Reviewer: JainaMac Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 06, 2008 09:31 pm Title: Did I ever tell you the one about that girl in the bar?

Stablergirl! Dear God...this story has just about flattened me.  I've actually read the next chapter (which is also brilliant) but on re-reading this one I noticed something that I just had to comment on...

I love that this chapter from Jim's point of view has him seeing that one look on Pam's face and how he just wants to capture it...What I really love is that you're pointing back to the chapter with the kiss on camera when Pam is just staring at the expression on Jim's voice and she says that she wants to burn into her memory.  So fantastic.  That connection is what makes this story(not to mention your ridiculous skills ;)  )  They're both looking into the other and seeing something that they've never had before...something that they want to see all of the time...that they want to make sure never vanishes.  I just...GUH.  I just had to get that out because to me it's just a beautiful and masterful way of telling their story...making this connection so meaningful.  I can't wait to read more :) 

Reviewer: aabchamp Signed [Report This]
Date: April 06, 2008 01:45 am Title: I didn't want to be part of your problem, but I am.

Yet another brilliant chapter. Not to mention hot. ;)

I love how you describe the intensity of this relationship and how they both stuggle to deal with it on different levels. Pam, a very rational being, is suddenly faced with something that's completely out of her control whereas Jim, who's usually very irrational, for once feels something that makes sense to him.

Also, very nice use of intertextual references.

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: April 05, 2008 08:14 pm Title: I didn't want to be part of your problem, but I am.

This chapter absolutely sparkled!  The scene with them outside...I don't even know how to describe how awesome it was.  I can almost taste the desperation bubbling up out of Jim, and Pam's confusion is so very real. LOVE IT.

Reviewer: thatswhatshesaid07 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 05, 2008 04:05 pm Title: It's not that I hate you, it's just that I hate everything about you.

this story gets better and better with each update. the only downside is that it's distracting me from my work. haha.

 

and congrats! this story is now in the top ten most reviewed =D 

Reviewer: hamrensel Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 05, 2008 01:48 pm Title: I didn't want to be part of your problem, but I am.

Woohoo!  I'm so glad that they work it out.  I can't wait to see Pam's POV to see how she is dealing with all of this.  My favorite parts:

• "You‘re like standing there all good looking and,” she looks him over, “tall, and I have no idea what I’m supposed to do with that.”
  
• “What are you like John Hughes now? Great line, Jim, very impressive,”
• his ears are buzzing with how much he feels her and how much he feels at home wrapped up in her this way.
• He breathes out against her lips and pushes her up against the brick wall behind her like maybe he can press himself into her life or like he can reach into her and find her honesty, her emotion.
• for the past hour he’s been carefully shadowing a very frosty and very restless Pam Beesly around the bar while she tries to escape him like he‘s a leper or Godzilla.

That kiss was so hot!  OMG!  I can't wait till they get things sorted out then maybe we can get some smut!  Please!!!

 

Reviewer: iwantphillyjim Signed [Report This]
Date: April 05, 2008 11:42 am Title: I didn't want to be part of your problem, but I am.

you totally kick ass with this story, i really love it.

Reviewer: Sweetpea Signed [Report This]
Date: April 05, 2008 10:50 am Title: I didn't want to be part of your problem, but I am.

I got all tingly reading this in final form!  I love Jim's need for her and his desperation to get in and get at her honesty and the kiss is blistering hot.  ::sigh::

Reviewer: Kate Shepherd Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 05, 2008 10:42 am Title: I didn't want to be part of your problem, but I am.

I just melted.

Seriously, you made me laugh, you made me cry, you made me squeal with all around excitement!

Thanks for the update!

Reviewer: Alie_Woos Signed [Report This]
Date: April 04, 2008 10:42 am Title: Did I ever tell you the one about that girl in the bar?

omg i love it! their subtle flirting.. it's cute :).

I can see this go ways.. either Pam will totally own that bitch and tell her to get her paws off her man.. or she will be so mad that they're pretty much back to square one. Which i can see you do! but come on, he pushed her away! Give the boy a chance... god i love you're angst..

Reviewer: rulesofjinx Signed [Report This]
Date: April 04, 2008 07:35 am Title: Did I ever tell you the one about that girl in the bar?

you're just a fan of this angst aren't you? you love torturing us! just when we think this new fictional/awesome/mean/angry/weird-but-wonderful Jim and Pam get to be happy we get a "stupid bitch and her stupid tongue". grrr. 

but i need to tell you that i love the way you write. i love their voices, and how it's a constant flow of thought that even when it's sporadic just makes sense! i love it. sorry i waited 19 chapters to tell you that. i am always anxiously awaiting an update to this story. just so you know.  

Reviewer: aabchamp Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 04, 2008 03:03 am Title: Did I ever tell you the one about that girl in the bar?

I don't often review (mostly because I'm too lazy, but don't tell that to anyone... ;)), so the fact that I'm actually writing this should be enough to tell you how absolutely fantastic this story is. I'm literally blown away and have been from the get-go.

I'm often apprehensive about AU fics, but this one is just so well done. You really understand how to create believable characters who are true to the originals despite the alternate universe. That's not an easy thing to do, but you've done it flawlessly. You honestly have a way with words that one can only be jealous of.

As for this chapter, I could give numerous examples of how you beautifully capture the emotions of these characters, but I want to highlight just one thing.

"He thinks she looks at him like that because she really sees him. He thinks she knows him, somehow.

He’d thought it earlier, here in this parking lot, and again when he’d kissed her in the office, with the cameras rolling and his insecurities completely on display.

(...)

And in those moments, god, it was like she totally got it. She had this look on her face like she knew, like she believed him, and she’d never really looked at him that way before and it had been…

He’d wanted to pocket that look."

I was literally on the verge of crying when I read this, and despite having read it more times than I can count by now, it still gets me everytime. What's amazing to me is that through Jim's point of view you manage to capture the emotions of both characters. Because you shift points of view throughout the entire story, we sense that Pam actually feels the way Jim describes, even though she isn't quite capable of acknowledging it herself yet. So in reality Jim describes what we as readers already know, but the fact that he is able to recognize the degree of their mutual understanding shows us just how strong the connection and emotional bond between the two of them is.

Sorry if this was a little incoherent. I'm in awe and don't quite know how to express my love for this story.

PS. And here is another reason why I almost never write reviews: They tend to get out of hand in terms of quantity. :/

Reviewer: nepats2oo5 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 04, 2008 12:10 am Title: Did I ever tell you the one about that girl in the bar?

All I can say is that it had better not be another long wait between this chapter and the next. It was hard enough waiting for this chapter. And with this cliffhanger you've left? Practically impossible.

I guess what I'm trying to say is, get your ass back from Scotland and write, girl, write!

I mean that in the nicest way possible. Truly.

BTW, this was freaking amazing. I loved it. I even saved it for after JK was on Conan. (And you should know that JK is a hard act to follow. Just ask that skier that was on after him.) So that's saying something. And I was not disappointed by the true awesomeness of it.

And if you'll excuse me, I'm going to read it again. :D