1 [Report This]Date: September 23, 2020 08:51 am Title: so she fills up her sails with my wasted breath (and each one's more wasted than the others, you can bet)
This is a really good take on these conversations about what Jim was thinking during this time period.
1 [Report This]Date: January 04, 2019 05:45 pm Title: i'm crying 'cause i'm in love with you (you're crying 'cause you have no clue)
Your writing literally gave me shivers, it is just stunning. You are so talented.
7 [Report This]Date: November 15, 2007 05:28 pm Title: i'm crying 'cause i'm in love with you (you're crying 'cause you have no clue)
“Yeah, there is. I lied when I said your haircut was nice. I miss your old hair. Also, I’m in love with you.”
Love that line!
Author's Response: Thank you! It's one of my favorite lines, too, Sharky!
Date: November 15, 2007 08:55 am Title: i'm crying 'cause i'm in love with you (you're crying 'cause you have no clue)
I love Brave Pam and her saying just what she wants to say. And the picnic and the fight and THEM. So beautiful and filled with such genuine emotion. This was so perfect from start to finish.
Author's Response: Thank you for such a kind review, bitterpill! I'm so thrilled that you liked it and that you felt it was genuine. It was something I wanted so much to convey. Thank you for reading!
10 [Report This]Date: November 11, 2007 09:30 am Title: i'm crying 'cause i'm in love with you (you're crying 'cause you have no clue)
This really is magnificent. You have such a finely tuned ear for their personalities and their nuance that it's like I can hear the pitche-perfect dialogue in their voices. Beautifully, beautifully done.
Author's Response: Shassafrass, I am so pleased that you felt you could hear their voices in the dialogue. I struggled so hard, especially with the last chapter, to make sure things felt... real. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Thank you for taking the time to comment.
Date: November 10, 2007 09:30 pm Title: i'm crying 'cause i'm in love with you (you're crying 'cause you have no clue)
What a beautiful piece of writing. Your second chapter really gave me insight into Karen and the third one, well, just lovely.
Author's Response: Thank you for such a wonderful review, Beeswax! While I am obviously on Team Jam, I do feel so bad for Karen... she just was in the wrong place at the wrong time. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this story. Thank you for reading!
9 [Report This]Date: November 10, 2007 04:59 pm Title: i'm crying 'cause i'm in love with you (you're crying 'cause you have no clue)
What a great chapter! I really like how you handled the way Pam & Jim talked through their heartache.
Author's Response: Thank you, Vampiric Blood! I like to think Jim and Pam are very stop-and-go when it comes to arguing. Thanks for reading!
10 [Report This]Date: November 10, 2007 02:39 pm Title: i'm crying 'cause i'm in love with you (you're crying 'cause you have no clue)
"Jim’s voice is suddenly cautious and guarded and Pam can feel the drawbridge leading to the fortress of his heart pull upwards slightly, threatening to leave her stranded on the other side of the moat."
this imagery is gorgeous. excellent writing.
Author's Response: Waltisafox, thanks for such a great review! I'm so pleased you enjoyed the story.
Date: November 10, 2007 02:12 pm Title: i'm crying 'cause i'm in love with you (you're crying 'cause you have no clue)
LOVED it! I was glued through the whole thing and spot-on dialogue. Way to go!
Author's Response: Thank you, Orfice Flan! Dialogue is difficult for me, so I'm pleased you found it to be accurate! Thank you for reading!
Date: November 10, 2007 01:30 pm Title: i'm crying 'cause i'm in love with you (you're crying 'cause you have no clue)
"I lied when I said your haircut was nice. I miss your old hair. Also, I’m in love with you.”
That line really made me laugh for some reason. Aww, but I'm sad that it's over :( I really enjoyed reading this series.
Author's Response: How thrilled am I that you enjoyed reading this? Like... way beyond any normal way to describe it. I really love your stories. Like, really. And now that I've creeped you out, I'll just say 'thanks'. :)
10 [Report This]Date: November 10, 2007 11:23 am Title: i'm crying 'cause i'm in love with you (you're crying 'cause you have no clue)
Oh, Lindsay. This entire thing is full of so much brilliance and I adore it. But this one, yes. This is completely what happend after Jim and Pam started dating, and this is so how that conversation went down. I believe it. Gah, never stop being so awesome, okay? You're officially my hero. Hee.
Author's Response: I'm working on an awesome potion that never wears off. I had to use the smart part of my brain to figure it out. *loves* Thank you. :)
Date: November 10, 2007 11:14 am Title: i'm crying 'cause i'm in love with you (you're crying 'cause you have no clue)
Aww, hope you're feeling better, HC!
This sums Jim up very nicely, I think:
“So where do you see yourself in ten years?”
“Wherever you are, Pam.”
Guh. Nicely done all around.
9 [Report This]Date: November 10, 2007 06:30 am Title: i'm crying 'cause i'm in love with you (you're crying 'cause you have no clue)
Great writing style heartcarved. I like how your use of words paints such vivid pictures. I can see as well as feel what you are writing.
