love.
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! So happy to hear you liked it. :)
Date: January 30, 2007 10:42 am Title: Chapter 1
This is so wonderful. I love these images:
...he used the caulk of his presence to keep the wind from whistling through her cracks.
..like paint over flaked bits of plaster.
Pam's loneliness in the first bit is so palpable and vivid. Kudos.
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it. :)
Date: January 30, 2007 09:45 am Title: Chapter 1
More Please!!!
Author's Response: There's not going to be any more to this, but thank you for your enthusiasm!
Date: January 30, 2007 09:38 am Title: Chapter 1
I wish I could say more, but I just sort of feel "guh" right now, because this was everything I needed or wanted to see for thse two. Lovely.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much!
10 [Report This]Date: January 30, 2007 07:56 am Title: Chapter 1
very very nice and escapist!! :-)
Author's Response: Haha, it's definitely escapist. Thank you for the comment!
Date: January 30, 2007 07:22 am Title: Chapter 1
This is just gorgeous. Imagery, feelings....it's all right there. Wonderful work.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really appreciate it. :)
Date: January 30, 2007 05:59 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow I like crazy Pam and her forcefulness. So wish TV Pam will step up like this.
Author's Response: Oh, don't we all! Thank you for the comment!
Date: January 30, 2007 05:51 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow. Just wow. So well done, so them. One morning on the show, they'll both show up for work together and Jim's grin will be a little too wide and Pam will be blushing and their eyes won't meet but it'll be clear what transpired and then I'm going to imagine that this story is exactly what happened the night before. Thank you!
Author's Response: You're welcome! Thank you! :D
Date: January 30, 2007 05:07 am Title: Chapter 1
I love the immediacy and intensity of this. It so vividly conveys her sheer need for him finally obliterating her endless doubts/shouldn't's (it happening in a blur in the middle of the night is totally believable). Too many wonderful lines/passages to cite - just beautifully written, really erotic and so emotionally expressive. Love her not wanting to let go of him at the end - perfect.
Author's Response: What a wonderful review! I'm so glad you could sense the immediacy -- that's something I was really striving for with this. And about the whole not letting him go at the end, I just imagine that once she gets him, she's going to hold on tight. Figuratively, of course, but maybe literally too. :) Thanks again for your thoughtful comment!
Date: January 30, 2007 04:09 am Title: Chapter 1
Now that it’s started, it’s too late to take it back (would she? would she?). She wonders if that’s what he was thinking when he kissed her. No regrets, she thinks, and knocks again.
I love this. I love the idea that she finally has to just move instead of standing so completely still. Amazing job. I could picture it all happening and now I think I might just be a little disappointed if it doesn't happen just like this. :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I love the idea of something little, something tiny and minor and inconspicuous being the last straw and putting their whole crazy relationship into motion -- I'm happy to hear you like that too!
8 [Report This]Date: January 30, 2007 12:04 am Title: Chapter 1
She almost asks herself what she’s doing but squeezes her eyes against the thought, keeping it back and pushing it down until it’s just a vague pressure behind her heart, which is nothing new and everything she’s used to.
...it’s like a tornado just passed and everyone’s coming out of their houses to peer up at the blue specks of sky peeking through the clouds.
I really like how you describe those two moments. Thanks for this!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Please excuse me while I go have a fan-girl shriek in response to hearing you say you enjoyed this...
Date: January 29, 2007 11:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
wow. this was an incredible one shot. and this line is perfect: "it’s like a tornado just passed and everyone’s coming out of their houses to peer up at the blue specks of sky peeking through the clouds". very well done.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it. :)
Date: January 29, 2007 10:59 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow! Your writing is so beautiful. There was two sentences that really stuck out to me as extra amazing. Here's the first "she flushed the tablets down the toilet because at least with the pain he was still there, still lodged between her ribs" That's such an amazing line. It says soooooo much. I can't even explain to you how much I like it. The other is "She’s never felt so calm; it’s like a tornado just passed and everyone’s coming out of their houses to peer up at the blue specks of sky peeking through the clouds". What an amazing picture that painted! You are very talented. I could feel exactly what Pam was because of that sentence. You are an amazing writer.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your thoughtful response! I'm so glad there were lines that stood out to you -- that's what I'm always trying to do with my writing. Happy to hear you enjoyed the story so much!
Date: January 29, 2007 10:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
So well done!
"And for a second she was just Pam again."
Just really well written and well characterized.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! "Well characterized" is just about the best compliment you could give. :)