1 [Report This]Date: April 26, 2021 07:27 pm Title: HOMERUN
I love love love this story!
9 [Report This]Date: September 24, 2008 06:40 pm Title: WARMUP
So brilliantly written, I love it. It's like watching the show in my head =)
Author's Response: Thanks so much! You are very kind to say so.
9 [Report This]Date: September 24, 2008 06:33 pm Title: PRE-GAME
Picturing Jim in a tight white tee and running kills me, that was so lovely... great descriptions!!!
Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, I spend way too much time thinking of Jim in a tight white T-shirt.
Date: September 17, 2007 08:56 pm Title: HOMERUN
wow this was AMAZING!!! really enjoyed reading it
you write jim and pam so well!!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm very glad you liked it. And thanks for the compliment about writing Jim and Pam!
Date: September 02, 2007 09:04 pm Title: HOMERUN
A very interesting (late) summer read. I'm no fan of baseball, but the DunderHeads made it interesting. I love that Meredith could pitch!
Author's Response: Hello again, Luna Mystik! Long time no hear. Thanks so much for reading this. I have missed your comments!
10 [Report This]Date: August 25, 2007 12:41 pm Title: HOMERUN
I love, love, LOVE this series. Here's why: I think something like this could really be perfect on the show. We still have the Jim/Pam sexual tension and sweetness, yet it wouldn't necessarily ruin the show. Quite the opposite! They're together as a couple in this story, yet their interactions are still enjoyable and not overly mushy and taking away from the story. I love that Meredith gets a bigger part in this. I could totally see her shining as an athlete - maybe she could've even gone pro if her drinking hadn't overshadowed things! Also, I love the ensemble here, love how Michael has the rules totally wrong, love Phyllis playing for Bob Vance's team and Pam distracting her, and I love Angela, well, in everything she does. And, being a Pez collector myself, I love the thought of Jim straightening out all the Pez dispensers in his room. This is really one of my favorite series on here. Well done!
Author's Response: Wow. Thanks so much! I appreciate your many comments. Yeah, I've got a soft spot for Meredith, no question. I just feel that her character is so underused in the show, I'm impelled to compensate in my meager way. The ensemble is a challenge to write, but so much fun! Thanks for reviewing!
Date: August 23, 2007 10:59 pm Title: WARMUP
Nice! I especially liked the little arguments about order and where people will play.
Author's Response: Thanks so much. In my (limited) experience with softball teams, arguing over who plays what position takes up a LOT of time. Glad you liked this. :)
Date: August 23, 2007 10:16 pm Title: PRE-GAME
Fun! I think I know where Phyllis is...
Author's Response:
Heh heh heh. But somehow, that never seems to occur to Michael...
Thanks for reviewing!
Date: August 23, 2007 05:49 pm Title: PRE-GAME
Kind of on the fly here (notice the b-ball ref?) cause I'm sort of in transit...but this totally satisfied my hankering for an ensemble b-ball fic. And not just cause it feaured sweaty, take-charge, fun-loving Jim in a tight white t-shirt (you know that type of thing does nothing for me ;-)
As usual, you made me laugh at Creed and Meredith was perfect (you're always so good at enlisting the lesser-used characters to full advantage.) And the rhythm and build of the game really came across. Scrappy Pam and natural athlete Jim (yum) - you captured that zone they're still in, where every inadvertant touch is charged. Know what struck me as an oddly sexy detail? When Pam watched Jim eat his hot dog in 3 bites. Don't think I'll over analyze that one, LOL.
Sorry for this scattered, semi-coherent review, but thanks for this happy fic - what a great summer treat.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Colette. You know how I love to use the 'background' characters, so Creed and Meredith were a natural. I was hoping the Jam would come across without un-balancing the rest of the story. And yeah, the tight white T-Shirt Jim was on my mind while writing this. A lot. ;) Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks very much for your review.
10 [Report This]Date: August 22, 2007 07:44 pm Title: HOMERUN
I loved this entire thing. For so many reasons. The pacing was perfect. The way you built the tension of the game and the intensity between Jim and Pam was great. Everything was so in character - I could see this as an actual episode.
And? Posting all of the chapters at once? You are kind of my hero!
Author's Response: Thanks, kells. I don't know why posting a complete story is such an innovative idea, LOL! But I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for reading!
Date: August 22, 2007 01:21 pm Title: HOMERUN
I feel the best way to summarize my joy with this story is by reciting part of an epic poem. So, with apologies to Ernest Lawrence Thayer...
"Oh, somewhere in this favored land the sun is shining bright;
The band is playing somewhere, and somewhere hearts are light,
And somewhere men are laughing, and somewhere children shout;
But there is much joy in Scranton--for Jim and Pam will not strike out!"
Bravo!!
Author's Response: Wow! Wow! I'm ... extremely flattered. Thank you! Can't do better than "Casey at the Bat". I appreciate all your many comments, Cousin Mose. It was very kind of you.
Date: August 22, 2007 01:10 pm Title: RELIEF
Wow...who knew sports cream and gatorade could be so romantic? :) Still loving this story!
Author's Response: For me, the romantic part was the rubbing, but that's just my inner Pam speaking. :) Glad you still like this!
