Date: November 19, 2007 07:59 pm Title: Intro
:( But the last line was perfect. I want to ask you if you'd consder doing a brief scene from each year, but I almost don't want to read the jouney to the end. Great job!
Date: November 19, 2007 06:24 pm Title: Intro
GITC, I really liked this, it was simple and complex at the same time if you know what I mean. I love the idea of a retrospective autumn, that's how I end up feeling, too.
Lovely job!
Author's Response: McGigi-- Thanks so much for your review. I'm so glad you thought it was simple but complex because that's exactly what I was going for. I want to get to the root of Jim and what he's feeling, but stay true to Jim's simple nature. Thanks again!
Date: November 19, 2007 06:02 pm Title: Intro
This is just gorgeous. The description of fall and how people with kids count the passage of time, really lovely. What a heartbreaking image...Jim up on the roof of Dunder Mifflin, alone, reflecting on the last ten years of his life.
Author's Response: Sweetpea--Thanks so much for your review. Jim does have a tendancy to be heartbreaking, doesn't he? Thanks for your kind words.
Date: November 19, 2007 05:16 pm Title: Intro
Oh wow -- please believe me that I am *literally* catching my breath here.
All right, before I comment on the incredible way you've gotten into Jim's head here, let me say that as a lover of autumn, this story just blew me away. I, too, get retrospective this time of year (and though thankfully, life has been kind these last few years, in the years when it was anything but, autumn was always the season when I felt that most acutely). You've articulated here the things that make autumn so magical and haunting -- "It usually hits me on one of those days…a day like today…when you can smell people using their fireplaces for the first time. It’s dark before it’s time to go home from work and there’s a chill in air, a promise of frost, and the smell of leaves and smoke."
(Sorry, my font's screwy now.)
As for what you're doing with Jim here: I can definitely hear his voice in this; we know he's an introspective guy who also has the capacity to be incredibly expressive...and we also know that when he hurts, he really hurts.
The list of years is completely intriguing, as is the concept itself -- I've been so out of the loop with fanfic for the last several weeks (months, really) -- having time to either write it or read it, and most of the time I write it. But I'm stealing the quiet tonight to catch up, and I'm so glad I did. This looks like it's going to be spectacular -- looking forward to more!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for the review. I hope you get some time to just breathe. I love the fall too and since I moved from Wisconsin down here to Texas I still miss it. Here in Austin, we still get a few crisp fall days, but I miss all the smells and the crunch of leaves and all of that. Maybe this story is a refelction of that.
You sure are right about Jim and I hate to say it, but I think I'll be making him hurt.
Thanks again for your review!
Date: November 19, 2007 04:14 pm Title: Intro
F*ck tukey, and forget parades. Thanksgiving 2007 will be remembered as the year I waited for more GITC awesomeness!!
Can't wait for more. You've got the voice down pat, and I love the reflective list. I can't wait to see what you do with this! --CH
Author's Response: But turkey and parades are so wonderful! We do, though, have your verison of a happy Jim and Pam Thanksgiving. I will be giving thanks for that. I'm so glad you think I've got Jim's voice down. I know I'm in his head, but I worry that even that is too wordy for him. Thanks as always for reading and reviewing.
10 [Report This]Date: November 19, 2007 03:47 pm Title: Intro
i'm intrigued! can't wait to read more :)
Author's Response: Glad I could intrigue you. Thanks for reading!
8 [Report This]Date: November 19, 2007 02:54 pm Title: Intro
Oh no! Another angsty Jim and Pam fic. I swear, you and Shassafrass are going to be the end of me. But I can't not read. I better add kleenex to my list.
Author's Response: Here's something to get you through the angst. Pull up a recording of "Money" and watch the kiss and realize that all of the angst is worth it. Thanks for reading and for reviewing.
Date: November 19, 2007 02:53 pm Title: Intro
So you end a brilliant story and then a week later (maybe less?) you start another one? It's like a Thanksgiving miracle, I tell ya.
This idea intrigues me to no end; the first person works well for it and I'm so anxious to see him go through all of these years. Here's to the beginning of another epic!
P.S. "100 Years" by Five for Fighting came up on shuffle while I read this chapter. It works really really well for it. Might have made me emotional. Just sayin'.
Author's Response: Wendy-- Thanks so much for the review. I'm not sure if this will be epic. I'm challenging myself to be a little more concise with this one. I have a feeling that with Jim's thoughts, less will be more. You are right about that song. And I just realized it's not on my iPod. Thanks for the suggestion. I'm off to iTunes!
10 [Report This]Date: November 19, 2007 01:33 pm Title: Intro
It's like poetry
Author's Response: Wow. Thank you so much for your compliment.
10 [Report This]Date: November 19, 2007 01:30 pm Title: Intro
ahh! i love all of your stories and i didn't think you could top Observer Effect but I think this one is going to change my mind!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your confidence in my stories and thanks for your review!
7 [Report This]Date: November 19, 2007 01:26 pm Title: Intro
I'm excited and afraid to read more of this story. You've certainly captured my interest with this intro.
Author's Response: I'm glad I captured your interest. Thanks for your review.
Date: November 19, 2007 01:23 pm Title: Intro
I love this already. I have a feeling it's going to make me cry. It doesn't seem like a Jammy fic, but I'm willing to give it a chance. I'm intrigued to know what this Jim is like, and your writing style is beautiful. It's so introspective and descriptive. I also think it appeals to me b/c I feel the same way about the Fall. it's my favorite season, and I always end up thinking back on my life. so, you have a fan awaiting the next chapter :) there's encouragement, yes?
Author's Response: Thanks so much and you are right...your review was very encouraging. I'm glad you decided to stick with this and I hope you'll be glad that you gave it a chance.
9 [Report This]Date: November 19, 2007 12:58 pm Title: Intro
Nice concept and a great start. "...to stretch out long and slow, like a piece of salt-water taffy on a shore kissed day" Being an East-Coast gal, this gave me a wistful image of summers spent at the Jersey shore. Looking forward to seeing where this is headed...as I am when I read each of your stories.
Author's Response: Thanks so much NanReg. I'm glad that I could evoke a good memory for you.
Date: November 19, 2007 12:57 pm Title: Intro
YAY! I love it so far!
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you like it so far!
Date: November 19, 2007 12:55 pm Title: Intro
Oh, this one's gonna hurt, isn't it?
Author's Response: You know it :)