great start. maybe it's a change you're making from the actual show but i would certainly not characterise jim as yelling in the break room. i had to just re-watch their argument and his volume does not rise at all.

The last two chapters were a bit disappointing. It felt different from the previous ones and disconnected. Anyways I loved the previous chapters.

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This is just beautiful.

so about a month ago I discovered this site and read everything I could get my hands on including this story. Of course I didn't know you could bookmark and couldn't remember the title so I've spent all week desperately searching for this and HERE IT IS!!!! I'm sure I'm late to the party, but I just love this story. Now I'm adding it to my faves and leaving a bit of love.

I always thought Pam breaking down in Boys and Girls was a great catalyst that never really came to fruition on the show, so thanks for that angle I never got to see. And that sexual tension. That's pretty hot too :)

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very nice. a lot happier, i liked the part about jim's mother, lol!
also, way to go pam, for being your own person, and making your own choices. i'm so proud of you!

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i literally yelled "GO PAM!" at the top of my lungs when she said 'i don't care'. amazing at the end with the porch scene, i was starting to get a little, you know.... myself. (eek! i'd really like a jim for myself, if that's too much to ask)

great job and i can't wait to keep reading. i hate how in roy/pam breakup stories pam goes to jim's house, they start making out, then want to take it further, then jim stops and says pam has some thinking to do. arg. i hate that!

i'll just shut up and keep reading, my inner mark is starting to surface - i speak my mind how, and i have to tell myself to shut up. maybe it's true! :)

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wow. that was a little confusing in the kitchen, i'm not sure what the motive was there, besides them deeply being in love with each other, but why i don't understand why they started doing...um whatever it is that they were doing just then.

but anyway, i loved the poem:

'If I had you I would kiss you until I got tired of it.

But I’d never tire.

No…

Never. I would never tire.

And you would stop me…

And then I would kiss you again.'

and also the line, "Pam was in the bathroom doing Pam type activities" i thought that was hilarious, still do. :)

nice chapter, i like how you're not making us wait forever and ever for something to happen, and especially how you show all the emotion and context of the story through words and descriptions instead of dialog. however, when you do decide to use dialog, it's very realistic, so great job with that. lastly i am so happy with how well edited this is, it's a dream come true to have not read a single grammatical error or typo throughout all the chapters!!! job well done, Stablergirl!

ps, this was the best chapter yet in my opinion, and sorry i am blabbering so much here!

okay, i think i understand this now. but i really must go to bed. hasta manana, or until tomorrow.

p.s. this chapter was a lot clearer, if i didn't say that before. great job! i love pam's idea of seeing snow in a different way. i wouldn't have thought to include that, but it really adds a lot to this. great work!

very nice. i like how it's kind of vague, yet so obvious at the same time. interestingly done.

sorry i'm so unclear with my review here, i'm just tired, that's all. i'll finish reading and reviewing the story over the weekend. one more chapter, then time for bed.

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God, how sexy were Jim and Mark's reactions to Roy. So great!

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O.M.G lol. amazing as always

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Holy crap... wow. Words escape me. Dawesome?

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Wow. So sweet. Loved it.