Date: August 22, 2007 01:06 pm Title: ROTATION
Oh, ouch! Poor Pam! See, now I'm all nervous for her... luckily, I don't have to wait for this to be updated! :)
Author's Response: Yeah, I don't like posting incomplete stories, "ROYGBIV" and "Sunny" notwithstanding. I prefer to give my readers the whole experience.
Date: August 22, 2007 12:54 pm Title: BREAK
Awww...now this chapter was all sorts of sweet and fun. Pam and Jim being all awkward...Pam sketching Jim while he dozed... Very nice stuff!
And I wish the softball games I played had lunch breaks in the middle! :)
Author's Response: Hey, my company softball games had beer breaks, so ... win! I figured for Meredith's sake they probably would have soft-pedaled the beer and focused on food. And I had to get Kevin's grill in there!
Date: August 22, 2007 12:46 pm Title: SCORE!
::snort:: foulstrike...Australian rules... ::snort::
This is killing me!
Author's Response: Heh heh heh. Thanks!
Date: August 22, 2007 12:42 pm Title: RINGER
Wow, way to go Meredith! Who would have guessed? And I love Andy's tantrum with the bat, and the fact that Michael thinks that getting to first base is the same as a home run. (So...many...jokes!) Great work!
Author's Response: I'm addicted to taking minor characters out of the shadows and giving them Special Powers. So Meredith works perfectly for me. :) Glad you're enjoying this!
Date: August 22, 2007 12:37 pm Title: FAIRPLAY
His expression said he thought he might be being teased, but wasn't sure.
That so perfectly captures Andy! It's sixteen flavors of dawesome!
And nice twist, having Devon coming back as the umpire. I'm sure he'll be totally impartial! /sarcasm.
Great job thus far! :)
Author's Response: Woot! Individual chapter reviews? Thank you! I feel special!
Date: August 22, 2007 12:13 pm Title: WARMUP
Yep. I was right. I love this story! It's just such a natural fit for everyone to play softball like this. I would love to see something like this in S4!
And I don't know why...but Pam in a catchers' mask? Guh! Hot stuff! (Okay...so that was a little weird...even for me...) I don't know, though...I think she could make it look good!
Author's Response: Yeah, Hot!Pam in a mask is a little weird, even for Cousin Mose. :) But I'm glad you like it, so that's even weirder...
Date: August 22, 2007 12:02 pm Title: PRE-GAME
Okay, I have a feeling that this is going to be a great story, and it's only the first chapter! But come on...with Michael in golf shoes and still-has-the-tag-on-it Phillies jersey, how can it not be?
Author's Response: ::smort:: Hey, it's Michael's lucky tag, remember? I'm glad you're reading this, Cousin Mose. Not to get all sexist or anything, but I always want to know if guys think I got the sports stuff right...
10 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2007 10:40 am Title: HOMERUN
I absolutely loved this. I can't even say what was my favorite bit, it's all good. Definitely one of my new favorites! :D
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I really feel you can't go completely wrong with a story if it includes baseball...or softball.
10 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2007 04:24 am Title: HOMERUN
This is spectacular! :) You have everyone down, and it was just a really fun read. Plus the Jam was lovely. Nice work!
Author's Response: Wow! Thanks! Writing for the whole cast is a challenge, but it's also a lot of fun. I'm glad you enjoyed it, too!
Date: August 21, 2007 04:22 am Title: PRE-GAME
I loved this story, NEJ. A great ensemble fic and perfect for summer reading. I loved Meredith as a star pitcher. And the Pam and Jim tension was wonderful. You write every character spot on.
And best of all? I got to read the entire story at once last night! So I'm printing in out now so I can read it at work today.
Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you! I needed to write a "summer story", and nothing says summer like a lazy afternoon at the ballpark. I'm gratified you thought I captured the characters; writing so many is fun but exhausting!
Date: August 20, 2007 11:01 pm Title: FAIRPLAY
haha...very funny bringing Devon back. What a great choice. And Phyllis playing for Team Vance. Poor Michael is just having a bad day.
Author's Response: Heh. I've been wanting to bring Devon back for some revenge on Michael ever since he appeared in a deleted scene from "Valentine's Day". This is why I love fanfic.. :D Thanks for your comments, kgarrett!
Date: August 20, 2007 10:28 pm Title: PRE-GAME
Good start so far. Seems like it will definately be entertaining.
Author's Response: Thanks! And thanks for sticking with it.
10 [Report This]Date: August 20, 2007 07:39 pm Title: HOMERUN
Wow, this story left me panting. The way you built the tension of the game and the tension between Pam and Jim was just so palpable. Everything was just so physically descriptive, focusing on action and movement, it really made the read so intriguing. And really, what you did with jim and pam was just...inspiring. From the moment Jim explained how he knew what size batting gloves she wore, it just kept building.
I loved Meredith being the secret weapon and Creed being the even bigger secret. You got the dynamic completely down on a baseball field and the "pussyball" line was perfect. I really adored this story.
Author's Response: Thank you! I was trying to show Jim and Pam in a relationship but not really obvious about it, at least around the others. I don't think they'd be hanging off one another in front of Angela and Creed and Michael, but on the other hand, in those first intense months of a relationship, I imagine they'd have trouble keeping their hands off one another. So this was an experiment; glad it worked for you! Thanks for your review.