Date: January 31, 2007 07:56 am Title: Chapter 1
good job on a first fic. and trust me, nothing wrong with pure fluff
7 [Report This]Date: January 31, 2007 06:53 am Title: Chapter 1
This was really sweet. I liked the concept. The only thing is that I feel like it was a little rushed. I think an improvement would be if you'd fleshed the story out a little more, and fleshed out the tension between Jim and Pam, so it wouldn't seem so sudden that thy just were locked in together and then blurted out their feelings for each other. I'd be happpy to beta for you if you choose to flesh this out a little more and want some more constructive feedback on it.
Date: January 31, 2007 06:05 am Title: Chapter 1
good job. Would have loved to have more details about their night together.
Date: January 30, 2007 08:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hee, hypothermia! Not a supply closet, but still a lock-in is a good thing!
10 [Report This]Date: January 30, 2007 08:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
I loved it! Maybe that can happen sometime in the future.... *hopeful*
Date: January 30, 2007 08:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
Good job for a first fic! It was a little bit of an abrupt ending, but ending a story can be tricky. I hope you keep writing. :-)
Date: January 30, 2007 08:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very cute! I think that you got their voices down pretty well for your first fic and I liked the idea a lot. It would be so nice if something like that happened!!! The only thing I think you could fix is maybe to make it a little bit longer in the middle, it seemed a little rushed. Awesome story!!!