Date: April 15, 2007 12:55 pm Title: The End
I never saw the movie you took your inspiration from so I didn't what to expect. But I was just swept along by each chapter you wrote. You did a great job building suspense for me. I don't know how the actual movie ends but I love the way this one did - kinda of a dawn of a new day...
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it. thanks for the feedback. The movies usually end with most of the characters dead or in very bad spots (like missing legs and bleeding). I just had to make it end happier.
Date: April 14, 2007 03:35 pm Title: The End
Great read. I loved it.
Date: April 14, 2007 02:51 pm Title: The End
I think you did a really good job telling a story so dark. The ending was really well done. I really liked teh warmth and calmness.
Date: April 14, 2007 02:06 pm Title: The End
I like the warmth at the end, and that Dwight (once again!) was a hero! Like Hiro. On Heroes.
Question: Was Andy really the Jigsaw Killer, or a copycat? I'm assuming a copycat...
Author's Response: I agree -- he was a copycat. His real beef was with Jim for taking Karen from him, and then not really wanting her. Thanks for reading.
Date: April 14, 2007 01:33 pm Title: The End
Loved it! Great job! Thanks!
Date: April 14, 2007 12:49 pm Title: The End
I don't like violent "entertainment" or horror movies....but I still really, really liked the story as a metaphor for the struggles of all these characters....great job with a unique story idea!
Date: April 14, 2007 12:42 pm Title: The End
Aw, I love how Karen calls pam sister. It's adroable, I wish they were better friends on the show...oh well. Loved the story, thank GOD nobody died.!! =)
Date: April 14, 2007 12:39 pm Title: The End
wow. i was terrified to read this, i didn't know if i would like it, but i just read it all at once and now i'm glad i did b/c no cliffhangers. that was so amazing. moving in so many ways. i wanted to cry and scream and i gasped out loud a few times. great job. good story.
10 [Report This]Date: April 14, 2007 11:45 am Title: The End
Thanks for the story. It was very unique and I loved it.
Date: April 13, 2007 11:22 pm Title: The Fallout
That makes sense out of all the characters that it would be andy, he is a little crazy, but I was honestly expecting dwight lol
Author's Response: Hey thanks for all the feedback. I wanted to make it Andy because then I could parallel the Andy/Karen jealous situation with the Roy/Pam one to try to throw everyone off. Tempting as it may be, Dwight is Dwight -- he just has no (believable) parallel!
Date: April 13, 2007 11:18 pm Title: The Choice
Even though it's totally sick, I'm really glad jim picked pam. I can't even imagine how sad she would have looked if he didnt
Date: April 13, 2007 11:15 pm Title: The Test
oh my gosh, this is so sick, but I have to keep reading. I own the first two saw movies and they both freak me out. agh I can't stand the suspense
Date: April 13, 2007 06:05 pm Title: The Fallout
that was a cool twist, I just kinda found it lost its scary factor by Andy calling Jim tuna, it was a little too light hearted.
Author's Response: This is great feedback -- I just reread it and I think you're right. I had initially wanted him to say it to confirm who he was, but then I kept using it. I actually revised the story to get rid of all but the first "Tuna." Don't want to lose any scare factor!
Date: April 13, 2007 04:31 pm Title: The Fallout
Oh, goodness. Okay. Okay. Breathing under control now.
I'm so invested in this story that it's not even funny, and to be honest I initially didn't think I'd like it that much. I think you've really taken it to another level by revealing Andy and keeping them alive....fantasticcc.
Can't wait for the next chapter.
Date: April 13, 2007 11:47 am Title: The Fallout
Woo! do I get half a cookie? :-P
Date: April 13, 2007 11:46 am Title: The Fallout
Andy was my second guess. Don't second guesses count? (Like second drink?)
I think Andy will take Karen to the bar he owns and make her be a waitress. They do have that whole Sam and Diane thing going on, after all.
Good luck figuring out where you're going with this! I'll read it when I see it. I'm glad I took a chance on this.
Really, I was only still reading to see when Sandra Bullock showed up...
Author's Response: Added you to the end note -- you get half credit for second guess. thanks for the feedback.
Date: April 13, 2007 01:31 am Title: The Choice
OMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMG!!!!!!!!!!!! Eeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!! You are a genius! This is....wow!!! So twisted and sick but I can't stop reading! Write like the wind!!!
Is it Creed?
Author's Response: Thanks! Ch 3 is up. Hope you like it!
Date: April 12, 2007 04:52 pm Title: The Test
Ok wait.....i think its creed!!!!
10 [Report This]Date: April 12, 2007 04:41 pm Title: The Choice
OMG WHO IS IT?! I don't even want to guess! Is it ANDY? OMG who who who?!@!@!
Date: April 12, 2007 02:27 pm Title: The Choice
Creepy! Yikes!
Do you really think Jim at this moment loves Karen? If so, did he 48 hours ago, or just as she's dying? Will saying that at her death make him feel worse later or better? How will it make Pam feel? How did one little line make me go off on this question tangent? I kind of think from Karen's POV, it's worse to hear that (if it's the first time), knowing that he just chose Pam, and chose by default to kill her.
I'm going with Dwight as the crazed killer. You said it would get more deranged, and remember when Dwight said "Imagine if I was deranged?" (That's right, I'm following a clue which was probably not a clue.) 2nd guess - Andy.
I just realized that you're playing the real game of Swedge's Vanquish, Court, Betrothal, except it's just Vanquish/Torture vs. don't Vanquish/don't Torture. Oooh, maybe Swedge is the Jigsaw killer. He just had Karen tasered in another fanfic, so...
But Dwight had the bloody glove (Conflict Resolution)...
Author's Response: Thanks for the comments. I tried to make the "love you" come across as forced and awkward (and I was assuming it's the first time he's told her that). Karen has wanted to hear it so badly but only gets it now, when his actions prove it's just a vacant statement.
Date: April 12, 2007 02:03 pm Title: The Choice
interesting. truth, never really dug the Saw films. i get the point of them, a sort of forced self-actualization, and that's an interesting train of thought to be sure, but they just seem like a sort of glamorized torture. zombies, though, you can't do better than zombies.
this is well written, though, so, good on that. i'm thinking Dwight. probably wrong. i can hardly ever guess the killer, though that's usually cause i don't want to ruin the big reveal. if anything, books, movies, if they can pull of the big reveal and it actually be a surprise, that's when it works. hey, guess what, i'm done with this ramble. peace.
Date: April 12, 2007 02:03 pm Title: The Choice
Andy. My guess has to be Andy. Well, it's just a guess...
HURRY AND POST THE NEXT CHAPTER!
Author's Response: New chapter is up! Thanks for the comments!
Date: April 12, 2007 01:59 pm Title: The Test
woah. creepy. Please, god, let him choose Pam! I haven't read the second chapter yet, but just had to review right now. dang. This is a crossover of the most twisted kind, but I like it.
Date: April 12, 2007 01:05 pm Title: The Choice
I think somehow Karen is involved in this twisted game and she hooked herself because she honestly thought Jim would choose her and didn't hook Pam up because the pain of Jim choosing Karen over Pam would have been far greater than any voltage.
Or my other choice is Phyllis cause Karen made fun of her perfume and thus deserves a little voltage.
Looking forward to the reveal!
Date: April 12, 2007 12:29 pm Title: The Test
Oh no. Don't leave us hanging like this! I am riveted!