Date: July 19, 2007 08:45 pm Title: Chapter 3: A Man of Many Wishes
I'm really enjoying the alternating POV. Love the small moments between Jim and Pam, and really who doesn't love that? Sorta disappointed they don't get to bunk together, but hey, it's early in the story. Heh. Plenty of time to get Meredith drunk and passed out somewhere, not in their room. Hehehehe.
Seriously though, great story. Love the characterizations. Can't wait to see where you're taking us all with this.
So far only one thing missing... *smooch* :-)! <---Smiley!Jim's review.
Author's Response:
Aw, thank you! And yeah, I kind of hated to not have them bunk together, but I couldn't come up with a plausible scenario in which they'd actually end up assigned to the same room. That said...well, there are ways around everything, and we fanfic writers are pretty crafty at finding them, hee.
As for the smooch, Smiley!Jim....patience, my pet. LOL
Thanks so much for the review!
Date: July 19, 2007 12:36 pm Title: Chapter 3: A Man of Many Wishes
Well, you've done it again! Excellent, excellent job! You really have all the characters nailed (I know, TWSS. But you really do).
Is it wrong that I got a little mad at Toby when he suggested sharing rooms based on gender?
Author's Response:
Thank you! And yeah, as I was writing that scene, I kept trying to figure out a semi-plausible way that Jim and Pam would have to share a room...but I figured even Michael wouldn't force that kind of issue, LOL. (This is not to say that it won't happen anyway, mwahahaha!)
Thanks for the review!
Date: July 19, 2007 12:09 pm Title: Chapter 3: A Man of Many Wishes
Woooot! Am I the first to review? Heh! I really love the characterisations of the each staff member in this chapter. You've got their voices just perfectly written. Oscar and the academy (snort!!) Angela's 'tude... everyone, just awesome. And Michael, as annoying as ever. LOL Great chapter!
Author's Response: Heh - I'm surprised you saw this after all my email talk about holding onto it for a while. Glad you liked it & of course thanks for the beta'ing. ;oP
Date: July 18, 2007 06:49 pm Title: Chapter 2: To Hear the Things You Haven't Said
a-maz-ing!! i cant wait for more!
Author's Response: Wow - thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it. :o) (You're not Jim Halpert, are you? Because I hear he uses a moniker involving "squirrel." ;oD)
Date: July 18, 2007 11:08 am Title: Chapter 2: To Hear the Things You Haven't Said
Talk about heartache. Wow. I love that you put a flashback within the flashback story. It was so painfully real. Pam's lie of omission until the last moment when she finally had to reveal her engagement. Jim's utter Jimness. Good ol' Dwight.
Author's Response:
I'm so glad you liked it! (And I find that I'm fond of writing flashbacks for some weird reason...) "Jim's utter Jimness" -- brilliant, brilliant phrase. :o)
Thanks so much for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: July 17, 2007 08:10 am Title: Chapter 1: Content to Compromise
This is so funny! You've captured the exact tone of a Jim/Dwight exchange. I love this:
Were you raised in an Amish community 43.6 miles away from the nearest populated area?" "Oh my god." Jim's eyes widen, and he draws back a little. "How did you know that?"
Author's Response:
Such a treat to see a review from you - just read your latest (and was absolutely DELIGHTED to see that you'd posted something new), and it was amazing. I'm glad you liked the Jim/Dwight exchange; there are so many authors around here (yourself included) who seem to just excel at capturing everybody's voices (not just Jim & Pam's), yet I always find it so daunting. So it's always nice to hear someone say the voices rang true.
Thanks again for the review (and the awesome new fic) --
Date: July 17, 2007 03:05 am Title: Chapter 2: To Hear the Things You Haven't Said
This is excellent! I was really glad to see that you'd (finally) updated. I love how you illustrate Jim and Pam's first two weeks together, and all the ensuing angst/denial. I can't wait for more updates! :)
Author's Response:
Thanks so much! I'm always fascinated to think about their first few weeks (after initially meeting), more so after Jim's deleted talking head from The Client. The notion that he fell in love with her that first day at Cugino's (which I assume he did, because in the TH he says, "She was in love with someone ELSE") is just amazing to me. Sigh. :o)
Will be updating pretty soon - thanks again for the review!
