Date: June 21, 2011 10:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
Poor Toby. I loved the part, though, where he'd write a memo but it wasn't the right thing to do, besides, he couldn't get the bulleting to format correctly. Very funny.
Date: October 13, 2007 04:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
You really nailed what must have been going through Toby's head having seen that kiss. This is great.
Author's Response: thank you - poor toby!
Date: October 13, 2007 03:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow, I didn't know either of them was Jewish... interesting! This was really, really well written, and I can see Toby thinking this would be his year. The line "Maybe this was the year Cool Toby would emerge" broke my heart. Love.
Author's Response: well we recently learned that pam was presbyterian. and while researching for my story "halpert family tree" i learned that halpert is an offshoot of the jewish last name heilprin. so. jim is jewish, at least to me. i think it gives him an interesting backstory. i'm glad it broke your heart! that was my intention :) thanks for the feedback.
Date: October 13, 2007 01:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
Loved it.
Author's Response: thanks!
Date: October 13, 2007 11:50 am Title: Chapter 1
"Toby’s lower lip quivered of its own accord." Poor, poor Toby.
And I loved this line - "If she smiled any wider, her head would crack in half".
I loved Toby calling it a fusion wedding. I didn't know Jim was Jewish.
Author's Response: the lower lip thing i totally stole from paul lieberstein and his look to the cameras after he sees them kiss! it was so huckleberry hound i loved it. rnwell, we just learned that pam is presbyterian, and i made jewish awhile ago, so i decided to keep up with it. if you check out "halpert family tree," you can see sort of the breakdown of that. thanks for the feedback!
Date: October 13, 2007 11:44 am Title: Chapter 1
Oops. I forget the star thing every time.
Date: October 13, 2007 11:31 am Title: Chapter 1
I really think you've nailed the Toby-ness of Toby here, from his own frustrations/hopes re: Pam, to his first suspicions and later realization about them, to his final resignation. Loved these lines: So he wrote a well-worded memo about appropriate workplace affection. What was appropriate was none. Especially if your name is Jim Halpert.
Such an accurate portrait, I think, of what must have been going thru his head this whole time. And the last part with Sasha was perfectly lovely and touching.
Author's Response: thank you! i was nervous to write toby, but i have such affection for him. and i really want to write his happy ending, i just don't think he'll ever get it. maybe i'll give him an AU on a beach off the keys or something...
Date: October 13, 2007 11:13 am Title: Chapter 1
Poor Toby! I laughed at several points in this, but it still kept with the comedy-barely-hiding-realistic-depression of the show. Yay for Jam though. I really want this guy to have a hapy ending.
Author's Response: i know - poor toby indeed! the first draft of this had him going to see pam before she walked down the aisle. i actually think that would've been horrible - i wouldn't have been able to forgive myself! so i gave him sasha to cushion the blow. on the comedy/depression, i was watching end of s2 and beginning of s3 with my girlfriend for the first time, and i just kept saying, "this is so sad!" i've seen every episode a million times, obviously, but i was struck so hard by the sadness. i love it. So. Much.