10 [Report This]Date: April 30, 2007 12:14 pm Title: Summer Picnic 2006
The second person is very effective here...I am chomping at the bit for Summer '07 (and I'm guessing '08 may be pretty sweet too).
Author's Response: Happy you think the voice works - I've always liked the sense of immediacy and intimacy of 2nd person fics, but had been kind of scared to try it. Summer of 2007/2008 coming soon! Thanks much, Brokenloon.
Date: April 30, 2007 12:05 pm Title: Summer Picnic 2006
Poor lost Pam. She has lost her direction and her compass. The analogy is indeed perfect.
Author's Response: Yes - her compass is broken. Exactly. Thanks again, MA - and for the pretty ribbon too!
Date: April 30, 2007 12:02 pm Title: Summer Picnic 2005
That is just...awww. Put me in line too for making out with a close by Jim Halpert. Pam, you silly goose.
I like that Pam is scared of maps. She has such a restricted view of the world in many ways. It is a great analogy.
Jim's line about Dwight and the hostages was so funny and right on target with what I imagine Jim would say.
Author's Response: So glad the metaphor works for you, MA. I do think Pam is kind of adrift in the world...and I totally agree: kiss him, you damn fool! Jim's perceptions/reactions to Dwight are one of my favorite parts of the show, so glad that made you laugh. Thanks for this!
Date: April 30, 2007 11:48 am Title: Summer Picnic 2006
you’re not sure how to get home from here. This breaks my heart a little bit. I say 'a little' only because there is more to come and I am an optimist....
Author's Response: As well you should be, lisahoo. More soon - might make your heart feel a little better. Thanks, you!
9 [Report This]Date: April 30, 2007 11:47 am Title: Summer Picnic 2006
asldkljdf! So amazing! I am in love.
Author's Response: wfyrlxd back at you (?) It's great to feel the love. Stay tuned...and many thanks, juteux.
10 [Report This]Date: April 30, 2007 11:33 am Title: Summer Picnic 2005
First of all, I love knowing what people are listening to as they write - and that song is so haunting.
That said: I love this concept -- LOVE it. Can't wait for the future picnics.
As usual, you just capture that emotion of initially falling so well: "You have that giddy tingly sensation in your chest, as if you’re embarking on an adventure. Like everything is lush with possibility and you have all the time in the world. It’s been a long, long time since summer felt this way. You’re aware that this is the wrong person, the wrong situation to feel it again. Still, you do. You do."
That just makes me ache for poor Pam, because i know that has to be exactly what it has been like for her for such a long time now.
Love the extended metaphor here - particularly Pam's desire to get lost with Jim. Sigh.
This: "When you pull up in front of your building that evening, you sit in the car for a moment, very still. The way he’s looking at you, you think that if you kissed him right now, he’d kiss you back. And then maybe you’d kiss him again. And again. But, that’s not the way it is. So instead, you quickly squeeze his hand and simply say thanks. He smiles at you as you climb out, but it’s a smile like a frown."
...is damned near perfect. Wow.
So looking forward to the next installment!
Author's Response: Ah, the lovely girl7! How tickled am I to get a review from you so quickly? Not to mention thrilled that you felt the ache and liked the metaphor...didn't want to overwork it, but wanted it to weave throughout the chapters. It gets kind of sad, but things will look up, I promise. Thanks, as always, for being such a faithful reader and so supportive!
10 [Report This]Date: April 30, 2007 11:30 am Title: Summer Picnic 2006
How heartbreaking this chapter is, with Pam missing Jim and getting drunk at the party, and then going home with bugbites instead of sunburn and knotted hair.
And this line is perfect:
You trust they know the way, because you’re not sure how to get home from here
Author's Response: Don't worry...I promise things will brighten up in upcoming chapters. Thanks again!
10 [Report This]Date: April 30, 2007 11:28 am Title: Summer Picnic 2005
I love this chapter! The tone of it is perfect, and I love the way you get inside Pam's head here. I'm looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Thanks so much PuffingNoise! It's my first time writing a story in the second person (always wanted to try, but was kind of intimidated by it,) so it means alot to hear it put you in Pam's head. (Now if only I could do that on the show, and get her to talk to Jim already!)
9 [Report This]Date: April 30, 2007 11:12 am Title: Summer Picnic 2005
Dear Pam - I would have kissed him. Love, xoxoxo
;) You know I adore this. Just wanted to say it again.
Author's Response:
Dear Pam, Me too. Love, Colette (that floozy.)
Appreciate your saying it again...it's a lovely thing to hear!