Date: July 16, 2007 07:50 pm Title: Chapter 2: To Hear the Things You Haven't Said
GUH. Killing me in the way you do so well. I love, love, love that you went back to the Roy days. You bring the angst so well, and that was certainly an 'angst era.' So wonderful and looking forward to more.
Author's Response: I cannot tell you how much of a thrill it is to hear you say that you're glad I took it back to the Roy days! I'm a glutton for the angst - always have been - but given the semi-resolution we got with this year's finale, I see exploring the pre-camera days as something bittersweet. Really appreciate your review (and am off to read your latest in a sec!)
Date: July 16, 2007 04:27 pm Title: Chapter 2: To Hear the Things You Haven't Said
I like this a lot. I love the way you explored Pam's conflicting feelings. It's so fun to go back to this time and try to figure out what she might have been thinking. Plus, your descriptions of Jim are HOT. All in all, great chapter!
Author's Response:
So you like it? Yay! I'm glad I'm not boring everyone by going back to the past; it's just something I was dying to do now that everything is looking like it'll be okay on the show, you know? And heh -- I get carried away when describing Jim. What can I say? John Krasinski has that kind of effect.... :o)
Thanks for reviewing!
Date: July 16, 2007 03:17 pm Title: Chapter 2: To Hear the Things You Haven't Said
Guh!!! I loved your interpretation of their first "non-" date. You captured Pam's nervousness perfectly and you always just manage to write Jim and Pam with utter perfection. And the Star Wars card joke was hilarious when you think about eating cards... LOL (so how random am I?)
Author's Response:
Heh - yeah, totally didn't 'fess up to you that I used to eat my brother's Star Wars cards as a kid. (Well, as I pointed out in an earlier response, I just chewed on them...so, not quite as demented.)
Thanks for reviewing! (I'd say something happier, but I'm freaking BURNING UP....)
Date: July 16, 2007 02:33 pm Title: Chapter 1: Content to Compromise
girl7, I meant that Jim and Pam would be roommates on this little trip. And bedmates. And...mates. You know, with one on one fun-tivities. (In case you're still unclear, I think they should make out and have sex. (/Kevin))
And you're a smooth talker, girl7. I know you say things like that to all the usernames.
Author's Response:
LOL -- I'm a little slow on the uptake over here! (Seriously -- our air conditioner just went out a few hours ago, and it is literally 86 degrees in my house. Yeah.) Room mates, eh? Bedmates, you say? ...You been reading my notes or something? ;oP
You know me -- I'm a smooth talking, Star Wars card eating machine. :o)
Date: July 16, 2007 02:04 pm Title: Chapter 2: To Hear the Things You Haven't Said
I wish I could of taped my face while reading this. It was all pursed smile, then opened mouth when she thought about their first date. I love all the little things in here.
Author's Response:
Aw, really? I know what you're talking about, because I've read so many fics like that before (with a big old grin) -- and am actually sitting here grinning at your review. :o) (Aren't we a smiley bunch??)
So glad you're enjoying this & I really appreciate the review!
Date: July 16, 2007 01:53 pm Title: Chapter 2: To Hear the Things You Haven't Said
No, no, no! No you di'int. Are you telling me Jim Halpert ate paper? Jim Halpert was the kid who ate paper? That kid? You've broken my brain, there.
And all at once she knew what the look on his face meant; she recognized the intensity in his eyes immediately...felt the panic rising, inextricably interwoven with an excitement she didn't dare let herself acknowledge. That's so perfect. We've seen that moment in the show, I think also. Wasn't it that kind of moment on the Booze Cruise and also in e-mail surveillance (you can tell me anything)? Very good description.
The whole thing with the meeting the fiance is amazing, and the last line - wow.
Think if she had just given in to her impulse to kiss him! If only!
Author's Response:
Listen, sister -- that little detail came straight from my own life, swear to god. I used to chew on my brother's Star Wars cards when I was really little. (Though I chewed on them, didn't actually ingest them -- which is a little less strange and pathetic, right? LOL)
And yep, the Booze Cruise look was exactly what I was thinking of as I was writing that scene in the car. Ohhh...if only she'd kissed him. Sigh. :o)
Thanks for reviewing!
