Date: June 15, 2007 06:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was incredibly sad/beautiful.
"He goes to try to comfort, she only cries more." That line got me. I've totally been there before when someone tries to comfort me, but it only makes me cry harder, and it gave me this really vivid image of them on the couch.
Also, I think you got Jim right- that he wouldn't press her for an explanation. He would just be there for her and let her cry.
Great job!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for the great review. I think everyone has had that experience... its like, I dunno, for me, its just sort of the added someone cares that makes me cry more (so yeah, i just posted a sad blog entry, and now i am crying because of the entry and because of the comments).
and this story became reason 105043 that I want a Jim of my own, because, sometimes, that really is all you need, someone to be there, and just not make you feel so alone.
8 [Report This]Date: June 15, 2007 07:21 am Title: Chapter 1
This is good. short and full of emotion. But I wish you'd put a hint in there about why she was crying.
Author's Response: yeah, apparently, a lot of people do... its not really about why she is crying, its just more he is there for her. i have my own reasons why she was crying though
Date: June 15, 2007 06:21 am Title: Chapter 1
i really like this, although at first i wanted to know what was going on. then i realized it doesn't matter. Pam's upset and Jim was there for her. that's all that needs to be true. i like it.
Author's Response: you are my new best friend... seriously, awesome. that is what I was going for. because yeah, you don't need to know whats going on, you just need to be there. and i have had moments like that. yes, seriously, you - amazing!
Date: June 14, 2007 07:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ca-what? Cat? Can't? Car? I want to understand but I'm afraid I don't. Why has shee been crying all day? Why aren't they speaking to each other? Please tell me!
Author's Response: Haha. Okay, so basically the idea was more sometimes words don't need to be spoken. I dunno. I have my own reason why she was crying. But, yeah, its more that sometimes words don't need to be spoken, and just being there.... and Ca was just the syllable I chose.
Date: June 14, 2007 07:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
I'm not sure I know exactly what is going on in the drabble, but I do really like your writing style. :)
Author's Response: Yeah, so apparently it wasn't as clear as it seemed in my head. Basically, its more just comforting someone when words aren't necessary. Sometimes you just want to cry, and you don't want to talk about it. but its better to not be alone. or maybe thats just me whose had moments like that
Date: June 14, 2007 06:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
I'm intriqued...keep going.
Author's Response: not sure if i will write more (which somehow my fingers typed right now then)... but, I have a few thoughts about continuing...
10 [Report This]Date: June 14, 2007 06:35 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. Very good job. This packs a good emotional wallop with so few words.
Author's Response: thanks... yeah, that was pretty much nearly exactly what my beta said... it all started with a very simple idea (just letting someone cry)