Date: November 17, 2007 11:29 pm Title: Baby Steps
Here's one dose of rainbows and sunshine coming your way! Thanks Shan for such a great story! This was just delicious from start to finish. I loved how you were able to weave in some real dialogue from Casino Night into this chapter too! I thought Pam's reaction was completely realistic...I'm just happy she didn't break Jim's heart in your version! Way to go!
Author's Response: Yay! I'm so glad you thought my Pam was true to character. Thanks for the sunshine and rainbows :)
Date: November 17, 2007 10:47 pm Title: Baby Steps
Awww that's so adoreable! I hope you have some idea just how much we all LOVE this story! You really are a fantastic writer. And I just LOVE your Angela chapter it is hilarious so I really cannot wait for the last chapter.
Just for reinforcement:THIS IS AN AWESOME STORY!
Author's Response: Awww, thank you so much Snoz! That is really the nicest thing to say. Angela is ridiculously fun to write, so I'm having fun with the epilogue :)
Date: November 17, 2007 09:57 pm Title: Baby Steps
Hi there, I think I saw the post that maybe got you banned, but I have to say that I was silently cheering for you after I read it. I loved your honesty, and I love you writing:) I'm mesmerized by this story, thank you for that.
Author's Response:
Annika, thank you SO much for saying that! The post that got me banned was the one warning the two previous posters not to break a rule they were both breaking. So yeah, it was a bit snarky but not too bad, right? Argh.
Thanks so much for the review!
Date: November 17, 2007 09:26 pm Title: Baby Steps
Giant sigh! That was so wonderful. I am giddy and gleeful right now. Excellent, fabulous, wonderful story. You totally win!
Author's Response: Oh yay! I win! I'm assuming that I either win a dundie or a yogurt lid on a paperclip chain. Either way I'm stoked!
Date: November 17, 2007 09:22 pm Title: Quake
Oh, God. So, so good. Excellent dialogue. You've got Jim down to a science. His lines are great: "I feel unsafe in my own home," "Do you like me like me?" Fabulous. Just fabulous.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks invis! I find myself inserting a lot of italics into Jim's dialogue because he has such a great, specific delivery. So fun!
10 [Report This]Date: November 17, 2007 08:04 pm Title: Baby Steps
very nice. Loved it so much I want to snuggle up with it tonight. :-D Especially loved the bit about baby-steps, and how Jim knew what she *was* willing to admit to was really a big deal. It was proof he really did know her better than anyone else, and could appreciate her.
Author's Response: Thanks, mox! What a nice way to sum it up. He does know her better than anyone else :)
Date: November 17, 2007 07:12 pm Title: Baby Steps
All of these installments have been so well done - you've definitely got the characters' voices down! I really enjoyed this. Please please keep writing!!!
Author's Response: Thanks gwgal! I'm so glad it rings true for you.
10 [Report This]Date: November 17, 2007 06:03 pm Title: Baby Steps
Wow. You are astonishingly good at capturing their voices, their nuance. Not to mention how well you grip a reader by the throat and don't let go until they're all squishy and amoeba-like. Holy mackerel. I really don't want this one to end.
Author's Response: Oh wow. Thanks Shass! I'm a dork and usually find myself playing the dialogue out in my head until it sounds authentic. Like I said, doooork.
Date: November 17, 2007 02:43 pm Title: Baby Steps
Having Jim and Pam get together by The Dundies would have cut too much into potential storylines for the how's writers but I love reading about it! This was a great story. Just so sweet, and I love you made their love pretty uncomplicated. :)
Author's Response: Oh, I totally agree. Pining!Jim of season two is the best thing EVER. But I'm glad that you liked it :)
10 [Report This]Date: November 17, 2007 02:43 pm Title: Baby Steps
excellent chapter(s)! And I can't wait to read the rest from Angela's POV!!
Author's Response: Thanks! Angela is so, so much fun!
