8 [Report This]Date: August 27, 2007 07:53 pm Title: Destination
Excellent job Larry. This story always brings a silent tear to my eye, sometimes sad, sometimes happy but it's always worth it.
Date: August 27, 2007 04:13 pm Title: Destination
I didn't want to read this story, Larry, but I decided to give it a shot, and I'm glad I did. Opposites attract and I think these two illustrate that. And the idea that Angela is the one to bring Jim "back" is very sweet. I'd like to think someone who is so religious also has it in her to be so kind.
However, I wish you had spent a little more time dealing with how they fell for each other. The scene where Jim gives Angela a piggy back ride was really nice and I would have liked to see more examples of what they see in each other. Also, it seemed like Jim really didn't think about Pam much once he and Angela got together. Maybe that's realistic, I'm not sure. But the romantic in me wanted to see a little inner struggle over the fact that Jim had fallen for someone else.
All that being said, this was an enjoyable read! Is it sick that after all this I still didn't really want Angela and Jim to end up together? This is why I don't venture much out of my fic comfort zone :-)
Date: August 27, 2007 10:19 am Title: Destination
After reading the first chapter of this when you first wrote it, I felt a lot of trepidation... I am not so comfortable with killing Jim or Pam (makes me cry!), but I just read it all, and it was really beautifully done. Very well thought out and all in character. I think this last chapter is just an excellent piece of writing... with the surprise ending (perfect last line) and at the party you have everyone's voice down so perfectly.
As a whole a really lovely story and I am extremely glad I read it. Thanks!!
Date: August 27, 2007 07:09 am Title: Destination
eventually when to Ryan - eventually WENT to Ryan?
Jim got a new job.... he managed to answer te question how David Wallace wanted.
She closed the door on him. My heart sank. It wasn't ideal, but... :(
Michael has said a lot of stupid things, but he is right - that was wise.
And Angelas in the car with him :D
9 [Report This]Date: August 27, 2007 07:02 am Title: Discovery
The fact that Oscar owes Kevin $100,000 - awesome.
So not exactly the way you want to find out about an engagement ring.
10 [Report This]Date: August 27, 2007 06:57 am Title: First
Aww, Poor Jim, he is trying to hard, and it is failing miserably.
Jim really does have a way of just saying he loves people at totally odd times. I mean, yeah. Usually people date before that happens, but not with Jim.
Wow... jewelers...
10 [Report This]Date: August 27, 2007 06:51 am Title: Smile
"his friend, his lover, his dream" I love that description. But that whole paragraph is just.... gah. So sad.
And him talking to the grave... so sad. Damn you, its not even 10 in the morning and I have tears in my eyes.
I love how you are making it so in character for both of them, but still making it likely for Jim/Angela.
Yep, Jim is slowly returning to his old self - banning the word inapproriate.
Jim carrying to her car - so sweet and silly (but I can't help but imagine him also doing it to Pam).
Yowza. I mean, I knew to expect it, but still reading 'falling in love with you' was just... wow.
Date: August 27, 2007 06:43 am Title: Starting Over
Okay, I admit, this story intriques me. :)
okay.... reading first paragraphs and drinking water. Reach that Pam dies... stops drinking suddenly, mouth falls open, makes a mess.
Wow.
Poor Jim, that is so rough. :(
Haha, the idea of Angela trying to move Jim... very funny picture.
Yeah, so already this story is breaking my heart..... and there are 4 more chapters to go.
Date: August 27, 2007 06:30 am Title: Destination
Nicely done, larry! I've been a big fan of this story from the beginning, and I'm glad to see you've finally come back to wrap things up. :) I've always liked your characterizations of Angela and Jim in this one, as they were believable without becoming "cartoonish" (which is sometimes the tendency to do with Angela).
One thing that left me confused was the very end, though. If Angela was the one who rejected Jim, why was she suddenly in the car with him at the end? Did I miss a paragraph? Not trying to be difficult, but just a little confused.
Otherwise, great job!
Author's Response:
No, I left out the part where she changes her mind to set up the surprise at the end. I tried to set it up in two ways - by making her uncertain about her decision to reject him when she was talking to Pam, and with Michael's "never, ever give up" advice. Guess I wasn't completely successful with that.
Thanks for being such a big supporter of the story! I appreicate all of your feedback.
Date: August 27, 2007 12:40 am Title: Destination
Larry? Is Angela in the car with him or is it ghostPam? You had me up until there... Did he pick up Angela? Did she hide in his car? That may be a little too cryptic.
Other than the surprise ending which I don't understand, it was really good!
Author's Response:
Sorry about that, Kev. You're not the first person to think that. I thought the line sounded enough like bossy Angela. I have changed it to make it clear that it's her. As to how she ended up there, I left that part intnetionally vague to spring the surprise, but sometime after he left Dunder-Mifflin, he heeded Michael's advice and convinced her to come with him.
Thanks for supporting this story the whole time. Sorry for the confusing ending. Hopefully uou like the edited version better!
Date: August 27, 2007 12:19 am Title: Starting Over
Great way to end it. Just awesome!
