Date: February 06, 2008 04:48 pm Title: there are moments
this is wonderful! it's very small, and i don't mean that to be mean or demeaning. it's these tiny moments, movements, and in some cases pleasures. people are sweaty. i love those kinds of touches! this was great.
Author's Response: Thanks!
8 [Report This]Date: February 03, 2008 08:23 pm Title: there are moments
"Pam hates sheets. Hates the way her legs become tangled up in them, the way they cling to her and make her stumble when she tries to escape…"
Interesting that Pam thinks of getting out of the bed she shares with Roy as "escaping". And I loved her switching chairs so she'd have Jim's. Nicely done.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I think at this point it's very much like escaping for Pam. She just wants things to be better and waking up in the morning with things keeping you from getting away doesn't help her.
Date: February 02, 2008 11:31 pm Title: there are moments
I really liked this. My favorite was Meredith noticing the art and then sending her the link. If you have the Season 2 DVDs, you may recall that Pam originally got Meredith in the Christmas Swap, and Pam drew a nice picture of the office for Meredith because Meredith had admired her drawings once. It's sweet. :)
Kevin leering is always funny, of course, and I love that Michael is so sad that Jim left.
Author's Response: Thanks! I actually forgot about that moment until you mentioned it. Maybe I channeled it subconsciously.
Date: February 02, 2008 10:54 am Title: there are moments
I love the idea that she switched Jim's chair for hers. Nice job!
Author's Response: Thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: February 02, 2008 07:35 am Title: there are moments
This story is a gem. I love it. Amazing how these little slices of life are so touching--especially the last two paragraphs. Great job.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: February 02, 2008 02:22 am Title: there are moments
I like this. I think you really captured the stifling oppressiveness of the office and Pam's situation, starting with the sheets. My favorite parts: the last line, and --
Kevin’s leering at her in his strange way that means he’s thinking about something else. She’s just the place holder for his thoughts and that’s oddly insulting in some off-hand way that makes her think she is spending too much time at Dunder-Mifflin.
Good job!
Author's Response: Thanks! I actually really loved writing that paragraph and knowing that she'd be annoyed by Kevin not actually leering at her and then she'd take a step back and say, "Wow, I need to get out of here."