Date: July 06, 2007 11:25 pm Title: Delicate and Fragile
Oh, that chapter was pretty exciting itself.
Loved both Jim and Pam's inner thoughts. Really spot on characterization.
And Mark was hilariously awesome!
Looking forward to more exciting things!
Date: July 05, 2007 09:56 am Title: Delicate and Fragile
great chapter. mark is TOO funny! but i do wish Pam would go ahead and tell Jim what happened. he would just wait for her to tell him and not ask. he's that kinda guy. you're writing the characters very well, and i really enjoy this story. :)
Date: July 05, 2007 12:36 am Title: Delicate and Fragile
aaiiiiyy I can't wait. I was laughing so hard with the whole mark Jim thing. great job.
10 [Report This]Date: July 05, 2007 12:27 am Title: Delicate and Fragile
Wonderful. I love the "holy grail" thing! And I especially love the end of the chapter. I said it on the last chapter, but the way you're writing this, it's like getting two stories in one, and both are just fabulous. Great job.
Date: July 04, 2007 09:02 pm Title: Delicate and Fragile
Wow. I really love this story. The whole idea is very original and you've done a wonderful job of writing it. I can fully believe that this fight with Roy was Pam's breaking point and that she would turn to Jim when she really needed a friend. I can't wait to find out what happens next, especially now that Pam knows she's the "holy grail". Keep up the great work, I can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: thank you! I'll try to post soon
9 [Report This]Date: July 04, 2007 08:57 pm Title: Delicate and Fragile
Please please update again soon. This concept is fantastic. Why aren't there more fics with this premise? It's cute and great and I love it. I'm not a fan of all the poetry-ish stuff, though. I generally have a tendency to think anything poetry or "artsy" I guess or anything like that has no place in fanfiction. I've never read it where it works. Since the rest of this is so enjoyable, I don't have too much of a problem with it, but I think it's unnecessary and in fact detrimental to the quality of the story. Just a suggestion!
Author's Response: yeah I know some people don't feel the poetry vibe. Luckily for you guys you can totally skip it/ignore it and you won't lose plot! Lol just take it with a grain, it's just something that I'm exploring. Thanks for the feedback and for reading!!!! Please keep me posted on how you like the rest.
10 [Report This]Date: July 04, 2007 08:13 pm Title: Delicate and Fragile
When it's all said and done this is one of my favorite chapters...great takes on both inner Jim and inner Pam, the Mark-Jim banter, and just the whole situation you've so believably put them in...just awesome.
Author's Response: thank you!!! you rock, seriously. Thanks a mil for the help.
Date: July 04, 2007 07:39 pm Title: Delicate and Fragile
I've been gone for a while and am catching up on my fic reading. I just read all four parts in a sitting, and I really love it.
Also, The Holy Grail - I see others appreciated that as well, but I had to comment on it. SO FUNNY! Even funnier? - "Come on man, I told you not to call her that." Laughed out loud at that one.
Author's Response: Thanks!! I'm glad it's funny to people other than just me lol.
10 [Report This]Date: July 04, 2007 06:59 pm Title: Delicate and Fragile
The holy grail! I love it. I love everything about this story. More exciting things? Like what exactly?!? I liked the Mark/Jim banter in this chapter a lot. Awesome job.
Author's Response: ;-) ;-) hmm...yeah not gonna tell.
Date: July 04, 2007 01:28 pm Title: Delicate and Fragile
LOVE it. update soon!
Date: July 04, 2007 01:07 pm Title: Delicate and Fragile
The Holy Grail........Oh Stablegirl I do SO enjoy this. I think my favorite part was hearing Jim's inner monologue while standing in front of that damnable refrigerator contemplating clanking beer bottles and such and pissed that he would have to back to acting like a GIRL around her tomorrow. I LOVE THIS STORY. Keep it coming please! And Pam...come on - you can figure out what the holy grail means! ;-)
Author's Response: lol I love when reviewers resort to writing in caps. ;-) Thank you!! I'm glad you love it and I'll try to keep it going. And...yeah...Pam totally knows what it means...
