Date: August 28, 2007 01:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is gorgeous work, showing the events of that last episode from all the different facets like a caleidoscope, which swirls as you turn it. Beautiful.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I think your description is better written than my story!
Date: August 28, 2007 11:00 am Title: Chapter 1
Poor Dwight! I really liked this set of inner-thoughts. It was nice how the only dialogue was overheard. Very interesting interplay of perceptions. I think Karen's may have been my favorite, writing-style-wise.
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Date: August 15, 2007 07:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was really awesome. Spot on characterization for all of them. Especially lovely was Dwight. Can one use the words Dwight and lovely in a sentence? Ick. But anyway, you've done a really good job here. A joy to read.
Author's Response: The Dwight one was really fun to write because he's just so... weird. And it's really interesting to get inside the head of those people. Thanks for reading!
8 [Report This]Date: August 07, 2007 09:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
These were all so well done, but the one about Jim was my favorite. You did such a great job showing his confusion and doubts - "There were no obstacles now, and he was sure that’s what scared him the most. What if, after all that time, there was some deeper flaw there, something they’d passed off as fiancés or girlfriends or stubborn silences or unwanted interruptions. What if they just weren’t meant to be? " and then, "He closed his eyes, images of her smile, his heart beating rapidly in his chest at the sight of it, their history, flashing like light catching off of a twirling ribbon on the movie projection screen of the back of his eyes lids and he wrenched the door open." Such awesome lines.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
Date: August 01, 2007 08:56 am Title: Chapter 1
This was a beautiful read. You did a fantastic job of getting into the heads of the characters. Really enjoyed this.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: August 01, 2007 05:03 am Title: Chapter 1
This is such a great little character study and insight into the job.
"He was done pretending." is a great line.
All are so in character... like, even without real name, you can tell imeddiately who they are talking about.
Great job.
Author's Response: Thanks! I was debating with myself over whether to include the names upfront, but I'm glad that I didn't need to!
Date: July 31, 2007 07:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
I think you captured the four characters beautifully. Especially Jim, who we all asumed went on a whirl wind trip to Scranton to get the girl after the yogurt lid fell out, but the way you described it sounded a lot more realistically.. The Karen portion of this was, in my opinion very beautiful. For a character that was never really fully developed, I think you captured what little we can asume about her well. And, well, any thing talking about Dwight as a child is going to rock, right?
Author's Response:
Well you've got to wonder what happened to him then that made him who is is now ;) You know in movies, they always cut straight from the hero taking off to get the girl, a quick few flashes with compelling music and then, poof, he's there. I've always wondered what he/she's thinking in that time. Karen is, sadly, a grossly under-developed character in my opinion, and I wish they'd make her more than just Jim's season three girlfriend.
Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: July 31, 2007 06:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
Impressive character studies from the final "Job" moments. Your description of Jim's recollection of their history together is beautiful.
Author's Response: Thank you! Character studies = love, in my opinion, both reading them and writing them.