10 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2006 06:03 pm Title: Chapter 2
Chapter2 is great! I love the interaction between Jim and Dwight. They are so good together. And Pam flashing? Wow. Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thanks, hireath! ;)
9 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2006 01:33 pm Title: Chapter 2
Love this. So glad you continued. Very funny.
Author's Response: Thanks, gotkona! :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2006 11:17 am Title: Chapter 2
I am really enjoying this. Hilarious chapter. Can't wait for more "sleepwalking" JAM.
Author's Response: Thanks, bitterpill! Stayed tuned for chapter 3... :)
8 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2006 08:37 am Title: Chapter 2
"And giggles."
Hee. I love that. Plus I was giggling imagining Dwight trying to find this lake monster or whatever it is. Really great, especially Jim's concern when Dwight gets his knife out.
Author's Response: Thanks, mixedberries - writing Dwight is a blast :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2006 06:32 am Title: Chapter 2
I laughed out loud a couple of times here! And then I got really scared at the end, because Dwight+knife=OMG. Can't wait to read the conclusion!
Author's Response: Thanks, Luna! Glad you enjoyed the emotional wringer :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2006 06:15 am Title: Chapter 2
A breast? Pam's getting daring!
Loved the diving knife and the replicator comment--so Dwight!
Author's Response: Isn't she, though! And I just love Dwight. Thanks, Lissa :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2006 06:11 am Title: Chapter 2
<><>First of all, could you draw a picture of what this sea creature looks like? Bwah, Dwight is so gullible. Second, I really loved this chapter. I like how "bold" Pam is in this fic. I can't remember who said it over at TWoP, but I am enjoying Pam being a bit of an agressor, and Jim just reaping the benefits. You rock.
Author's Response: Thanks, Jen! I'd love to see Dwight's rendering of his almost-catch ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2006 05:38 am Title: Chapter 2
I think Jim & Dwight are my favorite (non-romantic) pairing on the show, and you capture their interplay perfectly here. Of course. As usual. You rock.
Author's Response:
I'm with you on the Jim-Dwight pairing. Love their dynamic on the show. Jim would never admit it that he kind of cares for Dwight, and Dwight would never admit to admiring Jim. But he does, and so does he.
Thanks, Lis :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2006 05:33 am Title: Chapter 2
What a great, fun way to start my morning. The dialogue between Dwight and Jim is fantastic - 'Serendipity waits for no man' especially tickled me. Good idea to turn down the steam-o-meter in the first part, so you have somewhere to go by the end...hmmm, where could that be? Will stay tuned.
Author's Response: Hey, Colette, glad you liked this chapter. Hmmm, indeed. Hope the steam-o-meter goes to 11. ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2006 04:43 am Title: Chapter 2
Awesome. :)
Author's Response: Thanks, Krissy! :)
9 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2006 03:49 am Title: Chapter 2
This chapter was so much fun to read although I was really worried something would happen to Pam because of Warrior Dwight there. Jim & Pam's pranking is always enjoyable though. I'm glad to hear we are getting one more chapter!!!
Author's Response: Thanks, Gen! Should have the final chapter up tonight ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2006 01:20 am Title: Chapter 2
Okay, so I can totally forgive you for taking away the hot action from the last chapter. Because this? Is awesome. I love Jim's panic when he thinks that Pam's going to get hurt. And "fuck the tribbles," hahaha. I never knew scared Jim would be so... sexy.
I can't wait to see the next chapter. Give us back the nudity and the leg wrapping. Pretty please?
Have I ever told you that you're my favorite Office writer, ever? Because you are. This seals the deal.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks, proposals! That means a lot. And since you said "pretty please"... ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2006 01:18 am Title: Chapter 2
OK, seriously? You're Dwight is spot-on. I don't know how you do it, but it's freakin' genius. (Jim and Pam are wonderful too, but then they always are.) Also, loved "And giggles."
Author's Response: Thanks, Geinnob! Glad to hear that Dwight sounds true to you :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 09, 2006 09:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
Shan, anything I could say about how amazing your writing is seems inadequate, because, well... amazing.
I really loved this! I love the idea of the lake creature prank, and the WetJam action was incredibly hot. Even the second toned-down version is wonderfully sexy (though I hope Pam wrapping her legs around Jim makes a reappearance in the second chapter, because guh). I'm so glad that even though Pam's not completely topless anymore, that you still wrote her bold. Loved that she took the initiative and put his hands on her.