10 [Report This]Date: August 26, 2007 08:40 pm Title: Starting Over
Larry, you know how much I loved/enjoyed this story. It's an excellent piece of writing. You truly got everyone's voice down and you kept it real. Heh... silly rabbit hole thinking of mine made me think you went a little darker in the last chapter. Oops! :)
Date: August 07, 2007 08:25 pm Title: Discovery
As Jim stormed out of the office, the only thing he could overhear was Kevin loudly proclaiming that Oscar owed him one hundred thousand dollars.
Awesome. Pay up, Oscar.
Date: August 05, 2007 10:10 am Title: Discovery
Wow. This is such an excellent chapter. If I told you all my favorite parts, it would take too long. I did laugh out loud at the Kevin/Oscar bet part, though.
You've really done a great job making this relationship believable.
Date: August 05, 2007 08:29 am Title: Discovery
Curse you, larry, for making me feel so sad for Jim and ANGELA??
:)
Still, I maintain that within the universe you've created here, it makes perfect sense. And you've done a great job creating a realistic relationship between these two, while simultaneoulsy making Dwight the new Toby. Well done!
Date: July 21, 2007 10:54 am Title: First
Whoa... how did I miss this story? Okay, so it's not like I didn't know of it's existence, but I'll admit to initially being wary of the Jim/Angela storyline.
But it's a testament to your skill as a writer that you were able to not only craft such a believable story, but you actually won me over! I'm sitting here thinking "Jim and Angela... yeah...I could see that now." Amazing.
So shame on me for not giving this story a fair shake when you first posted it three chapters ago. Rest assured I'll be here for the rest.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for giving this story a chance! I know it's a very odd pairing that will turn some people off, but I'm really glad the people who have given it a chance have really enjoyed it.
Hope you like the next two as much as you liked the first three.
Date: July 20, 2007 11:20 am Title: First
Interesting. I really like that Larissa knew to thank Angela, and accept her, instead of worrying about how she wasn't Jim's original 'type'.
I really enjoyed the bowling date and Angela sitting in on poker hands. Angela's only truly happy when she gets to complain a bit, isn't she? The spray stuff made me laugh.
I'm still reading, can't lose me.
Author's Response:
Glad I can't lose you!
Thanks for the comments! Yeah, I figured Angela is so used to complaining that she's actually uncomfortable (actually scares her a little) when she has everything she wants. I figured Larissa would be so happy to see Jim happy that she would be kind to anyone who made him feel that way.
Thanks again!
Date: July 20, 2007 09:56 am Title: First
This is just heartbreaking and poignant, really. So well written. Can't wait for the next chapter --
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing all of these! I'm working on the 4th chapter right now.
Date: July 20, 2007 09:49 am Title: Smile
Again I say: Wow. I'm just hooked...totally sucked in, so much that I feel like I'm in a funk. You've pulled off something pretty amazing here, in that you've really presented a relationship with Jim & Angela as progressing in such an organic way that I could absolutely understand why he'd fall in love with her and how they actually might work together.
And the piggy back ride? So adorable.
Author's Response:
Thank you again for another thorough review. You rock!
I had this idea of doing a Jim/Angela story and it just wouldn't leave me. I wanted to make sure I made this relationship believable and still retain the essence of both characters. It means so much to me to hear you say that I accomplished that.
Date: July 20, 2007 09:40 am Title: Starting Over
Oh my god. I just started reading this today, and it's just astonishing - so well written and compelling. I knew a bit about the premise, but still, my stomach actually dropped when I read what had happened to Pam.
And Jim - wow, such a painful portrait you're painting of him, but I suspect it's really true to life for someone going through what he is. I love the way you've written Angela, too -- still very much her, but we get to see a warmth in her that's really endearing.
Amazing work....
Author's Response:
Wow! Thank you so much for the thoughtful review. That means so much to me, especially with this story, which I've worked harder on than any other.
I really wanted to make sure I didn't make Angela some random nice person. I wanted her to be the Angela we all know, but show how she might react to such a situation. It's nice to hear that worked for you.
Date: July 20, 2007 12:05 am Title: Starting Over
God, poor Jim. That was so harsh, but it gives Angela an interesting opportunity to help someone. I like the way you've written her. It seems very authentic. Nice job!
Author's Response: Thank you very much. It means alot to hear I wrote her accurately. Thanks for the comment!
8 [Report This]Date: July 15, 2007 06:28 am Title: Smile
This is unusual, not inappropriate, but unusual. I like it, especially Angela's pranks. Are you going to continue this? I'm just not really sure which direction I see this going so I'm guaranteed to be surprised.
Author's Response: Yep, I'll be continuing this through 5 chapters. I already have the ending written. Thanks for the comment!
Date: July 12, 2007 11:01 pm Title: Smile
I never thought I could like Jim with Angela...or anyone with Angela. But I think you have done such an awesome job with making her a very lovable person. I applaud you and anxiously await more.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! It was a difficult pairing to write, but I wanted it to be believable. I'm glad you like it. Thanks for the comment!
10 [Report This]Date: July 12, 2007 04:30 pm Title: Smile
OK, you know I love it. What else can I say, except when you've got it ready (and you still trust me) send on chapter 3!!
Author's Response: I'm working on chapter 3 right now and will send it as soon as I finish. Thanks once again for your awesome work and I'm glad you like the story.
Date: July 12, 2007 01:22 pm Title: Smile
It's really interesting thinking of these two together. I think you're doing an excellent job. Keep it up. TWSS.
Author's Response: Thanks for the comment! I really appreciate it!