Date: April 12, 2007 07:54 pm Title: Chapter 5: Attack!
Um, OK..."I love the Food Network" and "What in the name of Rachel Ray" are two of the funniest lines I've ever read in fic - ever. Thanks for the laugh.
Author's Response: Haha I'm so glad! He's a fun one to write for :) Thanks for reading!
Date: April 12, 2007 03:06 pm Title: Chapter 5: Attack!
Oooh, Michael's in troooouble!
And so are Jim and Pam! But it was worth it. That tiny little close, tense moment was hot!
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it!
Date: April 12, 2007 01:49 pm Title: Chapter 5: Attack!
"What in the name of Rachel Ray is going on here?" Brilliant and subtle nod to the Sargent's predilection for cooking shows. This was a very strong chapter, and I liked the sudden tension brought up by the possible move to New York. What may have started out as an experiment in battling writer's block is turning into a Wendy Blue classic! Way to go!
Date: April 12, 2007 01:09 pm Title: Chapter 3: Not So At Ease
I've figured out the bus conversation now, and something I was confused about in a later chapter, so... win/win. Plus, you win because you wrote it, so... win/win/win.
Author's Response: Hooray for conflict resolution =) Glad it got cleared up!
Date: April 12, 2007 09:56 am Title: Chapter 5: Attack!
YOU HAVE FINALS NEXT WEEK? I have them... um, after that. In May. They deserve to die. *kills all finals* there we go, all better now.
Eew, Michael with BO. There is an image (Smell) I would rather not have.
MOVE TO NEW YORK!?!?!?!?!?!?!!?!?!?!?!?!? What are you doing to me, trying to give me a heart attack!
Although, I gotta say "armed with a shoe" is so oddly funny I couldn't stop laughing
Angela brought Holy Water... haha
Cute Jam moment :) they should have ignored Sergeant Miller. Although I think I would laugh at "What in the name of Rachel Ray"
Yay I make your eyes look like an equal sign
Author's Response: I'm pretty sure that was the most enthusiastic review I've ever gotten, so yay for you! So glad you liked this chapter, and the Great New York Mystery will be cleared up soon. Thanks for reading!
Date: April 12, 2007 06:38 am Title: Chapter 5: Attack!
Hmm... Jim is being so friendly with Pam and has kept the socks as a little memento, but he's moving with Karen to NY? I don't get that. Maybe that will become more clear to me as we go on.
But no matter, because... I'm enjoying this. I liked the banter about demotion, the stiletto heel, Jim thinking about Pam's nightgown, Angela (things that are awesome, BTW), Jim and Pam having physical contact, and "Phyllis, with a look of delight on her face continued to chase after him with a soap-filled loufa sponge." Also, I liked that Pam is pissed off at Jim about NY.
I hope I made you smile like this =).
Author's Response: I promise the whole NY thing will make sense in chapters to come, just sit tight! Really glad you enjoyed this chapter, it was a lot of fun to write! Thanks for reading!
Date: April 11, 2007 06:29 pm Title: Chapter 4: "Friendly" Competition
"the few, the proud…the not-so-many" - awesome.
Dwight's Talking Head about gruel and prune juice was very Dwight, right down to the "satisfied look".
My one nitpick is that Karen seems to be very competitive. Call of Duty KarentheJimSlayer, anyone? Her "Call of Duuuuty!" TH in... one of the early Season3 episodes. And A Benihana Christmas dueling parties.
I love that Jim got "caught" watching Pam...!
I'll stay with you; get to the updates when you can. And remember, grades and crap like that are important! (They really are.)
Author's Response: Thanks for reading! I suppose I should have clarified that Karen was playing along as though she wasn't competitive, even though it's very obvious that she is. Good eye though, I'm sure it'll save me in future chapters. Thanks again!
Date: April 11, 2007 06:15 pm Title: Chapter 4: "Friendly" Competition
At first I thought of just playing Tag but come on, what are we, kids?
HAHAHA!
“I’m afraid I can’t disclose that information. It’s classified,” Jim said with mock seriousness.
Hee! So very Jim! Love it!
Author's Response: So glad you do :) Thanks for reading!
Date: April 11, 2007 04:58 pm Title: Chapter 4: "Friendly" Competition
I've just read the first 4 chapters and I'm really enjoying this. What a great situation to put the "gang" in. I love your characterizations of Dwight and Michael. Buyer beware...hah!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Glad you're having fun reading (I'm sure having fun writing)!
Date: April 11, 2007 11:54 am Title: Chapter 3: Not So At Ease
Ma'am yes ma'am! (Is that what you would say?) Anyway, totally enjoying this - love the banter, the Michaelisms (Semper Fi is no mercy? hahahhaha). Oh, and the drill sergeant's I enjoy the food network totally cracked me up :)
Author's Response: So glad you're liking it :) More to come soon!