Date: July 16, 2007 01:41 pm Title: Chapter 1: Content to Compromise
Nice. You have Kevin and Dwight down. Roy and Pam roommates...Will Jim and Pam be roomies next?
I like the last line, although it's a little heartbreaking, isn't it?
Author's Response:
Why thank you! And nah, Pam & Jim would never morph into just being room mates; he's too much of a romantic, don't you think? Then again, we haven't seen him after he's been with her for ten years....LOL.
Yeah, that last line is definitely heartbreaking -- and honestly, if I had to describe the arc of this story (and what's coming), I'd say angst with a healty side of steam. Hee.
Thanks for reviewing (and I really do love your username - it's not just a line, baby, I swear....). :o)
Date: July 16, 2007 01:38 pm Title: Chapter 2: To Hear the Things You Haven't Said
You know, this makes me angry at Pam- for the first time in a long time, I can see what people say when they called her a tease. She needs him, no doubt, but she takes what she can from him deliberately, wringing it out of him to make up for the deficiencies in Roy (and in herself). Beautiful, gorgeous use of the details, as usual.
Author's Response:
Woops - didn't mean to make you mad at Pam. :o) But I do think that she knew/suspected for a long time that he had feelings for her, and she just hoped he wouldn't say anything about them. I don't think she wanted to hurt him (also don't think she had any real idea how much she WAS hurting him -- well, up until around "Drug Testing" time). I also don't believe she was consciously aware that what she was doing was wrong -- and was, in a lot of ways, leading him on. While it's definitely not admirable behavior, it sure as hell is a lot of fun to write! :o)
Thanks, as always, for the detailed & thoughtful review!
Date: July 16, 2007 01:33 pm Title: Chapter 2: To Hear the Things You Haven't Said
I'm really enjoying this story! You really have a knack for keeping these characters very true to their origins. (does that even make sense?)
That part where Jim hands her 500 napkins - that is soooo something he would do.
I can't wait to read more. Fantastic job!
Author's Response:
Yes, that did make sense, and it was a very nice compliment, actually. :o) I totally stole the pack of 500 napkins thing from my husband, who did that to me before our first date. (Though I had shredded a napkin in front of him a few days earlier at lunch -- I do not, as a rule, sit around and shred tissues, LOL.)
So glad you're enjoying this - and thanks for the review!
Date: July 16, 2007 10:46 am Title: Chapter 1: Content to Compromise
Question: How did you get to be so awesome? Seriously, what a fantastic idea for a story! Great start, can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
Well, I always make my sales numbers, I'm charming, and I make a good impression on everyone I meet. Oh wait...that's Jim. :oD I'm really glad you're enjoying it so far! (I'm about to post the next chapter...)
Thanks for reviewing!
Date: July 13, 2007 10:49 pm Title: Chapter 1: Content to Compromise
As much as I love "now dating Jim & Pam", I have a soft spot for the "lots of unresolved sexual tension Jim & Pam" and I know you can do the story justice. I love reading how they couldn't hide their enthusiasm when Pam showed up. Yay!
Author's Response:
I feel the same way, flamingos! I think there's something about knowing they're "okay" now that makes me want to dig a little back to the previous angst & unresolved sexual tension. :O)
Thanks for reviewing!
Date: July 12, 2007 08:49 am Title: Chapter 1: Content to Compromise
I don't know how you guys do it, this exceptionally spot-on characterization and dialogue. Why are you not spending every moment producing more chapters? Why?
Author's Response:
Ha - believe me, if I could make a living writing this stuff, I would be happy as a clam to spend all day every day writing and writing and writing.... But alas, haven't won the lottery yet. (And, uh, it's not looking likely that I will, given the fact that I don't actaully play....)
Thanks so much for the review - and I'll be updating it this weekend!
Date: July 12, 2007 02:01 am Title: Chapter 1: Content to Compromise
Ooh, very nice start! This is going to get interesting. I can't wait to see more. Everyone's very in-character, and I was psyched when Pam showed up. ;)
Author's Response:
I'm gald you liked it! I found myself getting impatient as I was writing -- sometimes when I have a very specific arc in mind (like this one), I want to rush ahead to the "good stuff." ...So writing the setup can feel tedious sometimes -- which makes it terrific to hear you say you like the start!
