1 [Report This]Date: November 02, 2021 07:37 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath
"Well, something good came out of this. The mystery of the strange noise we would sometimes hear coming from the roof has been solved." Angela presumably should have known.
But honestly, this moment with Jim and Pam at the end is incredibly sweet. What a nice note to end a funny fic!
1 [Report This]Date: November 02, 2021 07:33 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions
"I had sex with Michael Scott in the bathroom of a Chili’s restaurant. Specific enough for you? Are you happy now? Did you hear that, mom?" I love this. And Angela being turned on by Dwight's suit of armor is... very Angela.
1 [Report This]Date: November 02, 2021 07:29 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions
This is hilarious. You've got a spot-on Michael voice, and the Jim-Dwight banter is a lot of fun. Plus Ryan is quite properly obnoxious here. Poor Kelly.
Dwight correctly predicting Angela won't answer an improper question is a great Dwangela moment.
10 [Report This]Date: May 08, 2010 08:51 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions
A welcome break from all the angst and sturm und drang. I laughed out loud too. Please write more humor - you're very good at it.
10 [Report This]Date: February 10, 2010 08:18 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions
(Michael) (Looks puzzled, hesitates) I guess…in the butt?
-I just laughed out loud when I read this. I've honestly never laughed out loud at a fanfic. I usually just smirk or smile, but I actually snorted and burst out laughing. haha
Date: November 04, 2009 10:56 am Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath
Really fun, brokenloon! This was just the dose of happy that I needed.
Date: November 04, 2009 10:48 am Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions
LOLOLOL In the butt FTW! It's what you immediately associate with this show, isn't it?!
Date: November 04, 2009 09:55 am Title: Part I: Five point questions
After all this time, I'm still discovering stories, brokenloon. This was brought to my attention on the forum by Cousin Mose when I requested some happy fic. I'm really enjoying it, because I grew up on The Newlywed Game (although should my parents have let me watch it? hmmm). I can envision ole Bob Eubanks. As an aside, it also brings to mind the classic "that be the butt, Bob" comment. Surely you're familiar with that ; ) On to chap 2... : D
10 [Report This]Date: October 04, 2009 03:33 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath
i love how all the couples spend their time after the show. so cute and it's nice to see how they actually are all in love with each other!
great story, this was really well written and hilarious!
10 [Report This]Date: October 04, 2009 03:24 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions
what happened to bob vance and phyllis? i hope they would've said the restaurant bathroom on v-day! whew, that was awkward. great story by the way, hilarious, and sorry i didn't review the last chapter, it was great, too.
i'm kind of mad at myself now, i just agreed to babysit on thursday night, by being convinced i had no school the next day. but it's the wedding episode! crap. i just might have to break my rule of no tv while babysitting!
10 [Report This]Date: September 05, 2008 08:11 am Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath
Great story! Very funny and again your characterization is just perfect. You really nailed Dwight and Angela and Jim and Pam perfectly! Read your profile... I'm also a guy, late 30s, married/kids, in NoVA and I also write sappy fanfic (no Office ones yet, though), so fear not. You are not alone!
Date: September 05, 2008 08:11 am Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath
Great story! Very funny and again your characterization is just perfect. You really nailed Dwight and Angela and Jim and Pam perfectly! Read your profile... I'm also a guy, late 30s, married/kids, in NoVA and I also write sappy fanfic (no Office ones yet, though), so fear not. You are not alone!
10 [Report This]Date: March 10, 2008 03:53 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath
What a cute story! Really funny answers you came up with. I especially like the armor!
Date: July 07, 2007 09:20 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions
completely hysterical, and completely well done. sir, take a bow!
Author's Response: Well, I don't know about taking a bow, but I'm glad you liked it. This is my personal favorite thing I've written.
Date: May 26, 2007 03:43 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath
Oh my god!!!!
That was so funny! There were so many cringable moments but I could tell that's what you were going for.
Please Write more. You're a really great writer!
9 [Report This]Date: May 20, 2007 02:37 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath
"(Angela) Well, something good came out of this. The mystery of the strange noise we would sometimes hear coming from the roof has been solved." What a great line! I can't believe I missed it when you posted the last chapter, BL! I'm glad I decided to start reading today from the last page instead of the first.... I wouldn't have wanted to miss this. Great job!! Everyone was so in-character, even Bob Eubanks and Creed!!
Date: May 17, 2007 11:23 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath
Hahaha...this has just been all kinds of awesome. I love that Michael wanted Jim & Pam to have hot tub parties and that Jim & Pam won and that Pam realizes her wishes are coming true. Wonderful story and very entertaining.
