Date: June 21, 2007 03:43 am Title: Chapter 4
Aw, I think it's absolutely believable that Jim would start to get frustrated with her acting so strange and forgetful for no apparent reason in his eyes, but I love that he realized when she really needed comfort.
Author's Response: Thanks! I think I would get frustrated if I were so him. Thanks for the review!
Date: June 21, 2007 12:34 am Title: Chapter 4
Man this is craziness. I'd be losing my mind at this point! Can't wait for more....also for some reason i think it's SO cute that they go to baseball games as a little family....so adorable.
Author's Response: I thought that would be a cute detail, something about their lives that could happen. Thanks for the review!
Date: June 20, 2007 07:57 pm Title: Chapter 4
Okay, I hope this turns into more than just "a glimpse". Her life is so much better with Jim. Let's see how she deals with the kids and everything at the game!
I like how you made Pam really hesitant and weary of getting involved with the kids. I think that when she had the children her mothering instincts kicked in and she's a great mom, but if she doesn't remember having them then I think she'd be acting how she is here. If that makes sense...so great job!
Author's Response: That makes sense! Thanks!
Date: June 20, 2007 07:52 pm Title: Chapter 4
Yayy! Another great update. You're doing a really wonderful job of capturing Pam's character in this really extreme situation. I totally believe everything that she's thinking and feeling. I can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. That really means a lot. More is on the way!
10 [Report This]Date: June 20, 2007 06:42 pm Title: Chapter 4
Eeee! I'm so excited to see Pam just go with it! Especially if Jim wants to get frisky ;)
Author's Response: Haha. We'll see. ;)
10 [Report This]Date: June 20, 2007 06:41 pm Title: Chapter 3
I like that you have Pam freaking out, but in a "realistic" kind of way. Seems like she would have pieced together that she was "Mommy" before this, but the delayed reaction is understandable ;)
Author's Response: Hey! That could have been her niece! No, I'm just kidding. I'm glad you think it's "realistic" because that was one of the things I struggled with. Thanks for reading!
10 [Report This]Date: June 20, 2007 06:39 pm Title: Chapter 2
Again, lovely!
Author's Response: Thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: June 20, 2007 06:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like your writing style; it's not brilliant, but it's a lot more readable than a lot of the stuff on here. I love this concept and this is currently my favorite read! I've just never reviewed (I don't think...)
Author's Response: Yay I'm glad you like it. Thanks for reading.
Date: June 20, 2007 06:11 pm Title: Chapter 4
Very interesting! I never saw that movie, so I don't know how this is going to go at all. I like it though! I can definitely see that one of the oddest things would be having children you don't remember.
Author's Response: Haha, yeah, I think that would be pretty strange. Thanks for the review!
Date: June 20, 2007 03:07 pm Title: Chapter 4
I cannot wait for more interactions between Pam and the kids! Yay.
Author's Response: They're comning up! Thanks for reading.
Date: June 20, 2007 02:18 pm Title: Chapter 4
This is so good... I love that by the end of this chapter she's content, then all of a sudden remembers Roy. It's so obvious Pam! She loves him. She just needs to be ok with that :) I was so excited when I saw you had updated. This is so wonderful!
Author's Response: Thanks! :) I think it's obvious, too. Pam (in the story) just needs to realize that.
Date: June 20, 2007 06:02 am Title: Chapter 3
Cool! This is a really interesting story so far. I love the premise, and you did a nice job of capturing Pam's confusion as she's navigating her way through this new universe.
A couple of small things - I noticed a few typos along the way, and you might want to watch your tenses - they kind of jumped back and forth a little bit as you went along.
Really interesting so far, though! Can't wait to read more.
Author's Response:
Tenses are my albatross. I hate them and they hate me. They get me every time!
But I'm glad you like what I have so far. Thanks for the review!
Date: June 19, 2007 10:44 pm Title: Chapter 3
Can't wait to hear what she says to Jim! This is really well done! Loving Pam's confusion, yet familiarity. And Jim is so sweet. Nice work. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you're liking what I have so far.
Date: June 19, 2007 10:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh! This is really great and fun. I love that everything is familiar to her, but she is confused, still. And I especially love that his cologne is her favorite smell. Nice.
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
Date: June 19, 2007 10:20 pm Title: Chapter 3
Wow, what an unsettling chapter for Pam. You really made me feel for her. I can't wait to read more. :)
Author's Response: More is on the way! Thanks for the review!
Date: June 19, 2007 10:20 pm Title: Chapter 3
oh man this is so good...and so sad! I'm wracking my brain trying to figure out what's going on with her. Why can't she remember? Is it a dream within a dream? Is she still asleep like Jim said? What's going on....man I can't wait to read more. Keep it coming!
Author's Response: We'll just have to wait and see! Thanks for reading, I'm glad you like it.
Date: June 19, 2007 08:44 pm Title: Chapter 3
I like everything about this story, the kids names are very cute. Little Pam and Little Jim.
I personally liked the N. Cage movie, so it's nice to see a different take on the same premise.
What's so cool about this story is how freaked Pam is about an alternative life that she really wants.
Author's Response: I'm glad you like the names! That was a struggle for me. I wanted to come up with names that sounded like ones they might actually pick. Plus, for some reason Jim reminds me of a Ben, so I thought a little Jim would fit the name nicely. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: June 19, 2007 08:43 pm Title: Chapter 3
Oh, you portrayed the awkwardness of Pam not knowing how to deal with these kids that she doesn't really know so well. That's got to be scary. I love the line, "but Jim is here and nothing bad has ever happened to her when Jim was there." Aw.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!
Date: June 19, 2007 07:57 pm Title: Chapter 3
Yayy! I'm so glad that you updated. You're doing a really great job, I love how Pam still feels connected to this life even though she's totally confused. I can't wait to read more and see where you take it.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much. There is a new chapter coming soon!
Date: June 19, 2007 07:52 pm Title: Chapter 3
Hey, just found this. It's awesome, I love it. The idea that Pam's been placed in this alternate universe reminds me of The Family Man with Nick Cage, but sort of turned around. An awesome movie, and this story is wonderful.
Author's Response: Thanks! That movie is actually what inspired me to write this story. I haven't seen it in a while, but I really liked the idea. Thanks for reading!
9 [Report This]Date: June 19, 2007 07:28 pm Title: Chapter 3
You had so many great little visual details in this story; the pictures, messy kitchen, view out the front door. Great job. Can't wait to see where this goes.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! I'm glad you like it.
10 [Report This]Date: June 19, 2007 03:03 pm Title: Chapter 3
Eeeee!!!! I love it! And you write it so well! :)
Author's Response: Thanks! You're making me grin.
Date: June 19, 2007 01:29 pm Title: Chapter 3
i know i've said it before, but i'll say it again... i love this story. it's so INTERESTING. i just... love the idea! it's funny to me that Pam wasn't expecting, in the back of her mind, for Maddie to call her mommy... but i guess that would be too predictable, and i definitely like her little bit of confusion mixed with a sense of familiarity. great job! i can't wait to see what happens next!
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
Date: June 19, 2007 01:25 pm Title: Chapter 3
Another great chapter! I don't even know what I would do if that happened to me, but this seems...I don't know if realistic is the right word, haha...similar to what I think I would do. Can't wait for the talk with Jim!
Author's Response: I don't know how realistic it can be, but that's what I was going for, so thanks!
Date: June 19, 2007 01:17 pm Title: Chapter 3
I love this! It's so sweet, I can't wait to see what happens next.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you like it.