Date: July 17, 2022 03:54 pm Title: Chapter 1
Such a sweet story. Make-up sex was never hotter.
1 [Report This]Date: September 02, 2021 05:04 am Title: Chapter 1
Very nice. Very hot.
10 [Report This]Date: August 30, 2009 07:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
i just love going back and reading this.
i hope i can find someone to eat spaghetti in bed with some day....
Author's Response: Thanks again! And good luck with the spaghetti thing ;-)
10 [Report This]Date: August 15, 2009 08:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
oh, and don't think i didn't catch the subtle "roy has a small penis" dig...
Author's Response: I don't know what you mean....;-) Honestly though, I didn't mean to imply Roy was inadequate, just that Jim had was 'more than that.' In every sense. 'Nuff said.
Date: August 15, 2009 08:25 pm Title: Chapter 1
this was wonderful!
‘Can I kiss you for a little bit?’ his voice was low and raw.
*swoon*
Author's Response: Yay for swooning! Thanks FlonkertonChamp!
9 [Report This]Date: November 28, 2008 06:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
i know this is an older story, so apologies - but like a rerun, i hadn't read it yet, so new to me! :) so amazing...i love the discomfort as they learn to communicate, the way you just nailed the pent-up fears and anger they have, and of course the sexiness of the make-up. fantastic and favorited, if i may.
Author's Response: No need for apologies - I'm happy you found this, and that it still held up for you. Back when I wrote it, there were lots of happy 1st date/early relationship fics, so of course I had to go and mess with it, lol. Anyway, thanks so much for your kind review, Little Comment - and being favorited is always flattering!
Date: February 18, 2008 09:16 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh wow...that was just perfect! Really in character, great job!
Author's Response: Thanks very much, honeypioneer....'in character' is like the best compliment!
Date: February 03, 2008 12:55 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh wow, loved every moment of this story. You captured all the many dimensions of their relationship perfectly!
Author's Response: Thanks much, Finer Things. Glad you thought this seemed true to their relationship.
Date: September 26, 2007 09:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
oh, i'm ALL kinds of in love with this story. it's honest and ugly (in the good way) and spot on. plus, it's just really beautiful and real. what a lovely story - thank you!
Author's Response: Well, I'm all kinds of thrilled you liked it. And yeah, I didn't want them to fight 'cute' - so hooray for ugly! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, Emily!
Date: September 03, 2007 05:17 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really couldn't imagine what these two might fight about, but you pegged it so perfectly. And the makeup sex? Made me wish I had someone to fight with. Looks like everyone fell for the "Can I kiss you for a little bit?" line - which is great - but I love Jim at the door. I would pay good American dollars to see that onscreen. Wonderful and so hot.
Author's Response: Oh, I'm great at finding things to fight about (just ask Mr. C, LOL.) If only this show were on HBO so we could see this kind of stuff...though, that might be the end of fanfic! Anyway, so glad you enjoyed this, Sweetpea and thanks so much for reviewing!
Date: August 16, 2007 09:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love this just for the fact they can't really remember what started it but everything keeps escalating...not because that happens from time to time around here or anything. I love how simple yet true to life this is. Very nice.
Author's Response: Yeah, that never happens around here either...was a real stretch just to imagine it ;-) Very pleased you thought it seemed true to life; somehow these simple moments just appeal to me to write about (maybe I'm plot challenged, LOL?) Thanks much for taking the time to review, flamingosinparadise!
10 [Report This]Date: July 29, 2007 01:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
Just read this again, Colette. Truly one of my favorites--very passionate.
Author's Response: So pleased to hear this story worked so well for you. Passionate....I like that! Thanks so much, NanReg!
Date: July 29, 2007 10:04 am Title: Chapter 1
Obviously, this broke my brain, because I forgot to come back with that promised review. Sorry about that. But I remembered:
As always, I love the intimacy of your writing. I completely connect with the thoughts of each character, as though they are my own thoughts, which is not a bad place to be. You have a special talent for it.
As for the “can I kiss you for a little bit?” line, while I agree it’s a generally awesome line, I have actually had a guy say that to me once. It was probably one of the sexiest, most romantic things I had ever heard (and will probably only be eclipsed in the future by “baby, you look so hot in that tattered bathrobe.”) Needless to say, Jim Halpert repeating those words was VERY good.
The argument is so them, and I especially like: Why do you get the monopoly?’ she heard herself blurt, as he twisted the key in the ignition. ‘On what?’ he shot back. ‘On being in love,’ she continued, uncorked. ‘Like I couldn’t possibly feel it like you do.’ You also mix sexy and funny so well with: ‘But, Pam...just for the record?’ he raised his head to look at her as if he was about to say something very serious, ‘I really mean it when I ask you to pass the gravy too.’ And yay for a thoroughly hot sex scene(s) that wasn’t explicit.And this: ‘Let the record show.’ Was perfect Jim voice.
So, in case you couldn’t tell, I really enjoyed this.
Author's Response:
First, I'm totally touched you left another review. Always means a lot when you like something I wrote (big fan.)
Thrilled that you think these fics have a sense of intimacy - precisely what I hope. I tend to write small, quiet moments, not big plots...just the way my mind works, I guess. And somehow it just feels right to me for these two characters (or maybe I can't do anything else, LOL.) Also v. pleased you thought the fight was in character and that the sexy melded with the funny. Juggling those things, I'm always afraid of crossing the line into clumsy or trite. As for the sexage, yeah - I wanted to convey a sense of desire/intimacy/reconnection, and explicit, 'how-to' anatomical details seemed kind of unnecessary within that context. (We all know what goes where, ahem.) So happy you thought it was hot without that.