10 [Report This]Date: May 15, 2007 02:18 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath
Simply amazing - honestly. A brilliant concept with absolutlely spot-on characterizations. (I kid you not -- I'm almost wondering if you're Lee Eisenberg or Gene Stupnitsky or something.)
Just terrific fun - totally put me in a good mood. Hope you keep writing and posting!
Author's Response: Thanks so much, and your reviews put me in a good mood, as does the fact that your in the midst of cranking out another great story.
10 [Report This]Date: May 15, 2007 02:12 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions
I remember the "in the butt!" (Whoa, that did not sound right.)
Again, this chapter had me absolutely rolling. But the thing that makes you absolutely win at life forever?
(Michael) (Looks puzzled, hesitates) I guess…in the butt? (Hooting and laughter from audience, Bob cracks up) (Darryl) (From audience) ‘Attaboy, Mike! I literally clapped my hands - swear to god. This has been a total hoot; it's killing me. Love it.
Author's Response: I win at life forever? Nice! I will admit to being proud of the Darryl cameo.
10 [Report This]Date: May 15, 2007 02:03 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions
I hope you believe me when I say that this absolutely had me laughing in the way the show does - like, little uncontrolled barks of laughter, and just when I catch my breath, along comes another something funny that sends me off again.
The concept? BRILLIANT. (How well I remember that show - think I may have had a small crush on Bob Eubanks when I was four.)
Overall, I think you nailed every single voice and every single couple here, from Phyllis and Bob to Jan and Michael -- every last one. Too, too many awesome lines to single one out. So I'll settle on a few lines per couple:
Dwight/Angela: (Bob) (With an expression of disbelief). Do you understand how our game works, Dwight? (Dwight) Yes, I believe I do. You told me to answer the question how I believe my wife will answer it. That is what I did." So perfectly Dwight. And for Angela, it'd have to be: While awake, his conduct is virtually blameless. When he sleeps, he snores like the demon dogs of hell." Michael/Jan: "Yeah, won’t buy the milk if you get the cow for free." So perfectly emblematic of the way the writers themselves invert the stereotypical gendered behaviors between these two. Hilarious. Ryan/Kelly: Hard to say which my favorite Ryan line was, because I tell you, you got his voice down better than I think I've ever seen anyone - so snide, so deadpan, so eternally mortified. Love it that Kelly got mad about looking like a whore on television; love it even more that he got mad because she brought up the fire! Jim/Pam: First, you've endowed them with such a sweetness here that doesn't go anywhere near sappy or trite - it's just perfect. That said, I laughed out loud at Pam's answer to his most annoying habit, and his immediate response: "Hey Pam, did you know we’re on television?" Just amazing - loved it! Will be reading/reviewing the remaining chapters in a bit (damn real life!).
Author's Response: Well, it's nice to repay a small fraction of the enjoyment I've gotten from your work. Thanks so much for all your praise here. I find writing a running dialogue in character difficult but with this format I just had to come up with little bits. Thanks espcially for the Ryan praise as I had never written him before.
Date: May 14, 2007 09:17 am Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath
Very sweet, and ending on a very nice note. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks, glad you liked!
Date: May 14, 2007 02:56 am Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath
Brokenloon,
Thank you so much for this hysterical story. I really needed it as I getting depressed from all these post "Beach Game" fics. Everything, starting with Creed's commercial, was perfect. I also loved the TH's and little stories at the end. Perfect!
Author's Response: Thanks EH...I had great fun writing it, so glad it hit the spot.
Date: May 13, 2007 11:39 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath
Perfect ending? Yes, I do believe so. Fabulous story. I loved it. They were all so in character--great job!
This was SO perfectly Dwight: "Hot tubs make you soft and weak. I bathe every morning in a trough of ice-cold water next to our barn."
Author's Response: Thanks...I don't doubt that Dwight does exactly that.
Date: May 13, 2007 09:19 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath
Cute, I enjoyed it a lot.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: May 13, 2007 09:14 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath
This was hilarious. I think myfavorite bits were Ryan and Kelly. Kelly's got to be a hoot to write. And the "in the butt, Bob" -- I think even Bob Eubanks beiieved that was just an urban legend until someone dug out the footage. That you included it here made me laugh out loud.
Plus Pam's speech on the beach was the perfect ending to this story. Great job, as always, Loon! :D
Author's Response: Thanks lapdog, and you're right, Eubanks denied it for years. Glad you liked the speech, I was worried it woldn't work since the tone was different from everything else.