Date: July 04, 2007 10:43 am Title: Delicate and Fragile
Mark is priceless! 'KISS MY ASS', SpaghettiO's, The Holy Grail...so great! I was cracking up. I also loved Jim's inner thoughts. It was funny and very Jim. Can't wait for more!
Date: July 01, 2007 05:06 pm Title: Intricate lace
awww this is like the same like "will it happen this time" as the office played us back in the day. I love it you've got it just right. The moments that are taken in a different direction. And your lyrical writting is just lovely.
10 [Report This]Date: June 29, 2007 08:11 pm Title: Intricate lace
Lovely. I don't know what else to say. I suppose I could list some of my favorite parts, but it'd be really hard because I think everything is so in character and so genuine. And just so...lovely. It's perfect, just like the perfect snow.
10 [Report This]Date: June 29, 2007 08:03 pm Title: Stillness and Snow
Oh, wonderful. I love this story. And I forgot to put a rating on it last time, so this chapter definitely needs about a billion stars.
Date: June 29, 2007 08:01 pm Title: Burn and beat
Okay, first of all, I think your stylistic choices are fabulous. Excellent writing. It's like reading poetry and prose all in one. And I'm not talking about crap poetry from some vanity site featuring freshman girls in the throes of high school angst; I'm talking about honed, well thought out verse that shows a level of imagery you almost never see in the world of fanfic.
So, sorry to ramble, but this is just excellent writing. I had started reading this before work this morning, and I couldn't wait to come home and continue it tonight. Wonderful job. On to the next chapter!
Author's Response: always ramble ;-) thanks for the review, as usual. You're awesome.
Date: June 29, 2007 10:53 am Title: Intricate lace
Wonderful chapter, simply wonderful! I want snow now!
Date: June 29, 2007 09:53 am Title: Intricate lace
Wow. I hope your muse comes to visit soon! Love the pacing and the intensity of this. All the interior thoughts are just magical.
10 [Report This]Date: June 29, 2007 06:25 am Title: Intricate lace
Love this so much...I think Jim's heart would be about to burst, the woman he loves finally shaking off they guy that's been holding her down, starting to believe in herself, and turning to him. It would be like the answer to his prayers. And on top of that situation you give us the poetry and the evocative image of a walk in the snow. Hope the muse has some hop in her step.
Date: June 29, 2007 06:00 am Title: Intricate lace
How nice! This story makes me get that "awwwww" smile on my face. It makes me warm and fuzzy on the inside. I can't wait to see where this goes (although I like to think I'm pretty sure).
Date: June 29, 2007 05:28 am Title: Intricate lace
Awwww....how sweet!
Date: June 28, 2007 11:44 pm Title: Intricate lace
The snow made such a beautiful setting for their conversation! I loved how you used the poem at the beginning too! You do a great job going from that sort of style into the action each chapter!
Great work! I can't wait to read what you've got next.
Date: June 28, 2007 10:50 pm Title: Intricate lace
Intricate lace... that's really beautiful. And Pam's story about the paints made me want to cry!
Loving this!
10 [Report This]Date: June 28, 2007 10:25 pm Title: Intricate lace
I love this chapter, especially the beginning! And I love this: These things floated in the air around you and so you were careful not to shout…but to sigh. And so this man was careful of you.
And I love that poem! what is it?
And I can't wait for more!
Author's Response:
thank you, I'm so glad you liked the beginning. I feel like those sections are the most my own voice. And um...oh yeah...I should probably add the title of the poem to the chapter notes! It's "Snow-Flakes". Great stuff. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!!
Date: June 28, 2007 10:07 pm Title: Intricate lace
I hope DESPERATELY that muse visits you soon! You have such a beautiful way with words. There was something you said and I'm SURE I'm not going to quote you right...but it was something to the effect of "what she usually saved for the stars ears"....My God - sheer poetry. Just really really beautiful.
Author's Response: lol thanks. I always love your reviews!!! They give me the motivation to continue ;-)