9 [Report This]Date: March 14, 2007 07:15 pm Title: we can work it out... maybe?
I totally understand Jim's position in this chapter - not being serious with Karen when he first came back but growing closer as he received no clue from Pam - and then giving up on her the night of the wedding when she left with Roy. You did a great job with the voices in this, it sounded just like all of them.
Author's Response: I'm glad you got Jim's position (I was hoping not to get garbage thrown at me) and thank you!
Date: March 14, 2007 06:51 pm Title: we can work it out... maybe?
whoa! definitely a different reaction from jim than you usually see, but still very true to the character. and it is kinda true that jim has basically taken Pam 101, but we don't know if it goes both ways. please update soon!
Author's Response: Hope you like the conclusion! I wanted a little different take on Jim so I hope it worked.
Date: March 14, 2007 06:10 pm Title: we can work it out... maybe?
Aw, both of these chapters left me hurting! Ryan and Karen, because yay for them, but I can't help thinking about poor Kelly. And, ouch, chapter two, I thought they were getting somewhere positive but then Jim drops that bombshell about why he gave up and it's actually kind of true... (or maybe not, and Pam will prove him wrong?) - because we've definitely seen that he's absorbed more of her than she has of him - mixed berry yoghurt and the teapot prove that, and we haven't seen many similar gestures from her end. I'd never even thought about that before! So sad.
Author's Response: Read Hole in My Pocket to get some Ryan/Kelly resolution (I wrote it before this story, so this is kind of a prequel). I think its hard to tell what's going on in Jim's head... I can't tell if he knows that Pam likes him or not so I thought I'd write something a little different. Hope you liked it!
Date: March 14, 2007 06:00 pm Title: we can work it out... maybe?
Magic camp! Hehe.
Author's Response: magicmagicmagic
Date: March 14, 2007 05:55 pm Title: Gentlemen, to your corners...
Oh, awesomeness. I love the Bridget Jones stuff- both the actual reference and the idea of a really bad fight between Roy and Jim, b/c in real life it wouldn't be all cool moves and cutting insults. And Michael intervening only after Ryan's been hit= so perfectly in character. This part, though, conjured up my favorite image and one that will have me laughing for the next few days whenever I think of it:
Jim managed to pull off one of Roy’s shoes and started beating him over the head with it.
Hehe! Can't wait to read the next chapter.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you like the shoe image! It was like a last second addition, it was a little over the top, but it was fun! Thanks!
Date: March 14, 2007 05:47 pm Title: we can work it out... maybe?
Okay, please tell me that Pam knows some stuff about Jim. Because I never thought about that, but it's a real possibility. Although I think she would have to know some stuff. Hurry, hurry, type fast!!!
Author's Response: Oh... she does ;) Hope you like it!
Date: March 14, 2007 05:39 pm Title: Gentlemen, to your corners...
You're lucky I know what happens with Ryan/Kelly after this, or I think you could have given me a heart attack! ;) Very nice all around.
Author's Response: Oh I know, I could never leave Ryan and Kelly hanging like that! Thanks for reviewing :)
Date: March 14, 2007 05:28 pm Title: we can work it out... maybe?
OK, I am hoping against hope that Pam is about to prove him wrong.....because that would be deeeeeeelicious....
Love it so far!
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! I hope the end is delicious enough for you ;)
Date: March 14, 2007 05:28 pm Title: we can work it out... maybe?
Of course cage matches work. If they didn't, everyone would still be in the cage. (All right, I'm paraphrasing.)
DinkinFlicka, you know how to make it up to us. 2 words: ketchup fights. (No tickling though - too Roy. Ugh!) 2 other words: steam, smut. Yet 2 more words: happy ending (in case we don't get one on the real show!).
Thanks.
Author's Response: Hope you like the ending! I haven't quite tackled smut yet, but maybe some day... maybe, haha. Thank you!
Date: March 14, 2007 05:22 pm Title: we can work it out... maybe?
Hooray for DMCP/FNB for locking the door behind her! And, jeez, you'd better be making it up to us soon! That hurts more than a punch from Roy.
