10 [Report This]Date: November 18, 2007 07:36 am Title: 8:15 AM
Thanks for this beautfiul ending, Shass. I was missing this story. "I decide against showering. I want to carry her smell with me for as long as I can get away with it"--wow...what a fantastic line. Absolute perfection.
Date: November 18, 2007 07:27 am Title: 6:22 AM
You don't know that one of my earliest thoughts upon waking this morning was "what happened to Earlier? Did that ever get finished- I need to check" and then WHAM! There it is. Thanks for this story- I thoroughly enjoyed it.
I also really liked this Pam. I think the "Earlier" title applies for her as well... because it depicts a more S4 Pam: unafraid take charge Pam without the gut wrenching 'growth' of S3. So, it's not out of character at all, just ..."earlier"!
Thanks again.
Date: November 18, 2007 06:04 am Title: 6:22 AM
I had to go back and reread from the beginning. Just amazing.
Date: November 18, 2007 05:15 am Title: 6:22 AM
Nice ending to this story, Shass. Beautiful imagery throughout, especially with the sunrise. Loved the lines:
"I guess you're right. I just can't imagine..."
"A day of work without pain?"
"Wow. You too, huh?"
No more tortured Jim! (although he's pretty hot) Glad to hear that the writing bug is back for you, as that = more stories. :)
9 [Report This]Date: November 18, 2007 12:04 am Title: 6:22 AM
Wow. What a lovely end to this story! I love the symmetry of the first and last chapters being the start of two very different days! Really enjoyed this one.
10 [Report This]Date: November 17, 2007 12:12 pm Title: 10:45 PM
IT'S BEEN 10 DAYS!
I'm going through withdrawl!
Please write more??
10 [Report This]Date: November 08, 2007 12:48 pm Title: 10:45 PM
Jesus. Ok, first, "In the low orange light, she shines like a pool of milk" is a GREAT line. And second... once again, Shass, you've made me envision a bra and pantied Pam Beesly.... and BOY, does that look good. Really love this...
Date: November 07, 2007 10:30 pm Title: 10:45 PM
Hooray! I am very happy.
Date: November 07, 2007 10:23 pm Title: 9:40 AM
Ohhh. This chapter leaves me speechless. Thank God there's more!
Date: November 07, 2007 10:21 pm Title: 9:20 AM
Oh, God, it's so raw and destructive, and f*cking ADDICTIVE. I admit it: I love the angst. It could never have happened to this extent on the show, but I'm loving the hell out of this story. So fabulous.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your sweet reviews. That really is the thing, isn't it? We crave the angst and the yearning even more then we want release from it. Which really says something about human beings, man. We're a funny, fucked-up lot.
Date: November 07, 2007 10:17 pm Title: 8:55 AM
Uh--oops. Jim, Jim, Jim. I have so much to warn you about, season 2 Jim. But, alas, I cannot. Also, I have a feeling you'll end up pretty happy in this fic. ;)
Date: November 07, 2007 10:15 pm Title: 8:32 AM
Oh, holy crap! Nicely done, Pam. I mean, painful as hell, but absolutely necessary. Excellent chapter.
Date: November 07, 2007 10:12 pm Title: 8:15 AM
Oh, hello, I believe I've just DIED here! Michael Scott, I will fillet you like a bass. Drive into the lake, Michael. Listen to the GPS! Do it!
10 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2007 09:48 pm Title: 10:45 PM
this part of the story was nice in that it was gravelly and raw and full of emotion, much like your previous chapters (which is why i love reading what you've written so far - it goes past fluff into gritty, gristly stuff that i've come to crave - that's what she said) but umm..could pam have at least rinsed out jim's mouth before straddling him? ...or maybe that's where the beauty lies, that she's still willing to make out with pukey jim.
Author's Response: Ah, yes, puke-breath...It might have been different if he'd blown chunks...But you have an excellent point. I think I will go back and fix it...Thanks so much!
Date: November 07, 2007 09:13 pm Title: 8:15 AM
I don't know if I have commented on this yet but I couldn't wait any longer. First off I want to say I didn't any impression of a rape on the previous update. Now this last chapter OMG! Unbelievable, that's all I can say!