Date: November 17, 2007 02:10 pm Title: Baby Steps
Really nice. You deserve all the rainbows and sunshine you've been getting for this story. Don't know what Dwight would say when asked about maximum happiness. Probably a Battlestar Galactica marathon.
Author's Response: LoL,I bet you're right malcom. He would have some sort of fantastic answer, I'm sure :)
Date: November 17, 2007 02:07 pm Title: Baby Steps
Yay snuggling Jam!
Author's Response: LOL, thanks bebitched!
10 [Report This]Date: November 17, 2007 01:01 pm Title: Quake
I'm re-commenting due to massively screwy formatting...
So I definitely just did a head!desk at work when I checked and saw that not only had you added chapter 4 and I missed it (and have it sitting on my computer with comments and yet never sent it back...) but you've added chapter 5! GAH! It is unforgivable on my part. As pennance, I shall comment on this chapter thoroughly before allowing myself to move on to chapter 5. Somehow that seems to fit....
<<His voice is sort of grumbly, if that makes any sense, and his eyes don't stay on hers, which is new. >>
I believe this was spotted in Survivor Man! I went back and watched the ‘do you think it's a good idea' scene and couldn't figure out why I liked it so much. It's the voice!
<<"No, I mean, this... is huge,">>
How did you pass up the giant ‘twss'?! (Oh, an when I say "giant twss"? ...twss.)
<<"It's not stupid. We could just call a contractor,">>
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!
<<"I was going to text her." >>
It says bad things about me that I find this semi-reasonable.... It also explains a lot...
<<"That's not all they spread," Pam mutters.>>
Aaaaw snap! Nicely done!
<<"Oh... I said that out loud," Pam muses. >>
HA! I love it.
<<I just split chapter 4 in two bits.>>
... Oh. Well, now I feel less guilty... Off to chapter 5!!! Yay!
Author's Response:
Hahaha! I love that you're such a perfectionist you had to recomment. LOVE.
As for the twss.... d'oh! How could I? seriously, what is wrong with me? Although, on to your texting comment, what is wrong with *you*?
j/k! Thanks so much for the awesome review. Perchance you'll find the epilogue in your inbox later in the week :)
10 [Report This]Date: November 17, 2007 12:30 pm Title: Baby Steps
<<"Yeah," he whispers, not quite looking at her. "I'm sorry if that's weird for you to hear." >> Nice! I love how you're working some things that would come later into this, but in a much nicer/less heartwrenching manner. I'm sure Jim appreciates it as well. <<"Just... give me time. Okay?" >> Tears at work would just not be okay... too many questions.... <<Should he sleep with one leg off the bed, on the floor? >> No comment, I'm just so amused at the mental image that I felt it needed to be mentioned again. Well, darlin, it was amazing, as usual. Just beautiful!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I decided this was a good chapter to insert a little Casino Night :)
Date: November 17, 2007 12:22 pm Title: Baby Steps
*Mose stands up in the front row, applauding and whistling loudly*
Shan, this was PERFECT. I mean...wow... can it be Mose story hour for just a moment? Okay, good.
See, this really hit home for me, because I've been where Jim is. When I first told the future Mrs. Mose I was in love with her, I got the EXACT same reaction as Pam gave Jim. Which is to say, silence and a confused look on her face. And I thought for sure my world was over.
Luckily, Mrs. Mose said essentially the same thing to me that Pam said to Jim, thus alleviating my fears and causing me to step back from the ledge. And, two weeks later, she did say it to me. The rest is history. :)
So yeah, this story really resonated with me on a level I hadn't thought about in a while. Kudos to you and your brilliant mind, my friend!
Yeah...this is SO FREAKING GOOD.
Author's Response: Wow, Mose! I love Mose story hour. See, I've never been told anyone I love them, so it was kind of hard for me to guess how Jim would feel in a situation like this. I'm glad that Mrs. Mose and my Pam acted alike :) It means a lot that you connected to this on such a personal level.
