10 [Report This]Date: November 06, 2007 09:40 pm Title: 8:15 AM
every. fucking. word. is. perfect.
That is all.
Author's Response: I just realized it reads more as rape than hate-fuck and I've got to go fix that, but thanks, honey. You're the awesomest.
10 [Report This]Date: November 06, 2007 07:08 pm Title: 9:20 AM
oh jim. come to my house, i wont play with your heart!!
hurry and update this please so i can breathe again!! GO AFTER HIM PAM.
Author's Response: Yeah, well, maybe he likes it, too?
Date: November 06, 2007 06:44 pm Title: 9:20 AM
And the ripping and rendering of emotions continues between these two. That's right, kids, better get all that crap out of your systems.
C'mon, FNB, get up and follow him. Finish this.
I'm totally loving first person Jim too. So intense and we love that a lot.
Author's Response: EH, I love your comments. It's funny how much we miss the pain, isn't it? As happy as we are to have them together, it's the yearning that drove us all to swooning.
10 [Report This]Date: November 06, 2007 06:12 pm Title: 8:15 AM
I've been thinking about this story all day and I think I've finally hit on why it's had such an impact on me (besides the fact that it is written in your amazing style).
It's the fact that this is first person. It's so freaking raw...the way you describe Jim's emotions is just so awfully real and painful and you can't help but be affected by it. You know I love the angst, but this takes it to such a visceral level. I'm almost afraid (but in a good way) to see what comes next.
Author's Response: *Sigh...* You're wonderful. There's something I've discovered about writing that has begun to thrill me and that's what happens when I let myself drop into someone else's shoes, even a guy, and then just eavesdrop. Kind of like in "Being John Malkovich," it's almost a physical sensation...my ears feel like they've been plugged full of cotton when I come out of it...like a hypnotic state...Someone once told me that it took a lot of empathy to be a good lover and I'm realizing that the same can be said for trying to be a good writer...
Date: November 06, 2007 02:39 pm Title: 9:20 AM
The entire office is pressed up against the doorway like something out of a Marx Brothers movie. Speechless in embarrassment, they part to let me out.
“Show’s over, folks.” I manage, and walk straight out of the office, without even bothering to put on my jacket. Amazing. I can just picture it.
10 [Report This]Date: November 06, 2007 02:26 pm Title: 8:15 AM
Guh. I just had a seizure. I can't even pretend to imagine where this is going.
Date: November 06, 2007 08:08 am Title: 8:55 AM
I've had this idea in my head for a while, like on some level Jim had to be kind of angry at Pam, because maybe on some level she kind of got off on the whole being worshipped thing? Anyway, you took that idea and nailed it to the wall and just YES! Plus, I've reread 8:15 more times than is healthy. Excellent writing that just sucks you in from the first line. It's okay with me if you drag this one out a while-- build that sweet tension even more!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for AGREEING with me! Agh, it drove me NUTS that we never got to see him take her to task for that. But then she did suffer terribly last season. I just wanted to see it play out a little more...
10 [Report This]Date: November 06, 2007 05:19 am Title: 8:32 AM
Okay, just wandered on over to MTT to pass a few minutes before I have to leave for my office (mind you, I haven't had time to read ANYTHING lately!), and stumbled across this.
HOLY GOD, woman! I think my concentration is absolutely shot for the day, just so you know. :o)
Seriously, though -- your writing style is just lovely, almost luxurious, if that makes any sense. The Pam as compass metaphor was breathtaking, as are even the subtlest of your turns of phrase -- love your description of Darryl as "calm as a lake," because that's always so true of him.
Anyway, really intriguing, this!
Author's Response: You cannot even imagine how it feels to get a review like that from my favorite writer here. Thank you SO much.
Date: November 05, 2007 07:44 pm Title: 8:55 AM
MORE ?!
please and thankss !
this is amazing ! :D
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
Date: November 05, 2007 05:41 pm Title: 8:55 AM
OOoOoOoOo.....All I can say is with quick changes in emotion like that it's a passion no water can put out! Damn....Halpert did it this time! It's clear that emotions are flying high, but I think it needs to be said. Everything needs to be sorted out before they can finaly be together, Great part, can't wait to see whats gonna happen next!
Author's Response: Heheee! I'm working hard on the next one. Passions ain't the only thing flying!
Date: November 05, 2007 04:18 pm Title: 8:55 AM
If ever there was a conversation I wanted to see, it's this one. Man oh man, this was good.
“You KNEW! You KNEW and you—and you LIKED IT!”
So many times I wanted Jim to call Pam out just like this.
