1 [Report This]Date: May 18, 2023 02:30 am Title: Chapter 1
I enjoyed this collection of frustrated moments from Roy Anderson's point of view. While I adore the purity of Jim's love for Pam and acknowledge the faults of Roy and Pam being together (and Pam also bore some of the blame for this as well), it's never pleasant to see your significant other seeming particularly close to someone else. Roy's violence was unjustified, but his frustration, jealousy, and anger were understandable. The end of "The Alliance" is one of my favourites. Great piece!
Date: April 08, 2007 07:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
So good. You've done a really good job with Roy's voice and POV. I like the "big-ass nose", that the basketball hit was on purpose, and that Roy saw Jim's reaction to setting the date! Awesome. You packed a lot into 5 short paragraphs!
Author's Response: Roy wasn't the easiest to write, but it was worth it. I was going to make each part longer, but I figured short and simple would be better.
Date: April 06, 2007 03:58 pm Title: Chapter 1
I wish he did hit Jim, I wanted more of a fight. But then again, Jim's pretty face would have gotten messed up, so I guesss it was better that way
Author's Response: Jim kind of deserved to get hit though. It might have been fun to watch Roy clobber him.
Date: April 05, 2007 06:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
Aw, poor Roy. This love triangle hasn't been easy for him, either. I love that you've written it from the first person point of view.
Nice job!
Author's Response: Thanks, yeah, I started out in third person, but it just didn't seem to flow right. I have to say, after "The Negotiation," I felt kind of bad for Roy. Maybe he should have just hit Jim and gotten that over with.