That was probably the most overly verbose way of saying "thank you" ever, no?
Date: July 11, 2007 07:41 pm Title: Chapter 1: Content to Compromise
Jumping in my seat, along with everyone else, when I see a new story by you. Yay, Pam, for deciding to go. Way to demonstrate your early FNB-ness.
And lisahoo may correct me, but "hold on to your butts" always means "Jurassic Park" to me. This was the first non-Disneyesque movie I took my son to at the theater, and he can basically quote most of the movie verbatim.
Anyway, update soon, darlin' :)
Author's Response:
It just makes my day to hear you say that you were excited to see something new from me -- thanks so much! And lisahoo actually sent me an email giving me the Jurassic Park reference. :o) (I saw the film myself, but it was when it was initially released...um, 15 years ago? Yikes.)
So glad you liked this, and I really appreciate the review -- I will definitely be updating soon (some time this weekend for sure)!
Date: July 11, 2007 05:43 pm Title: Chapter 1: Content to Compromise
YES PLEASE! Love it :) I have nothing constructive to say.
Author's Response:
Listen, as far as I'm concerned, any review is constructive! :o) So thanks for the response!
Date: July 11, 2007 05:27 pm Title: Chapter 1: Content to Compromise
Well, look at you with the old school, pre-S3 Jim/Pam goodness! Can you believe I actually felt a bit nostalgic for that era, reading this? (Not that I'm not all about them getting together already.) Great ensemble convos with Dwight and Kevin ("There'll be a piano..?"...hee!)
I think I was as psyched as Jim when Pam pulled up in Roy's truck...looking forward to the resort (even if it's not in the wilderness.) A weekend away, with no Roy and a lounge...could be just the ticket.
Author's Response:
You know, a few other people have mentioned that same thing in their reviews, and I was so glad to hear it -- worried that this was far enough in the past that people might be kind of meh.... And yes: a weekend away is just what they need....
Thanks, as always, for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: July 11, 2007 05:17 pm Title: Chapter 1: Content to Compromise
You always have such a lovely way of mixing the cuteness and the angstiness (just like the show). Pam showing up without Roy coming along- very "Dundies," and very hard on poor Jim, to have her so close but still out of reach. I'm so happy to have more from you coming soon!
Author's Response:
See, this is one of the reasons why I love your reviews; you always point out something that I hadn't even really thought of before. In this case, it's the sans-Roy Dundies connection -- you're so right about that. I'm really glad you're enjoying this! Thanks for the review --
Date: July 11, 2007 04:26 pm Title: Chapter 1: Content to Compromise
As much as I'm happy for Jim and Pam finally getting together, or whatever it is that really happened at the end of S3, I'm such a sucker for the earlier seasons when they were just best friends in love with each other without knowing it or without being able to do anything about it.
That's why I'm so excited that you're still interested in writing those versions of Jim and Pam. I love the tension between them at this point, and the way they have so much fun together! So yeah, that was my long way of saying Yay for new girl7 and yay that it's not a first date fic. Even though I obviously loved Stolen too.
Also, I can't wait to see what you do with this. Will it be all fun and games or will the famous girl7 angst make an appearance? Can't wait to find out! :)
Author's Response:
First of all: How awesome are you for leaving such a thoughtful, detailed review? (I'll answer that: Dawesome!) Second of all, I'm really glad you said what you did about pre-season 3 finale/date Jim & Pam. I really worried that this chapter would be boring. :O) But really, yes -- I completely agree that as much as I absolutely love the idea that Jim has finally asked her out (and she said yes!!!), I do love the way their dynamic was in the earlier days (pre-season 3). And as much as I love writing happy!Jim/Pam, I also love exploring the unresolved sexual tension and angst. (So in answer to your question....yeah, there'll be a healthy dose of angst here, but I'll [hopefully] make up for it via some nice sexual tension & flirty moments.)
Anyway, thank you, my friend, for your continued support and the review!