Author's Response: Thanks so much. The feedback keeps me going, it really does.
Date: November 07, 2007 08:11 pm Title: 10:45 PM
"I catch my own weary eye in the mirror and promise my suspicious reflection that I will devote myself to her and her happiness every day for the rest of my life."
GUH.
This was awesome. This line may be the most perfect ever written.
Author's Response: Jeezuss, that's high praise! Thanks!!!
Date: November 07, 2007 07:37 pm Title: 10:45 PM
Soooooooooooooo good.
I was instantly won back to this story with this line: “Your pants didn’t come down by themselves.”
And by the time I got to this line: "The day I met you, I thought…” I shake my head at my stupidity. “…I thought you were the woman I was going to marry.”
Jeeze, you're good. And I just loved Pam taking control and how completely dazed and overwhelmed Jim was. Excellent, amazing, too many good parts to quote. I loved it!
Author's Response: Yaaay! Thank you thank you thank you. You make this whole exercise such a delight, I'm telling you...
Date: November 07, 2007 07:20 pm Title: 10:45 PM
Just read it again. It's a nice twist to see a world-weary Pam and a scared-shitless Jim. I'm glad that he has the chance to redeem himself.
Author's Response: Thanks Nan. I kept thinking about how we really don't know what goes on behind closed doors and that there are parts of us that remain hidden until they're sprung and that we're only just getting such a small part of the picture of who they are during the "documentary." I also love how the writers managed to do away with the notion that Pam was 'innocent' by doing the intro about the sex tape she ordered. I stand by the strike, but God, I'm going to miss them.
Date: November 07, 2007 07:11 pm Title: 10:45 PM
Beautiful, Shass, and crazy, too. Love it. "...grateful for my orangutan-like arms and the strength in them"--there you go again, making me laugh through the angst.
Date: November 07, 2007 01:32 pm Title: 9:40 AM
If it makes you feel any better, I just read this and I didn't get the impression of rape at all...rather - angry, confused, cathartic sex...but it was pretty clear to me that Pam was part of that vortex too. And the shift to him crying and overwhelmed with it all, and her tenderly dressing him? Yowza. Very intense.
Author's Response: Thanks so much. I did go back and do a little editing to make sure that I got my point across, but still wanted it to feel rough. I'm working on the next chapter now...
10 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2007 12:35 pm Title: 9:40 AM
Oh no.... Hot, animalistic fucking is in the forecast... CANNOT WAIT. : )
Author's Response: He-heh. Such a dog.
10 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2007 07:27 am Title: 9:40 AM
I should have noticed the "dubious consent" warning, because that part hurt me. I can't picture Jim being like that... but then you won me back, somehow with his, "It wasn't supposed to be like that," and with Pam looking sad and terrified about it, and with Jim crying, and Pam taking care of him and redressing him, and helping him to her car. I'm kind of speechless after this.
Author's Response: I am so sorry that you or anyone else got blindsided by this. "Rape" is not what I was going for at ALL. More like 'hate-fuck' which can get pretty rough on its own, but hopefully, I will further soften the situation with what comes next. Thanks so much for your thoughtful commentary. I can't tell you how much I appreciate it.
10 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2007 06:28 am Title: 9:40 AM
Boy oh boy. So raw. I love how in the midst of all the anguish and emotion, you manage to pull off a line that nearly makes me laugh. For instance, "...and guides my head in like something out of a COPS rerun." I think it's what makes your dialog so authentic. It goes without saying (but I will anyway), that I wait anxiously for the next installment.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Nan...I'm a little freaked out that it read as 'rape' though, because it's SO not what I was going for. Hopeully I'll be able to clear it up in the next chapter...
10 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2007 01:10 am Title: 9:40 AM
this was one of the best chapters of fanfic i've ever read - so full of raw emotion. and raw sausage falling off tables. BEST LINE EVER.
the suspense is killing me already...can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm working on it...
Date: November 06, 2007 09:46 pm Title: 9:40 AM
Gotta say, I am not a fan of the Pam rape. I mean, I'm still a fan of *you* but I think this story has taken a darker turn than I am prepared for.
Author's Response: Shit! SO not intended as rape. I went back and fixed it. This is more hate-fuck territory.