Lastly, tickled the kissing request had personal resonance for you. The idea of Jim needing that at that moment, and actually asking, kind of choked me up, but I honestly didn't expect it to be noticed by so many. Okay, this response is turning into another fic, but your awesome and detailed review got me going...thanks SO very much Paper Jam!
Date: July 27, 2007 11:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
Colette...Lordy woman I want you to write JAM EVERYDAY. That line when he asked if he could kiss her for awhile...seriously?? It might have been THE hottest thing I've ever heard him utter. Then the vision of them sitting together eating from a big bowl of spaghetti...I just loved this more than I can express! Thanks!
Author's Response: If only writing this stuff paid the bills! Always tickled when you like a story, LoveFool (dare I hope to see something from you soon?) And still thrilled I wasn't the only one whose heart strings were pulled by that particular line...sometimes the romance/sexy is in the ordinary stuff (kissing, a bowl of plain old spaghetti.) Thanks, as always, for being so encouraging!
10 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2007 11:57 am Title: Chapter 1
Well, I read it again, hoping I'd have some clever to say this time. But I don't. Just know that it's really, really good. :-)
Author's Response: 'Really, really good' works just fine for me....and you save that cleverness for the next chapter of your fab WIP, missy! Thanks Mox!
10 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2007 11:16 am Title: Chapter 1
Sigh! I wish more of my fights would end up like this. Very very well done.
Author's Response: Don't we all...in fact, maybe Pam should start picking fights with him more often ;-) Glad you liked it and thanks, feared or loved.
10 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2007 09:47 am Title: Chapter 1
I'll see your "Phew" and raise it with a "Guh"....
I need a shower.....a really cold one. LOL
Author's Response: Well, if I left you pre-verbal and in need of a cold shower, my work here is done. Thanks so much officefreak.
10 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2007 01:45 am Title: Chapter 1
oh, and see, you broke my brain so well, i forgot to mention my favorite line! but i see everyone else loves it too. i'm with bitterpill, definitely Fan Fiction Question of the Year. love your spot on characterization and your obvious gift at writing romance.
Author's Response: Who knew that line would be the one? As I said, it kind of was for me too, so I'm so tickled. Also about you thinking the characterization works - definitely something I fret over. Thanks again, StarShine.
10 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2007 01:38 am Title: Chapter 1
le sigh. another masterpiece by colette. i love this. i really do.
Author's Response: Wow. Masterpiece? I'm speechless (and how rare is that?) Thanks so much, StarShine.
Date: July 27, 2007 12:05 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, this is great. Hot, adorable, sweet.
This part killed me:
‘Pam?’ he whispered after a few minutes, pulling slightly away to see if she was awake.
‘Hmm?’
‘Can I kiss you for a little bit?’ his voice was low and raw.
Just... Yes. Veeery nice. :)
Author's Response: Yeah, I thought there was something kind of poignant about him asking first...and needing that from her at that moment. Glad it worked for you too. Thanks Cassandra...much appreciated!
Date: July 26, 2007 09:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, so sweet! I love his little, ‘Can I kiss you for a little bit?’ and them counting "I love you"s and their meanings.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Semby...really happy you enjoyed this.
10 [Report This]Date: July 26, 2007 08:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
You rarely see Jim and Pam written as a real, raw couple--a couple that has to make it work just like the rest of us. Of course, unlike the rest of us, Pam has netted one of the most beautiful boys in the world, but still. :)
I loved the playfulness they revealed even through the difficulties of making up. I loved that they didn't get it quite right the first time and kept on trying. Dialogue: excellent. Make-up sex: fabulous. This line:
‘I really mean it when I ask you to pass the gravy too.’
Hilarious!
Just loved the whole dang thing. The end.
Author's Response: I think that's the thing - they are just like the rest of us. (Except, yup, Jim is one beautiful boy, alright.) Glad you liked the silliness in the midst of the difficult - I'd hoped that would come off believably. Thanks much for this, invis!
9 [Report This]Date: July 26, 2007 07:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yes! Yes! Yes! The emotions were so raw and true. Behind Jim and Pam's niceties, they truly are human beings and human beings are emotional, get angry sometimes and something like this is bound to happen. You wrote it so well.
My favorite part: "I’d describe it as you needing to get over this crap about having to be worthy of me"
Because that is exactly where I think a lot of the underlying tension is going to lie. If and when they have a real fight, I think there is going to be a lot of old insecurities surfacing.
Why do I love a good Jim and Pam fight? I think this is the second piece that I've reviewed where I really liked the fight. I feel like such a sadistic fan now.
Author's Response: So happy to hear this worked for you (fussing, fighting and all.) I agree - it's just that kind of insecurity that will rear its head in tense moments...and it's not easy being on the receiving end of it either. I guess as long as they stock up on spaghetti, they'll get through it. (Also because I think they'll truly want to. Good start.) Thanks BlueJeanBaby.
Date: July 26, 2007 07:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
yes, m'dear, utterly delicious...
Understatement of the day: ‘oh fuck… gimme a second…’ he wasn’t the only who needed a moment to catch his breath. I wonder if Angela will pray for my hussy soul...
Author's Response: Oh, darling, I think our hussy souls may be beyond even Angela's prayers. Just breathe deep and go with it. Thanks, lisa for always being such a great audience!
Date: July 26, 2007 07:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
"Can I kiss you for a little bit?" Oh, boy. That should win Fan Fiction Question of the Year. Good grief that was hot and lovely. Beautiful, realistic story that keeps them in character and plays out with the sweet steam you do so well. Excellent!
Author's Response: Hee. I'm so pleased that particular line is so popular - it really did something for me (ahem) but I wondered if it was too quiet to be noticed much. 'In character' and 'realistic' are music to my ears...especially coming from someone who knows a thing or two about writing 'sweet steam' herself. Thanks, as always, bitterpill!