Date: November 17, 2007 12:15 pm Title: Baby Steps
shan -- you should get a badge of honor for being banned from TWoP. Really. Just post on MTT when you have an update. Nobody goes to TWoP anymore.
OK, to the review. I liked your characterization of Pam -- you're right, she doesn't take leaps, she takes baby-steps. Grabbing Jim's arm to spoon her? Priceless. Really. Nice job, shan.
Author's Response:
Thanks Lisa. Getting banned was a huge shocker for me, although I was slightly snarky in my post. Thanks for the plug there though. I appreciate it!
Also, I'm glad you like my Pam :)
10 [Report This]Date: November 17, 2007 12:12 pm Title: Quake
Shan! You already know how wonderful I think this is, but I wanted to tell you that I love where you're taking this chapter! And it actually works quite well to split it right here--I'm a big fan of the cliffhanger, as you know. ;)
It's simply a treat to see this story being updated, and now, if you'll excuse me, I have to read the next part!!
Author's Response: Thanks Mose! Having to split it up actually worked out :)
Date: November 17, 2007 12:10 pm Title: Baby Steps
yay! very well written.
Author's Response: Thanks, gray!
Date: November 17, 2007 11:56 am Title: Baby Steps
The world needs more stories like this, Itellyouwhut. I love everything about this - the tension, the romance,the heartache, the the banter - you do it all in this chapter and you do it beautifully.
Author's Response: Thanks, sweetpea! I'm so glad you thought there was a nice balance :)
Date: November 17, 2007 11:46 am Title: Baby Steps
Ah, if only! I thought you did a really good job of not oversimplifying the situation or the characters here -- it wouldn't be easy for Pam. I liked this a lot!
Author's Response: Thanks thirty! I always try very hard to stray from "I love you." "I love you too." moments, because Jam doesn't make anyhting that easy, right?
Date: November 17, 2007 11:27 am Title: Baby Steps
AHHH i love you. I don't want this story to be over soon, though. Squee! is all that's going through my brain right now.
Author's Response: I love you too! Is that weird? Hee! Thanks for the review!
Date: November 17, 2007 11:27 am Title: Baby Steps
Glad I realized you'd also posted another chapter today!! Two chapters FTW!!
I absolutely love this story; you've done such a good job building and maintaining the tension, and each character is so perfectly IN character that it's a blast to see what will happen next. Well done, well done. I've enjoyed every word.
And this: "I'm never going to be the one to end this," he recovers." <<< That took my breath away. Literally. Wow.
Author's Response: Yay! I'm so glad you liked that line, Becky. I had trouble figuring out how to word it :)
Date: November 17, 2007 11:09 am Title: Quake
Hey, I'm really sorry that I didn't get back to you this week. i can't really explain, but work was awful and left me kinda brain dead. But this, this has revitalized me. It's even better than what you sent me before, and I think you've really done so well with this idea. I love how open he is, but I also love that he totally freaked her out at the end. She may just be realizing this all, but he's known for a while. Good work.
Author's Response:
You know you never have to apologize to me! You are the absolute best, and I was not upset in the least. This is why I have multiple betas-- because you all have lives :)
I have chapter 5 up now too. I have to split them up because of weird formatting issues.
Glad you feel revitalized!
10 [Report This]Date: November 17, 2007 11:07 am Title: Quake
"This is you saying that you aren't going to let the next 10, or 20, or however many years be a mistake," he says firmly.
Lovely. I simply adore this chapter, and Pam's surprise at the end is already setting us up for another exciting turn on this ride. Keep it up!!
Author's Response:
Thanks, Becky :) I'm glad you liked that line.
Chapter 5 (or really, part two of chapter 4) is already posted, so I hope you like it!
Date: November 13, 2007 02:10 pm Title: Catalyst
hey! amazing as always!!!! You must update asap!
Author's Response: Thanks, Donnelly! I'm working on ch4, but don't expect an update until later this week. School owns my soul for the next couple of days.