Date: March 25, 2007 10:22 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow. I had to stop and take some time to leave a decent review for this piece. It's just so rich. A small little snippet of time, but an intensely meaningful few moments (that so many have been waiting so long to see!) and you paint the details so vividly, the click of the door, Pam's clenched jaw, that it all comes alive with details that video couldn't possibly convey.
And the Milky Way? I love how you took this intense, passionate moment and infused it with the good-natured humor that is the foundation of their relationship. "...even when things are wrong, there’s so much about this that is right."
Exactly.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really appreciate your thoughtfulness. :)
Date: March 25, 2007 10:09 am Title: Chapter 1
So......so..........wonderful.....sigh. Beautifully done. Love it.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: March 25, 2007 07:52 am Title: Chapter 1
wow great story!
Author's Response: Thank you!
10 [Report This]Date: March 25, 2007 07:09 am Title: Chapter 1
This was just beautiful. I think you've captured the emotions we see running across Pam's face perfectly here. I could really see her in my mind.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! I'm so happy you enjoyed it.
Date: March 25, 2007 05:27 am Title: Chapter 1
This was perfect. I love your imagery here. The way his hands are bracing himself on the snack machine - sliding down the buttons. It's quiet and simple and that's really how THEY are. Beautiful. I love your writing.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so happy to hear you liked the story.
Date: March 25, 2007 05:04 am Title: Chapter 1
This is one of those (rare) stories, where I read it and think, yeah - that's IT. Pam is achingly vivid here - her uncertainty, insecurity, wanting to be brave, fear, longing and...all of it. And I love how when IT happens - it comes down to a simple, unexpected moment of honesty - no big speeches or melodrama required. I think that's exactly how it would be. When he simply closes the blinds...oh my. And how perfect when the candy bar drops and he laughs - even in this overwhelmingly emotional moment, he's still Jim. This is just so FULL - really a true and luscious thing.
Author's Response: I know this sounds silly, but I really treasure your reviews so much -- you're always so thorough and thoughtful and kind, and the completely wonderful thing is that you are such an experienced and talented writer that it means that much more coming from you. Thank you so much!
Date: March 25, 2007 12:57 am Title: Chapter 1
update soon!
Author's Response: This is a oneshot, but I appreciate your enthusiasm!
Date: March 25, 2007 12:25 am Title: Chapter 1
OK, I really can't get over how well you've got Pam down. - you've breathed pam into practically every paragraph, and it shows. it shows.
I want to shut up but I want to make sure you know how much I love this.
Author's Response:
Ha! I get the impression you kind of liked it....
No, seriously. Thank you so much!
Date: March 25, 2007 12:22 am Title: Chapter 1
Crap, do you know how beautiful this is? absolutely gorgeous, flowing, stopping but not really stopping, and the descriptions, and the movements, and lines, and the words, and the way everything just works. I love this. I adore this.
And the emotions of this - just wonderful, palpable, so there. I love how everything meshes together [I've already said that but I do] and you can see the emotions are meshed together, too - there's never a moment when she's feeling just one thing, and...wow.
I loved how well you've written Pam, as well - something about the almost poetic way you've written this makes it seem as if it's hers, in her colours and strokes and lines.
And I adored so many lines about this it's insane - the way you say she never really thought about him, except - all the time. And I love how some questions end in fullstops, how some things she says [and doesn't] he can read so well - of course he can. He doesn't misinterpret.
And the imagery! So beautiful it's brilliant. I loved the final part, the idea of them standing together, there, against the vending machine, him laughing into her skin because he hit a button, how she goes it's just what I wanted and he goes I know and you get the strangest feeling they're not just talking about the bar - and I love that you didn't mention that, so we see that ourselves.
I'd give you some strange 'you are my idol!' star-sticker but I'd feel like a doofus.
Absolutely lovely, though. I love this so much it's insane. Gorgeous. I don't know how to stop.
Heck, I'm probably going to end up sending you a 'you are my idol!' star-shaped-sticker, anyway.
Author's Response:
I'm almost afraid to respond to this because it is so beyond awesome and I want to do your comment justice (even though there's no way I could do that since it is so completely fabulous). I can't tell you how much I appreciate the thought and time you put into reading and commenting on this. It is seriously amazing and you are wonderful.
I'm so happy to hear you liked the line about how she doesn't think about him even though she does because that's really what I think Pam's like, or at least what she used to be like -- she really doesn't realize how much Jim means to her, how much he is in her mind and her life. Glad to hear that rang true for you too!
And complimenting my imagery -- well. YOU WIN.
Thanks again. You are amazing for this comment.
Date: March 24, 2007 11:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
WOW...what an emotional rollercoaster. I just loved this. You could just feel everything that the two of them were feeling. Good stuff!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
10 [Report This]Date: March 24, 2007 11:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
There's so much emotion in this that it was almost overwhelming. And there are so many lines that I want to quote back to you and say are brilliant, but. I'll just do this one, because it was the first I immediately loved: "She doesn’t think about Jim again that morning, except for when she makes tea, and takes a shower, and brushes her teeth, and chooses her outfit." Because, YES. It's so much exactly like that.
And her fear of him going out when she isn't around and Roy hurting him then was so palpable and wonderful.
And then the whole break room scene. With them against the vending machine and everything. The whole image of him laughing against her shoulder and neck because he accidentally pressed the buttons is so in character and so intimate and just so good.
Author's Response: Hearing good things from you is just... amazing. Thank you for such a thoughtful review!
Date: March 24, 2007 11:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
I am so glad I wasn't able to sleep, because this was fantastic. The writing is beautiful. And I love love love how he kisses her against the vending machine. This is really a great story. Good job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! So glad you enjoyed the story. :)
Date: March 24, 2007 11:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very beautifully written. Best fic I've read in a long time - I enjoyed it thoroughly. Excellent work!
Author's Response: What a compliment! Thank you so much!
Date: March 24, 2007 10:54 pm Title: Chapter 1
I am embarrassed to admit that I am a skimmer. Nearly everything I read, I skim. As fast as I can. I usually enjoy knowing what happens in the end more than the journey itself. But there is something about everything you write (especially this) that I must read slowly and take in every word, one by one.
So, thank you. I really enjoyed this. So good.
Author's Response: I'm so flattered you take the time to read my stories carefully! Thanks so much, and I'm so glad to hear you enjoyed this.
Date: March 24, 2007 10:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
Beautiful. Oh. Man. I can't find the words to describe it.
It makes me feel fluttery inside. xD. Great pick-me-up after the spoilers.
.. Still speechless, though. :DD.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I steer VERY clear of spoilers, so I'm not sure what you mean by that, but I'm still glad to hear you enjoyed the story, haha. :)