Date: August 19, 2007 09:38 pm Title: Valentines Day
She saw him vulnerable before, like the night he told her his feelings, but she never saw him romantic. He was very good at being romantic.
Yep. That about sums it up. I heart this story. I couldn't believe I never commented before but I do love it. I could see FNB pulling these pranks on Jim and whatnot. :) Just thought I'd comment on an oldy but a goody of yours! Couldn't believe I never reviewed before but what can you do? Great Job!
Author's Response: Thanks! I just noticed tonight that someone had commented on it...it's been a long time since anyones even looked at this. Wow....I hope my writing has improved since this little number....but, thanks for reviewing. I appreciate it!
Date: February 04, 2007 08:34 pm Title: Valentines Day
What a sweet Valentine fic. Great job.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for taking your time and reading! I think its great when people are kind enough to drop by and let me know what they think. Thanks agian!
8 [Report This]Date: February 03, 2007 11:40 pm Title: Valentines Day
Aw, this is really cute! I love that the quartet showed up for both of them; so adorable. I also like their banter, and the fact that Pam was concerned about both Karen's feelings and moving too quickly with Jim- I think both of those touches were nicely realistic. There are a few places where you could edit to make the story read a bit more smoothly- in those places, you overstate or your meaning is a little unclear. For example, "By the end of the day, Pam was ready to leave" in its context is a bit awkward. It's hard to tell if you mean Pam is so fed up with the day that she can't wait to get out of there, or she's just finished putting on her coat and collecting her things and is literally ready to exit the building, in which case "By the end of the day" sounds awkward. Hope that helps on the editing end. Keep up the good work, and thanks for a really sweet V day story!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for the pointers. I value your opinions and review. It means alot to me to have such a great review! I will definately be going back to fix a few things that I missed. My Beta reader warned me about those places but I didnt get around to editing them yet! But, thank you again!
Becky
Date: February 03, 2007 08:26 pm Title: Valentines Day
Aww! This was so adorable! LOVED the singing valentines! I'm in a women's chorus and we have to do that starting next week. So now when I sing to couples, I'll imagine Jim and Pam! Thanks for this!
Author's Response:
Great to hear that you liked. I appreciate the positive support. I was in choir too and still sing today...maybe thats why all my stories are based around music and lyrics. Im a music freak, I know! Have a great week of singing....thanks again for the review! You should go back and rate it. Lord knows I need the ratings!
Becky