Date: August 20, 2007 12:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
I absolutely loved this story. The inner monologues of both Jim and Pam are pitch perfect. Great job!
10 [Report This]Date: June 18, 2007 09:33 am Title: Chapter 5
This was a fantastic story. And it was only your first fanfiction! I really like how you dove into Pam's life before Dunder Mifflin. Her interactions with Roy were written perfectly. Inspired choice to make Pam forget her engagement ring on her first day of work. It just made the inenvitable heartache for Jim even more amplified. I'm defiantly going to have to read your latest fiction to read your version of the next day's date.
Author's Response: I love your screen name! Thanks so much for reading. Yes, some day when I find that my life has been totally taken over by JAM fan fiction, I will have this story to blame.
Date: May 29, 2007 10:18 am Title: Chapter 5
Hey, you should keep going with this story. I really liked it, especially chapter 5. I like where it seems to be going. I guess maybe you'd have to start a new story...Pam's second day, or something. I don't know. It was just really well done.
Author's Response: Thanks! I have indeed taken many stabs at writing "Pam's Second Day at Dunder-Mifflin." I haven't quite pulled it together yet, but hopefully I'll get it done in the next couple weeks. It is hard to think about a Jim/Pam "date" that ends with Pam telling Jim she's engaged when there are so many great post-The Job fics around of their REAL first date. I guess I just want to revel in the happiness for a little while longer before I revisit the heartbreak.
Date: May 13, 2007 06:59 pm Title: Chapter 5
Aw, this is fun, and yet heart-breaking, thinking about Jim going from happy and excited about meeting her, to finding out she's engaged... :( Poor Jim.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Yes, I couldn't face writing the next day, when Jim finds out he's engaged...but I know it would make a perfect epilogue to actually write their lunch at Cugino's. I'm still thinking about doing, if I think I can face the heartache.
10 [Report This]Date: May 10, 2007 12:18 pm Title: Chapter 5
Wow. I'm really enjoying this. And it is FUNNY. (which is, in my opinion, the rarest thing to find in these fics) I think you really have the character's voices down. "Oxey Lady"...lol... NOW FINISH IT!!!! : ) Subtle....
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. It feels a bit open-ended...I was toying with adding an epilogue of Jim and Pam's lunch the next day, but I don't know if I can take the heartache of Jim finding out Pam is engaged. I still might do it though, if I'm in a particularly masochistic mood.
Date: May 09, 2007 08:09 am Title: Chapter 5
When you wrote "watercolor landscape" above, I thought it said "watercooler". That has got to be a sign that I am way too into The Office :) This is def. one of the best "Pam meeting Jim" fics around; good job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
10 [Report This]Date: May 07, 2007 01:53 pm Title: Chapter 4
Sorry I haven't reviewed this before... lazy to sign in. Just wanted to let you know I am totally LOVING this look into what Pam's first day at Scranton was probably like. Everything with the characterization and the dialogue is so spot on. The Dwight prank, the first JAM phone call... I am absolutely in love with this. I really hope you continue soon!!!
Author's Response: Wow, that is seriously the best review I could ever ask for. Don't worry, the next chapter is on the way...I just hope it can live up to the previous ones! Thank you so much for reading/reviewing!
Date: May 01, 2007 11:58 am Title: Chapter 3
I will be saying "son of a beet!" for the rest of the day now...thank you!
Author's Response: You're very welcome, secondrink! Thank YOU so much for reading. I just posted a review to one of your stories....
Date: May 01, 2007 09:44 am Title: Chapter 3
I really like this story, so far, FNB. I like the concept. Well written.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I have been following your story, Reincarnation, but for some reason I just never reviewed...forgive me! I really like the story - very heavy. The thought of Pam being faced with the daughter of Jim and Karen is just heartbreaking. I definitely review the next chapter.
Date: April 30, 2007 08:25 pm Title: Chapter 2
Doh! Update soon! I had my heart set on Jim seeing Pam and his heart just flipping around in his chest. :)
Author's Response: Hahah, sorry, I guess I'm starting off slow! Don't worry, I'm writing their first impressions of each other right now, so you can expect it very soon. Thanks for reading!
Date: April 29, 2007 10:46 am Title: Chapter 1
"listening to the sounds of Roy getting the kids ready for school, in a house with a terrace…" Haha. Pam was really kidding herself. At best, Roy is a "help get the kids ready for school" kind of guy. At best, and I kind of even doubt that.
"Their whole lives were set." Thud. I mean, um, every girl's dream! Swoon!
"Pam just worried that taking a 9-to-5 office job would make her life seem even more routine, and would crush her already waning energy for drawing." What a great line.
"next to a maroon Corolla" - Pam, just jump in the Corolla. Step toward the light. Or is it, "just jump the guy who owns the Corolla?" One of those things.
FNB, you did a great job with this. I'm really glad there's more to come; you have a way of bringing Pam's inner life to light.
Author's Response: Thanks! I love your penname, by the way. Maybe she should jump the guy who owns the Corolla IN the Corolla...yes that's the one!!
Yes, I was trying to come up with the most idealized version of Roy possible, because that MUST be what Pam was thinking of being engaged to him all those years.
My next chapter is going to delve into Jim's inner life...this will probably be much trickier, but hopefully I will not disappoint!
Date: April 29, 2007 12:17 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, this is gonna be good. I can tell. I love how you have them parking next to Jim's car on Pam's first day at D-M. Foreshadowing! Woo!
Author's Response: How perfect that you are my first reviewer! Thanks a lot. I'm working on a similar Jim-centric chapter for some time in the next couple days.