Author's Response: I figured she had to step up to the plate sometime ;) And who wouldn't want to be locked in a room with Jim Halpert?? Sign me up.
Date: March 10, 2007 10:16 pm Title: Gentlemen, to your corners...
I really like this story, I can't wait to see what happens at the office! I really like Karen and Ryan together, but what about Kelly?
Date: March 05, 2007 06:56 pm Title: Gentlemen, to your corners...
OK, so you know you're brilliant, right? Seriously? This - killed me. Too much wonderfullness to quote, but here's a few: red solo cups as far as the eye could see; townies bring knives; and the fight...so true to life, people just become absolute morons when they fight - the lame trash talk and the shoe (priceless); and Michael finally doing something when Ryan gets hurt - perfect....And of course Jim would do it again.
Date: March 05, 2007 03:33 pm Title: Gentlemen, to your corners...
That was awesome. The really funny part is that the whole time that you were describing the fight song I could hear the song "It's Raining Men" in the back of my head and imagining the fight scene in Bridget Jones' diary (and sequel, of course,) as what something like what the fight must have looked like, and THEN, you mentioned Bridget Jones! So good work for portraying exactly what you were hoping to. I loved the lines exchanged between Jim and Pam, and the conversation between Ryan and Karen was great as well, although I'm glad to know that he's going to make up with Kelly later on. :) Roy and Jim being locked in the conference and break rooms was classic as well, especially the part where they wouldn't get the Emergency Kit from Jim for fear that he would "escape". LOL!!! Thanks for writing! I'm VERY excited to see Pam's POV.
Date: March 05, 2007 03:14 pm Title: Gentlemen, to your corners...
Ooooh, interesting start! And that "fight" just had me rolling. I think that was my favorite part of BJD. Can't wait to read more!
9 [Report This]Date: March 05, 2007 02:34 pm Title: Gentlemen, to your corners...
String Bean, lush, lunk head - this was a great fight! I loved Jim saying he'd do it again, and Pam being so happy about that, and Karen being so upset about that. And, I think Karen is about to find out what upset really is now that she's messing with Kelly's man! This is a great story, can't wait to read more!
Date: March 05, 2007 02:26 pm Title: Gentlemen, to your corners...
I laughed at the poor insults and giggled at the rolling around on the floor fight. I don't think it would happen that way (more like the punch to the face) in real life, but oh, I enjoyed it.
It was great to have it from Ryan's perspective; I look forward to Pam's as well. It was so funny that Jim got locked in the break room, and the whole thing with the first aid kit.
Hurray for all of this!
Only one (I hope constructive) criticism. I don't think Halpert is a Polish name (although of course Krasinski is), and even if Jim Halpert also has Polish ancestry through the non-Halpert line, a doofus like Roy is unlikely to know that or retain that info if he ever heard it. I still laughed, though.
This was just great. Bring on more when you can!
Date: March 05, 2007 02:21 pm Title: Gentlemen, to your corners...
So, I'm sitting here thinking how freaking amazing this was, and then I read the end notes. OMG! There's gonna be more?!?! asklasdkjfsdlakjglksadjg
I laughed out loud at the image of Jim tapping patiently on the glass wall of the conference room and holding up the medical kit. So awesome.
And Ryan/Karen? How have I never heard of this ship before? It's perfect.
Date: March 05, 2007 02:07 pm Title: Gentlemen, to your corners...
I love this! It's funny and realistic. Can't wait til' chapter two!
Date: March 05, 2007 01:43 pm Title: Gentlemen, to your corners...
Wow, can you say Cat Fight between Kelly and Karen. Jesus, I mean, I know its only fiction, but Karen really has a way of stepping in where she isn't wanted (by us). :P
Date: March 05, 2007 01:18 pm Title: Gentlemen, to your corners...
HA! Love how Michael doesn't get involved until his beloved Ryan gets hurt! And Karen can kiss Ryan all she wants. That is if she can handle the whoop-ass Kelly is going to bring. Hee!