Date: April 11, 2007 01:23 am Title: Chapter 3: Not So At Ease
Hah! This is made of win! I'm so excited to see where this goes!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad it's made of win ;) More to come soon!
Date: April 10, 2007 04:22 pm Title: Chapter 3: Not So At Ease
Well I don't have time for 50 reviews, haha, but does one suffice?
I can just imagine Michael trying to take over at a boot camp and totally get shot down. And the part when the guy was like Bam! I laughed out loud so hard!
I can honestly see all of this happenening on the show. I'm like watching it in my head while I'm reading. Awesome job! (Also: I loved the competitiveness between Jim/Pam, it's been lacking this season!) Can't wait for more!!
Author's Response: Thanks! More is on the way!
Date: April 10, 2007 03:59 pm Title: Chapter 3: Not So At Ease
This is really fun so far! I'm loving your Michael and Dwight, and the Sergeant's simple talking head about the Food Network made me burst out laughing.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm really glad you're enjoying it! More to come soon!
Date: April 10, 2007 02:52 pm Title: Chapter 3: Not So At Ease
I love the sergeant saying BAM, and I'd really like to know what Jim didn't want to talk about on the bus.
I didn't actually drop to do my review. I'm just sitting. Is that okay? Seriously, if I'm on the floor, I can't reach the keyboard.
Author's Response:
I suppose sitting is alright. I mean, you did review, so I can't be too mad right? :)
The subject of the talk on the bus will come to light a couple chapters from now, so stay tuned! Thanks for reading!
Date: April 10, 2007 02:26 pm Title: Chapter 3: Not So At Ease
interesting story, to be sure. waiting to see where it goes. respect.
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad it's keeping your interest. Word.
Date: April 10, 2007 02:04 pm Title: Chapter 3: Not So At Ease
This is very well written and flows naturally like an episode. Keep it coming!
Author's Response: Thanks! More to come soon!
Date: April 09, 2007 03:16 pm Title: Chapter 2: Move Out
What, no shortie-shirt for Jim? Then again, that would be kinda gay. Um, I mean, lame.
Curious as to what happens next.
Author's Response:
This is Basic-Training, not the Village People ;)
Thanks for reading, more to come soon!
Date: April 09, 2007 03:12 pm Title: Chapter 1: A Few Good Men
No, there's no reason for it to be awkward... well, maybe there's reason...
I liked this a lot; it seemed really in-character:
“But as Colonel, I feel—“
“Assistant to the—wait what?” Michael began to respond out of habit..."
I think I'll go see what happens next.
Date: April 09, 2007 02:29 pm Title: Chapter 2: Move Out
Guh...Jim in uniform...I like where this going :) Is this teeny bit inspired by Jarhead?
Author's Response: Actually, not at all inspired by Jarhead, I forgot he was in that movie lol. Thanks for reading!
Date: April 09, 2007 02:22 pm Title: Chapter 1: A Few Good Men
Man, I'm really enjoying your Dwight! Great voice, with the "Stratego" at home and "You're either with us or against us." Pefect! I could hear Dwight saying all these things. Looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading!
Date: April 09, 2007 02:21 pm Title: Chapter 1: A Few Good Men
Man, I'm really enjoying your Dwight! Great voice, with the "Stratego" at home and "You're either with us or against us." Pefect! I could hear Dwight saying all these things. Looking forward to more!
10 [Report This]Date: April 09, 2007 09:19 am Title: Chapter 1: A Few Good Men
Okay this was hilarious. The ending was fantastic. I loved Jim the Lieutenant! Now I have a very strong need to see John in uniform. Oh boy.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm really glad you liked it. More to come soon!
Date: April 09, 2007 04:52 am Title: Chapter 1: A Few Good Men
Have you been working on your vertical pushups :P
Author's Response: Haha, not yet. Soon though! Thanks for reading!
Date: April 08, 2007 11:11 pm Title: Chapter 1: A Few Good Men
You are a very talented writer. This dialogue is spot on, and I love the little talking heads you've included. Dwight, Jim, Michael, Pam... really there doesn't seem to be anyone you can't write.
“Oh my God,” he said quietly. “We’re going to war.”
That line was the first time I laughed out loud.
“No, you know what Jim, we can’t have this kind of mutiny already. You’re either with us or against us.”
That was the second time.
“And frankly, I don’t appreciate that kind of talk from a subordinate.”
And after this part it was pretty much all over for me. HiLARious!
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! Seriously, the writers of this show are gods in my opinion and the fact that you think I'm staying true to the characters they write for really means a lot to me. Thanks so much for reading!
Date: April 08, 2007 09:50 pm Title: Chapter 1: A Few Good Men
I love it. Your Dwight is dead on--I was actually laughing out loud! Actually, all your voices are authentic. Great job. I can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Dwight is so fun to write and I'm really happy to hear that you think I do him justice. Thanks for reading!