And I liked how aware Pam was of Jim physically, even before they got in the water. Wanting to trace his feet with her fingers, and getting distracted by his legs. I found the "a couple knees" line especially amusing - I would probably lose my ability to count to 2 too, if I was that close to Jim. ;-)
And the more I think about the moon being reflected in Jim's eyes, the more I fucking love those lines!!! Beautiful imagery, beautifully written, but also all the layers that can be read into that just completely floor me. So perfect, and definitely my favorite line in the story.
Though Phyllis giggling in her sleep and having "refrigerated dreams" is also pretty freakin' adorable!
Author's Response:
Wow, thanks, Shroom! Reviews like yours are why I'm fucking addicted to fanfic! Enabler!
Thank you for being so specific, too. Even though I'm unwilling to place this story in the canon universe, I still felt it was Pam's place to make the first move. Don't know why. I think I really love it when Pam's navigating the tricky line between tentative and bold. I love Jim's reactions to it (like to her trash talk in Basketball - cute!).
And when Pam is physically aware of Jim, I have to be, so...win-win-win! And I'm glad you liked the moon references, that they don't stray into cheeseball territory for you. Hope you like the next one! I'm pretty sure there's leg-wrapping coming up ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 08, 2006 11:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
I literally gasped when she put his hands on her breasts. I love it when people write her brave. And I love it when Jim pushes a little, like how he kissed her and pulled her against him. So, so sexy. Your word-choice is just beautiful. This was the perfect mix of hot and adorable.
And I loved the line about refridgerated dreams. So cute.
Author's Response: Thanks, proposals! You may have been the last person to see the original version. Glad you liked it - hope you don't mind the changes I made for the addition of another chapter :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2006 08:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
That. Was flippin Hot. Pranks AND water sex! What fun. :D
Author's Response: Thanks, moira! ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2006 07:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
"He looks back up when he realizes she's getting closer, his expression somewhere between terror and hunger" - what a great line, especially when you consider what Pam does next.
Author's Response:
Hee - yup! Always a pleasure, kaystar ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2006 06:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
Bless it girl, I am getting such a girl crush on you and your writing. Seriously, I hope that since it says you're not done, that you're, well, not done. Loved it.
Author's Response:
Hee, thanks, Jen! And, no, I think there'll be another chapter ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2006 06:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
You can be the official Jam in moonlit water correspond if you want - I'll nominate you! Great story, loved the lake creature bit, and the heat, of course.
Author's Response:
Hey, thanks, Luna! :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2006 06:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
My dearest Shan.
You have A wonderful gift: whatever the setting or time or circumstances, you have the ability to bring these characters realistically to life with humor, sexiness and grace. Your prose is both tight and deliciously evocative -- "they flirt with the elastic there." ... nice! and guh. And, and, you sprinkle your stories with the happy surprise of sentences like this one: She wishes her sweet, refrigerated dreams, and quietly exits the tent.
I salute you, Queen of Sexy-Sweet Fanfic!
Author's Response:
You wanna know the funny part? When I put in the "fridge" line, I thought, Beth's going to get that. Awesome.
Thanks so much! I love knowing what's effective for each of you. It's so rewarding. ;)
9 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2006 03:40 pm Title: Chapter 1
Nothing much to add that hasn't been said! Wet Jam is indeed Hot Jam. Wow!
Author's Response: Thanks, Morning Angel! ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2006 12:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oooh, I love wet Jim and Pam! And I would love to see how Dwight reacts to the monster in the lake. More "sleepwalking" wouldn't hurt either:)
Author's Response: Hmm, I'm thinking a second chapter might be cool... You're right, the comic possibilities of Dwight pursuing a lake creature are too good to pass up. And also, the wetJam. Heh. Thanks, hireath! ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2006 11:14 am Title: Chapter 1
Love it! It made me want more.
Author's Response: Thanks, Willow! Maybe there's room for expansion (TWSS)..., we'll see ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2006 10:16 am Title: Chapter 1
Naughty shan! Very nice.
Author's Response: Thanks, Lis ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2006 10:06 am Title: Chapter 1
Amazing, beautiful, and other such words that tell you this is so fantastic. Just the scene you put in my head of the two of them in this lake with just the moon as their light. Perfection.
And Jim's feet! Okay, so, I really hate feet a lot. But I like Jim's feet. I bet he has really attractive feet.
And I think this means that a camping episode needs to happen on the show even if it really wouldn't make sense.
Author's Response:
Thanks a lot, unfold!
So many possibilities with a camping episode - ghost stories, campfires, two-person sleeping bags...