A particular favourite passage from the 3rd chapter:
and Pam can feel the drawbridge leading to the fortress of his heart pull upwards slightly, threatening to leave her stranded on the other side of the moat.
Looking forward to reading more from you.
10 [Report This]Date: November 10, 2007 05:17 am Title: i'm crying 'cause i'm in love with you (you're crying 'cause you have no clue)
Fact: This story was amazing. And Perfect. Seriously, this chapter was so well written (as were the past ones lol). I got a little scared with "Jim and Pam's first fight". So thank you for resolving that quickly, and moving on to a fluffy sweet moment, haha. And the ending, all i can say is: niiiiiice
10 [Report This]Date: November 10, 2007 03:26 am Title: i've done what i could for you (and i do know what's good for me)
Excellent, excellent job. I would be writing a novel if I went into specifics. Suffice it to say that I really enjoyed it.
Date: November 09, 2007 10:33 pm Title: i'm crying 'cause i'm in love with you (you're crying 'cause you have no clue)
This could easily have gone in the direction of too much angst or too much schmooze, but you strike such a perfect balance that I'm not even sure what to call this.
Beautiful works, though, I guess; the way you use your words to come up with images and feelings and thoughts that just fit, so perfectly, it's just...amazing. The first three dates seemed lovely [and you did the right thing by not going into detail because that would've made it seem far too fluffy for a story this good to be taken seriously ;)] and I loved that this fourth date, the one where they were Jim and Pam, and JimandPam, this was the date where they hashed things out for the first time. And it was the one where Pam decided to be Pam and finally say things - and I adored the way that happened, as well, smushed in after a line about missing the old hair.
Wherever you are, Pam - I mean, look at that, that could've gone cheesily and too sweet, but it was perfect, especially after the angsty chapters that led in to this and the fight. Just, frgh, I adore this. I can't even begin to tell you why and what I loved about it [I'll just sound like a nonsensical mess, like this review already ascertains] but at least you'll know I really, really love this story. So.
Write more! :D
10 [Report This]Date: October 31, 2007 08:16 am Title: so she fills up her sails with my wasted breath (and each one's more wasted than the others, you can bet)
ya know, this story probably reflects jim's true emotions at that time better than most stories i read. you're very good at describing the feelings but still true to the character by what he says. very good, i love this story so far. can't wait for the next!
Date: October 31, 2007 06:51 am Title: so she fills up her sails with my wasted breath (and each one's more wasted than the others, you can bet)
This is great, you really portray the voices of all four characters well. I especially like this chapter. There's *still* so much fan criticism of what Karen or Jim "should have done" after The Return but I think you capture how from Jim and Karen's point of view there wasn't a clear definition of what was "right" or "wrong" in the situation. I sympathize with both character so much. I love the end, how he may try to think about Karen, but he still ends up dreaming of Pam, that pretty much sums up S3 Jim.
Date: October 30, 2007 07:48 pm Title: so she fills up her sails with my wasted breath (and each one's more wasted than the others, you can bet)
"But he dreams of a girl with curly hair and she’s smiling and clutching his arm. Even with that giant sombrero on her head, she’s the most beautiful thing he’s ever seen and he knows he will always hope."
thats so sad ans so true.
beautifully written!
Date: October 30, 2007 12:42 pm Title: so she fills up her sails with my wasted breath (and each one's more wasted than the others, you can bet)
I like that you mentioned that Jim feels D-M is just a job, rather than a career, because I think that parallels quite nicely with the fact that Karen was, as Jim admitted in "A Benihana Christmas", a rebound relationship. ... wow. That was the longest sentence in the world. Sorry! But, I hope you know what I mean. Wonderful as always! <3
Date: October 30, 2007 11:42 am Title: i've done what i could for you (and i do know what's good for me)
This story is magic. I love it so much, and I can't wait until the third convo is up.
Date: October 30, 2007 08:27 am Title: i've done what i could for you (and i do know what's good for me)
I'm really enjoying this -- it's a little hard to revisit this time period because it was so sad for all characters involved, but you've got some lovely nuances here in the character development and I'm sympathetic towards them all.
Date: October 30, 2007 08:06 am Title: so she fills up her sails with my wasted breath (and each one's more wasted than the others, you can bet)
This is incredibly lovely. Brings me right back there to when everything was what ifs and should-have-beens. It's almost comforting to go back there now - knowing things work out eventually.
Looking forward to the third conversation...
Date: October 30, 2007 06:39 am Title: so she fills up her sails with my wasted breath (and each one's more wasted than the others, you can bet)
This is really beautifully written. I like glimpses into the minds of these characters, and you really do a service to everyone involved. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Date: October 29, 2007 11:34 pm Title: so she fills up her sails with my wasted breath (and each one's more wasted than the others, you can bet)
Love love love. You have such a good way of getting right into the heart of the matter.