1 [Report This]Date: June 28, 2018 02:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
My suggestion? Another chapter. I think this went quite well.
7 [Report This]Date: March 21, 2007 03:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
As much as I want Jim and Pam together, I truly like Karen and felt very sad for her in your story. But it was good that she acknowledged that Jim isn't giving enough to their relationship and that he has lied, even if it was "lies of a mission". Please update soon!
Date: March 16, 2007 12:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
its a good start. karen is nice.
i want more :) if you write more, i read more
Date: March 16, 2007 03:40 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, this is great! I really, really love your mature, understanding, giving Karen. It's so nice to see her painted as the exact opposite of the villain, and in a way that I don't even feel like I have to pity her, because she seems like she's okay anyway. I can't imagine it will go that way in the show, but oh, if it could...
Date: March 15, 2007 07:28 am Title: Chapter 1
I like this a lot. My one suggestion would be to change Jim's line about the "subject of our discourse". I love Pam's response to it, but Jim's line really doesn't sound Jim-like.
The stuff with Dwight and Angela? Priceless!
Sadly, I think Karen is going to fight tooth and nail to "keep" Jim (not that she really has him), but I'd like to see the kind of thing you've written instead. I like her line: "you have my permission to...".
Please continue with this!
Date: March 14, 2007 08:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
Maybe not entirely consistent with their personalities as shown this season, but adequately mentally scarring and treats Karen better than most (I think most people on this site would rather run her over with a bus, which is just mean). It's pretty good.
Author's Response: I think the whole premise goes against their characters, but I wanted to try a solution that would be the least damaging to Karen... and I figured the only way to do that well was to put her in control. I hope it worked well enough! I have too much sympathy for her as a character. Thanks for the comments :)
Date: March 14, 2007 08:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really like this idea - that Pam would be honest and Karen would be decent and understanding, even while heartbroken. It feels way more realistic than stories where Karen is vilified or just plain mean. From what we've seen of her in canon, IMO, Karen would, if anything else, be reserved or try to hold in her anger/frustration until she was alone.
I don't think the story needs serious reworking at all. I like the idea that Jim expects a catfight and is confused by Pam and Karen's drama-free return to the office. I like the idea that Pam would come clean with Karen while acknowledging that Jim had moved on and she was too late. And I like that Karen (the only person who can see all sides of the situation) recognizes that Pam is mistaken.
Guh. This is a rambling comment, and its past my bedtime to boot. But I wanted to tell you how much I liked your story!
*slinks away*
Author's Response: Wow, thank you! I really appreciate this review :) I'll try to get working on part 2!