1 [Report This]Date: December 24, 2021 10:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is quite lovely writing, in addition to being a really accurate metaphor for Jim and Pam and their relationship. And a *very* cool writing process.
Author's Response:
What a nice Christmas gift! Thank you for the kind words. Bel was my best, most frequent beta reader in my fic heyday (and we still email each other nearly every day).
This was a fun, spontaneous piece that I think captured something true— that although it all worked out, their relationship had some unhealthy elements especially in the beginning. We loved them anyway, of course!
Happy holidays!
1 [Report This]Date: December 05, 2018 07:54 pm Title: Chapter 1
I read this over and over and over and the realization hit me: I want to tell you my favorite line, but I can't! They're all so perfect and tell such a different and important story. Gripping and powerful and REAL. So lovely. Thank you for this.
Author's Response: My BFF (best fic friend ;) ) belsum and I wrote this together. It was one of those times where the fic just fell out of my head, fully formed. Thank you for keeping it alive by reading it and liking it.
1 [Report This]Date: December 05, 2018 07:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
I read this over and over and over and the realization hit me: I want to tell you my favorite line, but I can't! They're all so perfect and tell such a different and important story. Gripping and powerful and REAL. So lovely. Thank you for this.
Author's Response: :)
10 [Report This]Date: July 23, 2007 05:47 am Title: Chapter 1
Okay, normally this is the point where I will say "oh i loved this line... and this line..."
But that is the problem with only four lines, and I love them all. Because quoting the entire thing aparently isn't cool.
So, trying to think of other ways.... um, great imagry or whatever that is. And the end was good.
okay i love the first line, and the second and the third, and the fourth.
I could do without the disclaimer though. Yeah, we need to buy them. Yeppers.
Word Count Story: 55
Word Count Review: 88
Yeah, something is wrong with that.
Author's Response: Hee. I'm glad we inspired so much enthusiasm (and so many words!). Your reviews make my day, Em, seriously. Thank you! -lis
Author's Response:
Honestly, Ms. Halpert, your reviews crack me up so much I seek them out in <b>lis</b>'s other stories! I'm so glad you enjoyed this.
--bel
10 [Report This]Date: July 19, 2007 02:42 am Title: Chapter 1
That was so simple and beautiful! I loved it!!
Author's Response:
Oh, thank you very much! -lis
Author's Response:
I'm so glad! Thank you for the kind words.
--bel
10 [Report This]Date: July 18, 2007 02:30 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow.. this was beautiful, you guys! Awesome, awesome teamwork.
Author's Response:
We're going to need a team name... Thank you very much for the kind review!
--bel
Author's Response: Thank you! It certainly feels like we work well together; I'm so glad the results were acceptible! -lis
Date: July 18, 2007 01:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Well done to both of you. Really beautiful. Flows really well and paints a gorgeous picture of their story.
Author's Response:
Wow, thank you so much. I'm very pleased you found it that evocative.
--bel
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm especially happy you think it "flows" - I guess that's what happens when two people share a brain. Thanks again! -lis
Date: July 18, 2007 12:54 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was beautiful. You captured their relationship perfectly in so few words. Brilliant!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! Apparently my penchant for using few words is contagious. Thank you again- I'm so glad you enjoyed! -lis
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for the kind review!
--bel
Date: July 18, 2007 12:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is wonderful, and very poetic.
However, the crazy office fan in me reads 'for real' in the last line as 'for realsies'. It's a sickness.
Anyway, nice job!
Author's Response: Yeah, you might want to get that looked at. I hear it is an early symptom of spontaneous dental hydroplosion. (Thank you very much! I'm so glad you enjoyed our little collaboration!) -lis
Author's Response:
That's what she said. No really! Thank you so much!
--bel
Date: July 18, 2007 12:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
How do you get two writers to be this concise? Very impressive! I like the clarity of this idea - a great metaphor for their situation. I once wrote a little fic about Jim being sort of lost at sea in Stamford, struggling to get to shore/Pam, and this takes it a step further...and in a LOT fewer words...well done!
Author's Response: The 55 word thing helps keep things snappy, that's for sure! Thank you so much, as usual, colette, for being so encouraging. Did you post your lost at sea fic? I'm sure it was beautiful (your stuff always, always is). -lis
Author's Response:
It also helps that lis and I are actually psychic twins. I second her request for you to post the lost at sea fic! Thanks so much for the kind words.
--bel
Date: July 18, 2007 11:52 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow. This is fantastic! i love the imagery here. So powerful. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I think the 55-word format lends itself well to strong imagery. I'm glad you enjoyed it! -lis
Author's Response: I'm a sucker for nautical stories anyways so when lis started out like that, I couldn't not keep going. Thank you so much for the complimentary review!
Author's Response:
I'm a sucker for nautical stories anyways so when lis started out like that, I couldn't not keep going. Thank you so much for the complimentary review!
--bel
10 [Report This]Date: July 18, 2007 11:47 am Title: Chapter 1
1. I *love* that you used a title from a book NEITHER you have read. That's just so cheeky!
2. That was the best example of Gestalt poetry I've ever seen. Kudos to you both.
3. I think the fifth line should be (if there was one):
After she smacked him in the mouth for leaving her, all was forgiven. ;-) But that could just be me.
Yay!! (and is this review longer than the actual story??)
Author's Response:
Yes, actually, it is longer by about 20 words. Hee. Thank you very much! (bel actually owns the book, but "cheeky" is about as good a description of the pair of us as any I could think of). Her reply to my original line was so pretty, I couldn't resist. - lis
Author's Response:
Oh my gods lis, you counted! Awesome. And awesome review, too. I intend to read the book, if that's good for anything. Heh.
--bel
10 [Report This]Date: July 18, 2007 11:40 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh wow...this is just amazing. Poetry, really. I'm just speechless.
Author's Response:
Coming from you, girl7, that is high praise indeed. Thank you so much!
--bel
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I am very aware of the magnitude of rendering you speechless. (Was that mean? You know I'm just kidding.) Thanks again! -lis