8 [Report This]Date: November 05, 2007 02:13 pm Title: 8:55 AM
WHOA Nelly. I mean that in the best possible way. Yowsa.
Author's Response: It might get bumpy. And I mean THAT in the best possible way. Thanks!
Date: November 05, 2007 12:33 pm Title: 8:55 AM
"Oh God" indeed, Shass! Keep it comin'! This is so passionate and angsty and FREAKIN' FANTASTIC!!!! Smackdown in the ladies room!!!!
10 [Report This]Date: November 05, 2007 07:08 am Title: 8:32 AM
"She is True North." Beautiful. Oh.my.god. I'm dying here.
Author's Response: Wow. Thanks so much, I'm so glad you're digging this...
10 [Report This]Date: November 05, 2007 06:11 am Title: 8:32 AM
Holy sh#%! Shass, that is great stuff! I love how... feral your writing is. Sex and violence and fury are always RIGHT THERE in your stories, barely contained. And then you write something like “Agh. Lost my choo-choo." and I laugh. Really great. Oh, and "She is True North" is a GREAT line.... Can't wait to read the rest!
Author's Response: Hey baby! I'm really glad you're enjoying this, but dude, get back on your horse! I'm like DYING over here for the next act in EMPLOYEE WITHHOLDING! You left us with a fucking cliffhanger!
Date: November 05, 2007 06:07 am Title: 8:32 AM
So wish she would have done that.
Author's Response: Yeah, me too! Ah the magic of fan fiction! Thanks!
Date: November 05, 2007 02:05 am Title: 8:32 AM
How are they ever gonns get through the rest of the day?!?! DAMN! still sooo good. Oh poor tortured Jim! Please continue this is awesome!!!
*It's so awesome, it's office*
Author's Response: Thanks! Poor tortured Jim really was hot, wasn't he...I almost...miss...him.
Date: November 04, 2007 10:09 pm Title: 8:32 AM
Wow, that was so painful and yet, realistic. I loved that Jim upped the ante (no pun intended) with touching her leg as she walked by. Can't wait to see what happens next!
Author's Response: It's funny how much of a sucker I am for the angsty stuff...I love that you appreciate it! Thanks so much!
Date: November 04, 2007 09:02 pm Title: 8:32 AM
I can’t look away, and my whole body slowly swivels the chair towards her like the needle in a compass.
Just one of my favorite lines in this chapter. I don't think I took a breath during the whole thing! So good.
Author's Response: Ah! Just what I wanted to hear! Thanks so much!
Date: November 04, 2007 08:56 pm Title: 8:15 AM
I can barely breathe. “I will not let you go if I have you," I hiss. "Ever. Do you understand me?”
TUNA! Are you kidding me? This is ridiculously hot.
Author's Response: HaHAAA! Just wait till we land this baby...Thanks!
Date: November 04, 2007 08:15 pm Title: 8:32 AM
Something about the way you write makes everything sound hot/sexy/painful/amazing, and uhm I think I'm going to chase that feeling. Angsty!Jim is amazing, and if he continues to be Angsty!but-still-very-In-Control!Jim, then I think this is going to be very good.
This is amazing, and I can't even begin to tell you how ridiculously excited I am that you're doing this again. I can't wait for an update. Seriously.
Author's Response: Ha! Hi Moo! Missed you and your thoughtful responses too! I'm hoping that I can make this one a little more realistic and true to character...
Date: November 04, 2007 08:06 pm Title: 8:32 AM
Wow. Okay, I love your writing style. You subtly weave in these similes and metaphors that are so vivid and effective. Like this:
When he emerges, she shadows him like she’s using him for cover, veering away towards her own desk at the last minute, trying to avoid my gaze. I reach my hand behind me just in time to barely brush the tips of my fingers against her soft hairless calves as she passes. She draws in a sharp breath and almost stumbles the rest of the way to her station. As she sits, she disappears, hunching like a frightened soldier in a foxhole.
It's so good, because I can really see it. And Roy's cry at the end too. So good! I'm sort of glad you didn't just plunge ahead with the physical stuff. It's more real this way. Just awesome.
Can you tell I'm a bit of a fan?
Author's Response: Wow. What a great review. Thank you so much for your thoughtfulness. I'm going to try and make this as realistic as possible...
Date: November 04, 2007 07:56 pm Title: 8:15 AM
Holy Mother that's some good JAM! More please...
9 [Report This]Date: November 04, 2007 07:25 pm Title: 8:15 AM
Whew. This is gonna be good, that much I'm sure of. Cannot wait for more.
Author's Response: Thanks. I am so glad you're enjoying it...